Congrats! Good start.
Author's Response: Thanks for your review. I'm working on Chapter 2 but it's going slower than I expected. I'm sure you know how real life intervenes. I keep trying though:D
When had it become her responsibility to marry money and refill the dwindling family coffers? This was the 1970s for gods' sake.
Hehheh Bella saying "This is the 1970s" like so many other rebellious girls must have done. How old is she, exactly? That's something that would be good to work into the story to give readers a clearer picture of her.
You did a good job letting thoughts and actions portray Bella as much as the descriptions. I wonder how long she can keep her nightly outings a secret.
To be honest, Bellatrix pre-Voldemort and Lestrange is someone I can't empathise with yet, but I'm interested to see where you go with this story, and what you'll do with the hint of mental illness portrayed through racing thoughts.
Author's Response: I think the character, Bellatrix Black, was born in 1951. I think of this part of the story as happening around 1977-78, so that makes Bella 26 or 27. Between you and me, Bella will keep her outings a secret for a few months but she becomes so entranced and in love that she becomes a little careless. I won't tell you more:D I'm hoping to describe her as a vulnerable character, doing things she shouldn't do because her family is not going to approve, and her life going to the dark abyss of hell quicker than we can imagine. I want you to care about her but to pity her in the end. I don't want her to be so psychotic that her mental illnes can be blamed for her actions but for her to be a strong woman who breaks under the power of the Dark Lord. Thank you for your review. I think even you might be surprised where this will go in the end:D
LOL! I sure do like this version of Bella. Evil, all right. But yet rebellious! Lovely.
And she's bound to meet someone else with Mum's issues. Nice!
I'd like to see where this goes.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Kaiserin!! You're my very first reviewer on MNFF to my very first story. I've had fun writing this and I look forward to a lot more fun with the next chapters. I anticipate this story will be from 25-30 chapters. And, you betcha--Bella is going to meet someone else with Mum's issues:D I'm really excited about this story and I love it!! (Of course, I know where it's going.) There's going to be a lot of romance and a lot of angst. I mean, Bella can't help but have angst can she? Something made her the deadliest and most evil witch ever. I hope to have the next chapter up within two weeks. So, let's say we meet again in a couple of weeks. Deal?