I'm crying too! I like the thought of Colin being with Tonks! Great character creation also!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Polly will (sort of) reaappear in a couple of chapters, as will Colin. -N-
Yes! A Madam Pomfrey story to start things off! I realize that canon is strictly from Harry's point of view and it is very nice to read the thoughts of someone different. Your Matron is exactly the way I've always pictured her, caring and strict at the same time: her attitude that she's actually the students' "mother" for ten months out of the year choked me up a bit as did her silent cataloguing of the contents of her ledger. I'm glad Madam Pince came in to keep Madam Pomfrey company during the last few minutes of solitude. Thanks for writing this fantastic story. I look forward to reading about more of the unmentioned combatants.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. These stories started with the idea for what is now chapter 4 (Protheroe’s Perspective) and were not written in order. This was in fact the last one I wrote but it’s pre-battle, so it needed to be chapter 1. It seems that your mental picture of Madam Pomfrey is very similar to mine. I don’t think that we ever saw Pince and Pomfrey together in the books, but they are (at least in my mind) ladies of a similar age who are not teachers. I can see them being friends.
Your chapter has given me new insight into Cho's character. Ever since her disasterous date with Harry in OotP I have not been a fan of this character. However, you have given me much to consider and I am actually contemplating changing my opinion of someone I do not like.
Author's Response: This story was created from my curiosity about Cho’s arrival. She was the first of the DA to arrive after the twins, Ginny and Lee (who all arrived together). I know that a lot of people don’t like Cho she’s often shown to be feeble and tearful. But she got the call and went and fought. Why? -N-
Your Luna Logic is absolutely wonderful! I can see her pondering these subjects as she races through the Hogwarts corridors with Dean and definitely agree with everything she decides. I hope your next chapter comes out soon. I absolutely love this story.
Author's Response: Of all of the heads I’ve tried to get inside, Luna’s was most difficult. I tried to keep her inner monologue apparently logical. If I succeeded then I’m really happy. Next will be an original character. -N-
Wow! I think you hit Luna right on! That was amazing and almost exactly how I would think her mind works! That was a fun read! I also liked the previous chapter although I have no love lost for Cho, but I enjoyed seeing where she was and what you thought she might be doing during that time!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Prying inside the head of the Ravenclaw with dirty-blonde hair, and trying to figure out what is happening in their was a lot of hard work. I really hope that I have got her right. -N-
I'm definitely looking forward to see where this is going. I love that you chose minor characters!! Keep at it.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. This is simply short snatches of the Battle from different perspectives, you will, occasionally, see the same scene from two (or even three) perspectives. some of them, however, are simple one shots. -N-
I love it, it a different story than I've ever read before, and it's interesting and vey well written.
Author's Response: Thank you. The Battle hasn't started yet, not really and things will get even more interesting (I hope) and there will be other stories which are very different. -N-
Oh I hadn't noticed this was up! What a nice surprise. I particularly love this chapter. Cho is a character I love reading about but she is often given a bad rep in fanfiction and your characterisation was very refreshing. You wrote her desire to prove how she had changed very well. It wasn't too over-whelming, instead it was more of a subtle undercurrent, rising to surface at the end, and tying everything together with the scene in the Room of Requirement that we are all familiar with. I've always thought about what her life was like after the final battle, but this has really made me think more about what her life was like during the war, as well. Thanks for another great read, Neil. I look forward to the next installment.
Author's Response: Julia Thanks. Cho turned up for the final battle. She did this despite the fact that she and Harry barely acknowledged each other after their split. That shows a certain strength of character, I think. I tried to make this story understated, because that’s how I see Cho, she’s really quite a quiet girl and (in my view) not particularly self-assured. I think that she’s a bit like Hermione without the bossiness. Her final school year was the year of HBP, so this story barely scrapes the surface of what she did. Next, the story which almost turned my brain to blancmange – Good to be Back. I’ll be very interested in what people think. Neil
Okay, I don’t know what happened with the first draft of that review, so we are trying again. I love that you have a snapshot of this scene. You have such a voice, a voice in your writing that is rarely seen in fanfiction. Well, as far as you choosing the Nurse, which is a rather clever move, you bring in an aspect that I admit I’ve never really considered. Nurses are, of course, the backbone of the medical field; I’ve spent enough time in hospitals and critical care units to know that. Of course, the higher ups are important too, and I’m certainly not knocking them, but the nurses are the ones who are there through all the hell and the chaos. The Nurse is certainly not given justice and is rather forgotten, but you are right. She is the one who works behind the scenes and holds everything – and everyone – together.
She knows the goings on within the place, as you have illustrated quite well. I guess that I am guilty of what I stated above because you know, you don’t think of the Nurse till Harry or company’s gone and done something completely stupid. She is certainly entitled to have a forceful opinion about anything that goes on in that place. I wonder if she would refuse the Carrows’ treatment. She probably wouldn’t, because she lives by that motif. Have I already hinted at that ‘do no harm’ thing? That is a universal truth in the medical field, and I’m glad you put it here. Another thing that I never really wasted my time troubling with is the legalities of handling patients within the Ward. It seems as though it would make sense to have a trail like that. That’s a clever move.
The most powerful thing here, and forgive me because I am a language nerd, is that you go into the etymology of Nurse. I think that drives the point home, and perhaps that would have added a humorous flair had she actually spoken that aloud to the dimwitted Carrow. Going after the Standard English thing? Good! Oh, well, I never considered that both the Librarian and the Nurse were never actually in the battle, and you have given such life to these minor characters that it’s almost creepy how well this would have fit in. It would have just fallen into place like a snug puzzle piece without a problem; you’re giving that chapter justice in ways I’ve never imagined. The Librarian is still, still clutching to this moody, stick-up-the-butt attitude, and she’s cynical, but it shows in ways that I can’t remember ever seeing in canon that she cares.
Yet, all they can do is wait. Really well done. Keep writing.
Thanks for the long and detailed review.
When I first started planning these “Tales of the Battle” my plan was to use Madam Pomfrey in one of the later chapters, at a point where her ward was full to overflowing. But as I wrote the other stories I found that I was describing chaotic hospital scenes anyway. It wasn’t until I thought about “the calm before the storm” that I realised that Poppy’s story really had to be set in the run up to the battle.
I agree, if someone had brought one of the Carrows into the ward, Poppy would treat them, too, because that’s what she does. Knowing the etymology of Matron and Nurse certainly helped to make Carrow look like the fool he is. As for Irma, I’ve always seen Irma and Poppy as a couple of elderly spinsters surrounded by children. They (and Filtch) appear to be the only people in the school who are neither teachers nor pupils, so putting them together seemed sensible. Neil
i hope you do more of these
Author's Response: I’ve just submitted Chapter 3 – Great to be Back (-:
I love every story that you have published. They are all wonderful. I can't wait to see what else you put into this story. GRRRRReat job.
Author's Response: Thanks This is more a series of linked one shots than a novel, though it follows a single Battle timeline. Every chapter will be from a different pov and you will sometimes see the same event from more than one perspective. Some stories are first person, others third person and one will be second person (if I can manage it). A few even look back at the battle from the future.
Very good so far! Can't wait for more!!
Author's Response: Thanks – next: Galleon
great concept! i really like all of your stories
Author's Response: Thank you. N
What a fantastic idea. Neil, I love this, especially at the end when you bring in the dreaded Irma Pince. This is so clever, and I look forward to reading many, many stories of those who didn't fight. PLEASE tell me you're going to do Trelawney.
You've caught the voice of the characters well. Irma's 'Best get something to drink now.' isn't grammatically correct, but it's the way people speak. PERFECT. Oh ... constructive criticism... ummm, make it longer? Apart from that, healers should be capitalised, I think. Great job. ~Carole~.
Trelawney, I have 21 more names on my list but Trelawney isn't one of them. I''ll think about it. What about Augusta Longbottom? Many of the characters are combatants and three (at least) are Original Characters (one being Mark Moon, so I'd probably best let the Opaleye know (-; ).
So far nothing is longer than 3000 words. Neil