YAY! LEDA'S GONE AT LAST!
Im so glad things are finally looking up for the marauders and Lily. I think the way you portray the characters is brilliant especially Sirius and Lily. I aslo love the way you make Remus seem like he understands everything and everyone like at the end of the chapter when he realised why Ptere brought Lily along aswell.
Once again a fantastic chapter, can't wait for the next!
Ohh..I'm so glad everything goes to the right direction!!!
Bye bye Leda!!! :PP
I like that you prepare the situation for Peter's betrayal-you know,the one from J.K.Rowlings story,the reason Voldemort found Potter's house and killed them!
I hope you'll update soon!!
Don't be sorry for being late!! True life goes first and I hope your friend will be ok ;)
THANK YOU MERLIN LEDA IS FINALLY OUT OF THE PICTURE.
Where do I begin? This was an amazing chapter. The way you put them all into character fit perfectly. I loved the fact how Lily was in her pj's on Christmas morning with bunny slippers. I still do that and I'm 16.That was really cute and made me laugh. I also liked how Sirius was one of the first people up in the morning shaking present. Again I still do that! But, then you pictured Leda in a gown and the necklace , I mean what person does that on Christmas morning I mean for pete's (that this pete some other pete) sake give it a rest! Again when they were breaking up that was too funny I mean I was laughing so hard!!!! The fact that Lily gave them a head start is what is really funny! But, I enjoyed how Mrs.Potter hated Leda as well. I mean if his Mum could see she was bad news then why couldn't James. But, anyway I loved this chapter.It was a good one! But, PLEASE MAKE THE HOOK UP IN THE NEXT CHAPTER! please..... Once again Maggie nice job. Keep writing!
Rene Luna Smith
After Note: In the words of Taylor Swift
1.Hit me with those green eyes, baby
As the lights go down
Something that'll haunt me when you're not around
Cause I see, sparks fly whenever you smile I run my fingers through your hair
And watch the lights go out
Just keep your eyes on me
Its just wrong enough to make it feel right And Lead me up the staircase
Won't you whisper soft and slow
I'm captivated by you baby like a firework show
(I think of it as Lily and James song
2.And it was enchanting to meet you
All I can say is I was enchanted to meet you
This night is sparkling, don't you let it go
I'm wonderstruck, blushing all the way home
I'll spend forever wondering if you knew
I was enchanted to meet you
Definitely worth the wait :D x
wow. nice job. i really loved the detail at the end He really understood people, Remus thought, but for reasons he couldn’t name, reasons he was unable or unwilling to make Sirius see, it made him uncomfortable. i thought that was genius pure genius. that was a good x-mass. Leda is legitiamatily insane, to think that James would ever choose her boring butt over his best friends. Every thing feels back to normal. You don't have to answer this but i have a question. How far away lily and james to start dating? you are so good at leaveing cliff hangers.
Can't wait to get back to the castel,
Yay James! Things are looking up.
Once again a beautiful chapter that capturef the characters and is easy to imagine actually having happened in cannon. Love it. Can't wait for more!
My absolute 2 favorite parts were James watching Lily Christmas morning and James telling Leda his friends would always come first.
Great chapter loved the bunny slippers! :3)
This story is so amazing :) But the Peter problems at the end made me kinda sad... If only JK Rowling didn't make him a traitor. But I love your story and I really like the way you characterize Lily- it seems really realistic and sweet :]
Amazing. Can't Wait for the next chapter! x
I know I have reviewd recently but everyday I take a look to your reviews and I couldn't resist to write once again..
You are indeed an exceptional writer and I am so touched by this story,Trickster and Stars Apart..Your ideas, your way of presenting the facts and characters...are just great..!!!
I love Lilly's character and I like the way James and Sirius have grown up..
I know that a good word will make you stronger and more inspired maybe so I will tell you the same thing you told in chapter 12 for us,the reviewers, "You rock,too" so keep going!! We are with you!!! :DDD
Sorry for mistakes in grammar or spelling but you know I'm not British or American and it's not always easy.. :P
Your story is brilliant!
I've read quite a few and I come back to this everytime, it really is my favourite. I'm really interested in how Lily and James got together, and I think your take on the story is really gripping, heartfelt and just plain lovely! Everytime I read a chapter I just want to read more! I love to hate Leda's character, and it seems so real that James would try and move on with someone else. You keep it fresh and interesting as well. The costumes at the ball were a stroke of genius!
Am I right in thinking you're American? If so then good job with the writing. There are a heck of a lot of differences between British and American english and it doesn't come across at all in your writing, unlike some stories I've read. Please don't think I'm an English snob or anything! It's just refreshing to see someone put effort into being true to the way the characters would talk.
I hope the next chapter gets up soon, it's been too long. I'm starting to go a bit crazy without my fix!
Author's Response: haha it should be up soon! it's in queue now. and yeah, haha, guilty, i am american, but i just spent a semester in the uk, so that may have helped a little! thanks, though, and i'm glad you like it :)
So exicted for next chapter! Hope it will be tomorrow! :3)
YES! I've been waiting to read the words "it's in queue now" for so long! I am so excited for Chapter 13!
Okay, so I know I already reviewed and all but then I was craving more of this amazing story so I read this chapter again. And it is even better the second time. Okay, so I think Lily and Sirius's friendship is really sweet, and I love how close they got because of what happened with James. Like now they went from being friends to REALLY counting on each other. In most other stories, it's just Lily and Remus who are friends. Oh and I am really anxious(spelling?) to know what Lily's present to James is!
This is such an amazing story (prob my favorite) because its not so rushed. It is painful to see/read about James and Leda, but that is what makes it so good.
PLEASE update soon. I am so desprate. You control my life with this story! haha. I have gone from checking the story every other day to twice everyday. Sad, I know, but I'm addicted. I have read the reviews and you say you will update soon but when(date?)?! I'm not mad at all, just so desprate! Please Please PLEASE update soon and I will love youx1000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000! :D
(oh and can you give any hints for what will happen in the next chapter? Anything will do! :P)
Author's Response: awww thanks! and the next chapter is in queue now :)
Ahhhhh, I love this story, its awesome, I've read trickster and thought it was really cool. I cant wait for the next chapter to be up, I hope its soon :)
The endings an awesome cliffhanger, I cant wait to see how James reacts. Your an awesome writer and I hope that you have a lot more chapters to this story because i dont want it to end :P
Author's Response: awww thanks so much!! the next chapter is coming, i promise--it's bee a really busy past few weeks. but this story is about halfway through, and there will be a third installment, so no worries! there's still a bit left.
I have read Trickster several times and have been anxiously awaiting every new chapter of Stars Apart; I should have reviewed a long time ago so I'm going to go ahead and do it all in one go!
I love the way you characterize the Marauders and Lilly. Your easy balance of the serious with the comedic is excellent; it's not cliche and it is still believable. I also appreciate that the switch from dislike to like for Lilly takes a while. A lot of times you see her suddenly just fall into James' arms but this drawn out (and sometimes painful!) process seems more realistic. Especially to anyone who was in a romance when they were 17 :)
I especially like 2 things: 1) the interaction between Lilly and Petunia at the beginning of the story. It was great. So often Petunia is painted as completely horrible with no redeeming qualities but I think you portrayed the fact that they are sisters and that, as JKR hints at, Petunia really did love and want to be closer to Lilly on some level. And 2) I love the friendship between Lilly and the other boys especially Sirius. Most fics have Lilly getting along with Remus only but I think for Sirius to have been made Harry's godfather he and Lilly would have had to have had a good relationship as well.
This fic is great and I hope you are also using your talents to write many other things (though I would love if you spent all your time on J/L fics)!
Author's Response: re: lily&sirius, that's kinda what i thought! i mean, he's referred to a lot in hp as harry's parents' best friend, and lily just didn't seem like the kind of girl who would be all "my boyfriend's friends are my friends," so i just figured they had to be friends in their own right, too. that, plus the letter she wrote him in DH...they clearly knew each other pretty well. also, i love them both :) but thank you so much! i'm glad you like it, and the next chapter is actually in queue now!
I just re-read the ending to trickster.....again. That night in June seems like forever ago. I want to give you props for making all of us reader wait for Lily and James to be togther becuase once it finally happens i think it will be even more rewarding. I love how your adding all these littel sub-polts along to the story. After reading your stories i cant read another James/Lily story becuase you have me conviced that this is THE story of Lily and James. Thanks for all your hard work, I know that writing a story like this can be hard especially when you have such a ring of followers who want you to update up all the time.......its only becuase we love you. keep on telling such great stories.
Love From Your Fan,
Author's Response: aghhhh god that makes me so happy. thank you! i really am flattered. and the next chapter is actually in queue now, so it should be up soon!!
I wonder whats going to happen on Christmas day?????? Curious very Curious...
Rene Luna Smith
Love this Story! Have been with it for a couple months. I got an account (like lots of others) just to review. :3) Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: awwww thanks! haha i'm so flattered by the username :) the next chapter should go in queue later today actually!
I loved this one! Especially the ending which was both sad and cute for me. Cant wait for the next chapter!