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Name: sirius potter black (Signed) · Date: 03/05/12 14:28 · For: Chapter 1
The ideals of bellatrix and how she teaches narcissa those ideals is very idealy potrayed.An engaging,interesting and very dark story.Awesome writing.

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Name: The_Real_Hermione (Signed) · Date: 10/30/10 19:09 · For: Chapter 1
I really enjoyed this fic - you captured boh Bella and Cissy perfectly. I loved the repetition of the opening and the ending - it has a nice circular effect, that evil will keep going on and on.

One of my favourite lines was "Aunt Walburga has removed her." - It was the perfect line for Bella.

The small canon problems - with ages etc. - didn't bother me much, as this is a fic about character and I thought it was done nicely.

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Name: snowyowl12 (Signed) · Date: 10/22/10 13:57 · For: Chapter 1
....oh god... by reading this I felt the cruelty of bellatrix *shudder* I hope scorpius doesn't grow like his relatives.

Author's Response: One can only hope. It was fun writing from Bellatrix's perspective, because she is so evil. Thanks for reviewing!

Name: hestiajones (Signed) · Date: 10/02/10 9:28 · For: Chapter 1

I enjoyed this! You can pack so many things in a short one-shot. The parallel between the ending and the beginning was nicely done, and I think your characterisation suited Bellatrix's overbearing nature.

The only issue I have is that your story isn't consistent with canon. The Black sister's ages are mixed - plus, if Narcissa was seven when the story started, Sirius would have been 3. He was born in 1959, and Narcissa in 1955. Another thing, Narcissa wasn't a Death Eater. JKR has confirmed this in an interview.

Those are a few things which wouldn't change your overall storyline if you added them. But apart from them, I thought it was a great character study of Bellatrix. Can't wait to see what else you're going to come up with. :)


Author's Response: Sorry. I can't add to save my life, and the Black family tree has never been a particular subject of mine, nor have interviews with JK. I may just put a note in or something... Anyway, thanks for reviewing!

Name: littlewolf (Signed) · Date: 09/28/10 22:08 · For: Chapter 1
beautifully haunting.

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Name: Heiress of Marauders (Signed) · Date: 09/27/10 17:50 · For: Chapter 1
Great story! I think the characterisation was all very well done. I especially liked how the ending reflected the beginning, just in a slightly different context.

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Name: Kaiserin (Signed) · Date: 09/27/10 14:48 · For: Chapter 1
Kreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeepy!!!!!! Great! But so very trully deeply kreeeeeeeeeeeeepy!

Great and amusing one-shot, though.

My answer to that lovely letters would be something along the lines of,

"Dear crazed sister Bella,
Please get a brain or a few neurones that work. Love, Cissy."

Honestly, after going into labour alone, and having to bare Voldy breathing down her neck anyway, one would think you might be slightly displeased with the Lord, uh?

Anyway, liked it very much. ^.^

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Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 09/27/10 7:56 · For: Chapter 1
This is an original idea. I like the reinforcement of the rules over and over again to Narcissa. Through Bellatrix's eyes we see a sister who was given very little choice about her way forward, but appeared to want her way of life anyway.

I have a bit of a quibble about your time line and ages. Narcissa was born in 1955 (according to JKR's Black family tree). Sirius was born in 1960, so when Cissy was seven, he would have been two. I doubt whether they'd have been able to deduce from that age that he wan't following rules. Also you say that Lucius was several years old than Narcissa, but he was a prefect when Snape and the others were Sorted, so at the most was only two years older than Narcissa. I'm also pretty sure that Narcissa was never a Death Eater. She supported them, but didn't have the Dark Mark on her arm.

I think you captured both sisters well in this fic. Bellatrix isn't totally over-the-top mad, but has a wry way with words. The bit where she's facing the Potters and exclaims that Potter was always too fast, made me smile slightly.


Author's Response: Thank you for your response. The Black Family Tree is not my strong point-- for more details, see my long work "Marauders to the End." I've gone round and round with mods about it and have finally given up since I can't add anyways. It never says in the book whether or not Narcissa was a Death Eater. That's another thing I argued with the mods about, since the Lexicon has her listed as a supporter. I thought she was and it works either way. Thank you for reviewing!

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