Reviewer: SoGranola
Date: 03/11/13 23:38
Chapter: Son of the Air

I've really been enjoying this story, and was going to wait til the end to review, but I had to after this chapter. This was beautifully written; I love the use of the second-person POV here. I feel like 2ndP is really hard to make work but this is a stellar example of its effectiveness when done well. I also really like the reminder that the battle wasn't all wizards. And how poetic that Buckbeak got his revenge. Well done.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review.
This was my first attempt at second person. I was looking for a way to show a non-human perspective, and coincidentally there was a discussion on the boards about second-person at the time. I’ve only ever attempted it on one other occasion (Owl Post). I had to do something to mark the efforts of the four-legs in the battle.
-N-

Reviewer: witch1561
Date: 12/13/12 7:29
Chapter: The Confession of Augusta Longbottom

I've been re-reading this story and appreciating it all over again. It is a wonderful collection of chapters, showing the battle from the many different points of view of the people involved, and giving a wonderful sense of how it affected them. A battle like that would be very traumatic (as Madam Pince says, many of the participants were teenagers) and this fills out the original descriptions so well.

The only mistake I can see (and I'm assuming it's a mistake - apologies if not) is in this chapter (Augusta's). Her obituary describes her as the mother of Frances, but that's the female spelling of the name (I should know - it's my mother's name :) ) The male equivalent is Francis, often shortened to Frank. I think occasionally the male spelling is used for girls, but not the other way around and given the Longbottoms' ages and a tendency to use more traditional names I don't think this is a mistake they'd make.

Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.

As I’ve probably said, these stories were submitted to the house cup challenge on HPFF in 2010. My decision to remove them at the end of the challenge and rewrite them (the originals were written very hastily) got me banned, despite the fact that the mods had agreed. I tried to write as many perspectives as I could.

Well spotted, and thank you. I’ll edit the chapter and make that correction. I used to work for a Francis (Frank) and I went to school with a Frances, I should know the difference (like Leslie and Lesley – i is male). You are quite right about the longbottom’s use of traditional names.

Reviewer: annegirl_shruti
Date: 09/14/12 12:22
Chapter: Ouroboros

Okay, I thought that chapter 5 says Augusta Longbottom watched Roldolphus Lestrange die. But here, Lucius Malfoy says he escaped. I'm confused and I think Malfoy is too....

Author's Response: Thanks for spotting the error. I had managed to switch Rodolphus and Rabastan in this chapter. It's now fixed (as are all of those annoying symbols, I hope). -N-

Reviewer: sejackson91
Date: 07/10/12 18:07
Chapter: Index

Well done! I must admit I put off reading this story for a long time cause I didn't want to read a tearjerker. However, this wasn't exactly what I was expecting and it was brilliant. I particularly liked cho's chapter because in your later stories I always thought you were giving her too much credit as a nice person but her POV really made me believe she could grow to be a nice person. I also loved te chapters like Seamus's because his thoughts were so focused on unimportant things like who is dating who. I thought that really put into perspective that although they were fighting a battle for their lives, there were still teenagers trying to live their lives.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review.
I was tempted to submit this as twenty-five one-shots. But despite the different perspectives, many of the stories are interconnected. I see Cho as basically good, but overy emotional for Harry, who is better at dealing with a girl who gets angry and tells it as it is (Ginny) than one who bottles things up until the tears flow.
Seamus is a typical teenage boy (from what little I remember of the experience). This story is, as I’ve said, the foundation on which everything else is built. If you want to know why “my” Terry and Susan became Aurors, this is where you find out.
-N-

Reviewer: Ruchira_M
Date: 06/23/12 14:10
Chapter: Index

Another great story. You're brilliant!

Author's Response: Thank you. -N-

Reviewer: Ruchira_M
Date: 06/23/12 13:08
Chapter: Worn Out Boot

Trust Luna to change your life in one sentence and then finish it up by calmly calling Voldemort a liar.

Author's Response: Luna is good at that sort of thing. -N-

Reviewer: Ruchira_M
Date: 06/23/12 5:46
Chapter: Great to be Back

"She is an extremely intelligent woman and deserves my full attention."
Oh dear Luna- she is a rockster!!! Umm, is that an imprecise description?

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Luna is one of a kind. -N-

Reviewer: ckwright51
Date: 05/02/12 2:20
Chapter: Index

Just wonderful writing and story telling, thanks so much for doing this AND doing it so well.

Author's Response: Thank you. I hope that you’ll like some of my other stories, too. -N-

Reviewer: ckwright51
Date: 05/02/12 1:33
Chapter: Ouroboros

This one was perhaps the best chapter I love watching narcissa explaining why she betrayed voldemorte. Great job

Author's Response: Thanks. This is a question I really wanted to answer. I wanted to keep Narcissa's reasons (and morals) uncertain. -N-

Reviewer: ckwright51
Date: 05/01/12 3:50
Chapter: Snakeslayer

Wonderful wonderful such a cool story I really love Neville and love how you wrote him hereso does he eventually marry Hannah?

Author's Response: Thank you.
My stories (apart from the previous chapter) are canon compliant, and all take place along the same timeline. In fact, this story is the bedrock for most of the others.
JKR says that Neville marries Hannah, so he must, there’s no alternative for me (not that I disagree, I like the pairing). However, it’s a long story and I’ve written several Hannah and/or Neville stories (The Hufflepuff, Mistletoe Kisses, The Professor and his Landlady).
-N-

Reviewer: ckwright51
Date: 04/30/12 23:04
Chapter: Son of the Air

Love buckbeaks revenge awesome chapter great story

Author's Response: Thanks, this was one of my more experimental perspectives. -N-

Reviewer: ckwright51
Date: 04/30/12 23:03
Chapter: Son of the Air

Love buckbeaks revenge awesome chapter great story

Author's Response: Thank you.

Reviewer: ckwright51
Date: 04/30/12 0:50
Chapter: Worn Out Boot

I absolutely love what you with terry not at all what I would have expected but I will picture your description when I read the books in the future.

Author's Response: Terry is not really described at all in the books. Neither he, nor Anthony, are any more than the two friends of Ginny’s boyfriend. Terry (or Auror Boot) appears in several more of my stories. Although I’ve yet to give him a starring role, he will be co-starring (with Auror Bones) in an upcoming chapter of Hunters and Prey. -N-

Reviewer: ckwright51
Date: 04/29/12 18:37
Chapter: Bad Faith

Very funny just watching Draco blunder around the castle begging for mercy, great job

Author's Response: Thanks. -N-

Reviewer: ckwright51
Date: 04/29/12 18:37
Chapter: Bad Faith

Very funny just watching Draco blunder around the castle begging for mercy, great job

Author's Response: Thanks. I wasn’t certain about adding a “slapstick” chapter to a battle story, but I thought it needed a little lightness. -N-

Reviewer: ckwright51
Date: 04/29/12 17:38
Chapter: Voldemort Doesn't Play Quidditch

Great story and beautiful dedication

Author's Response: Thank you.

Reviewer: ckwright51
Date: 04/29/12 17:38
Chapter: Voldemort Doesn't Play Quidditch

Great story and beautiful dedication

Author's Response: Thank you.

Reviewer: ckwright51
Date: 04/29/12 16:50
Chapter: Ernest Endeavours

I love the way you intersperse moments from DH and the stories great job.

Author's Response: I spent an age reading the battle chapters and trying to figure out who was where, and when. I think it was worth it. -N-

Reviewer: ckwright51
Date: 04/29/12 16:33
Chapter: Good Bones

Yet another awesome one-shot I wonder are we going to hear from any bad guys or perhaps a Malfoy

Author's Response: As you’ve already discovered, the answer is yes. Goyle, Draco, Millicent and Narcissa are all here. -N-

Reviewer: ckwright51
Date: 04/29/12 15:25
Chapter: Great to be Back

Amazing what goes on Luna's head, I like that we see her intellect and it's not snorkcaks and nargles, I tried to make that point in book seven fic I posted.

Author's Response: Thanks.

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