Reviewer: Kaiserin
Date: 11/03/10 18:19
Chapter: Protheroe's Perspective

Alright, if you've read my previous review. I'm moving you from bad writer to evil writer...

I get it, war is bad, war is sad, war means people die. I like this Goth Polly character of yours. Quite a spunky lassie, isn't she? ^.^

Author's Response: Polly Protheroe, Muggle-born Goth Auror arrived in my brain almost exactly the way she is in this story and demanded to have her tale told. I didn't dare say no! -N-

Reviewer: Kaiserin
Date: 11/03/10 17:38
Chapter: Great to be Back

Gotta love your Loopy Loony Luna... Snif. It must be my hormones or something... But I have to admit you got my eyes all... moisty.

People cry when they're sad. Making people sad is a bad thing. If you made me cry, does that make you a bad writer? *wink* I loved the way you got into Loony's mind and made it oh, so logical and understanable and... right. Oh, and go Terry go!!
Now, I'm going to go on reading. I hope I don't get all emotional... again.

Author's Response: This attempt to get into Lunaís brain was one of the most difficult things to write. I chose not to have her ask Terry the question: ďWhatís it like, to be able to loom?Ē Perhaps I should have, itís the sort of odd remark that makes Luna loony. -N-

Reviewer: Kaiserin
Date: 11/03/10 17:27
Chapter: Galleon

Hehehe... Luuuuvly. ;) Now, you nearly made me like Cho at the begining. Quite an impressive feat, since I don't hold her in a very high steem.

But the first thing that came to my mind when she jumped to Marietta's defence (yet again) was: "Cho, darling. You're a Ravenclaw. Smart, remember? The loyal ones are the Puffs!" Thankfully, she came to her senses later. After Marietta behaved like a total beatch... Better later than never, I guess.

Good, good. Quite good.Again quite like it! ^.^

Author's Response: You only nearly liked Cho? Iíve failed )-; Cho seems to get a lot of grief for no reason other than sheís emotional. She turned up to fight, she was one of the first to do so. Iím rather fond of her. -N-

Reviewer: Kaiserin
Date: 11/03/10 17:12
Chapter: The Calm Before

Liked it. Seems very akin to the Pomfrey I have in mind. Specially fond of the Carrow, loathing parts. Prince's touch was interesting too. I could very much picture the both of them gossiping the night away, in happier circumstances.
Liked it. Yup. Liked it quite much. Gone keep reading.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Poppy Pomfreyís job is to patch up injured children, the Carrows seemed to delight in hurting children. They were never going to be friends. N

Reviewer: witch1561
Date: 11/03/10 15:17
Chapter: Justin Time

I think you've done well with this one, although I think it's harder to do as Justin doesn't appear all that much in the books. Just a small point - domicile for tax is about where your father comes from: for Mr Finch-Fletchley to be domiciled out of the UK (I don't think it specifies a country) his father or paternal grandfather would have to be from Monaco, and with a name like his I find that unlikely. However given what we know about him chances are he has money there he hasn't told the UK government about! And probably Monaco is happy to have him.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Justin was (almost) a blank page. He could have gone to Eton and heís got a double barrelled surname. I admit that I did (a little) research on tax. I know almost nothing about tax law in relation to the very wealthy (or even the wealthy). Another check shows that you are right. It appears that it is legally impossible to be domiciled in the UK, too. You have to be English, or Scottish etc. not British. I will rewrite that section. -N-

Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 10/30/10 18:31
Chapter: Abbott Ails

I'm crying! You brought out a part of the story that I dont think JK did justice to. George's grief over Fred had to have been horrid and I also wanted to know how he found out! I like your spin of him not being alone and Hannah being there to comfort him! Well done!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Two deaths (Fred's and Colin's) will continue to affect the protagonists in these stories. I wanted George to have someone who understood with him and to me Hannah was the obvious choice. -N-

Reviewer: fanficwriter
Date: 10/29/10 8:23
Chapter: The Calm Before

What a touching story! I absolutely love the way you present it!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. -N-

Reviewer: the opaleye
Date: 10/29/10 3:30
Chapter: Ernest Endeavours

Yay I was looking forward to this one because I remembered Ernie casting a Patronus during the battle in DH. You really caught his character, Neil! He was pompous and full of his own self importance but his loyalty and desire for good trumped the flaws. And I loved the way you built up the story until you reached the end when he and the others save the Trio. Another great chapter as always :)

Author's Response: Thank you. I wasn't sure how my version of Ernie would be received. I tried to make him self-important and rather frightened. Itried to make him a bit of a Captain Mainwaring (not certain whether many people will get that reference). But despite this he 's a good friend and a staunch ally. This particular chapter was intersting, because Ernie seemed to take on a life of his own. -N-

Reviewer: Bastet
Date: 10/26/10 11:53
Chapter: Ernest Endeavours

Nice. I believe you got his traits perfectly.
Congrats and keep it up.

Author's Response: Thanks. the next chapter, Abbot Ails, has been submitted. -N-

Reviewer: SmokeyLovegood
Date: 10/20/10 13:55
Chapter: Ernest Endeavours

Great work. I have enjoyed reading your take on the secondary and tertiary characters. It adds a nice perspective.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, two more Hufflepuffs to come before I move elsewhere. -N-

Reviewer: sas__x
Date: 10/20/10 11:37
Chapter: The Calm Before

Hello! This review is for the first chapter, the calm before. Can I just say, you nearly had me in tears when you wrote about Madame Pomfrey thinking about the students as her children. I had never actually thought about it in that way before, but it is true. She would of. I love the idea of her and Madame Pince being friends, as they probably would have been. I have one little nit-pick and that is that at the end your sentence’s don’t really flow as well as they could. It feels kind of broken. Apart from that, I can’t think of anything. I really enjoyed and liked reading this and I can’t wait to read the rest! –Sarah

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. The word Matron has many meanings: a woman who is head of the nursing staff in a hospital, a woman in charge of the medical arrangements in a boarding school (like Hogwarts) and a woman who is thought of as being mature, sensible, and of good social standing. Madam Pomfrey is all of these. The final sentences were deliberately short as the action began. Perhaps, stylistically, it does not work. I will take another look at it. N

Reviewer: minervassister
Date: 10/20/10 4:58
Chapter: The Calm Before

Really enjoying this series showing the battle from lots of points of view.
The characterisation is excellent and in canon as we have come to expect from you.
Thank you for taking the time to write such good stories.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. As the Battle continues you will see: more Original Character stories (there will be four), plus three from the point of Slytherin students. These stories are a lot shorter than most of my stuff, but they provide useful background for these characters in my future history. -N-

Reviewer: witch1561
Date: 10/13/10 12:13
Chapter: The Calm Before

I want to add another to the list of glowing reviews for this story - or perhaps collection of stories is a better word. Polly's chapter in particular I think is very good, as is Susan's and Luna's ... well really all of them. You have created a lot of very convincing different voices to tell the story, and I like that. Will all the stories be the survivors? Or will you tell the stories of some of the dead as well?

Author's Response:
Thank you for the review.

Iím not certain myself whether this is a short story collection or a multi-viewpoint novel. It is the same battle, obviously, and some scenes will be viewed from several perspectives. I will not be writing from the point of view of anyone who dies. I have not touched (at all) on Lupin and Tonks part in the battle, probably because Iíve read several such stories and I worry that I might accidentally plagiarise. But you will discover the how and why of Colinís death and youíll see both his and Fredís death from several perspectives.
N

Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 10/13/10 10:20
Chapter: Good Bones

I like it! You brought out a side of Susan that you just don't get from canon!

Author's Response: Thank you. Susan the lean and good (or ďthe Ice MaidenĒ as Lavender calls her) will continue to appear in my other stories. -N-

Reviewer: the opaleye
Date: 10/13/10 3:58
Chapter: Good Bones

Yay another update! I love the way you are able to take characters we only know a little about in canon and turn them into such real, tangible people. It really brings the battle to life for me again. Susan's focus, composure and loyalty really came through. I love the way you have her mentioning her aunt throughout the fic- it is clear that Amelia is someone Susan looks up to and it adds another dimension of her loyalty to family and to what she believes is right.

This was such a nice read after a long day of study and I'm really looking forward to seeing your take on the other DA members during the battle. Great job as usual, Neil!

Author's Response:
Julia

Thanks for the review.

I tried to make my Susan (and she is mine Ė I donít think that Iíve ever read a story in which she appears) focussed and somewhat in awe of her aunt. Iím really pleased that that this came across. I see her as being very ďprim and properĒ and rather obsessed with words and names, too.

Not all of these stories will be about the DA members. Augusta, Polly Protheroe, Oliver Wood, Mark Moon, Draco, Goyle, Lavender's parents, Buckbeak, Millicent Bullstrode and a motley collection of Aurors will also get a chance to shine (or, in some cases, tarnish).Next: Ernest Endeavours
-N-

Reviewer: Aussiegirl_USA
Date: 10/07/10 12:37
Chapter: The Confession of Augusta Longbottom

Such a hood story!! I hope you write more tales.., you captured much of what happened outside of Harry's world. Good job!

Author's Response:
There are (or will be 23 "Tales of the Battle" from 23 different perspectives. The stories are linked (in that it's the same battle. Augusta saw the person responsible for killing Auror Cleverley (in Chapter 4) but you'll have to wait for a long time to find out who dug Polly Protheroe out from under the rubble.
-N-

Reviewer: the opaleye
Date: 10/02/10 4:41
Chapter: The Confession of Augusta Longbottom

Wow, I wasn't expecting that. Another great chapter, Neil, and another plot-point that seems as if it could fit into canon. I especially enjoyed Neville's characterisation here and his reaction to his Gran's letter. Very well done. I'm loving this series and can't wait to read the rest :)

Author's Response:
Oh, good.

I try to add something unexpected, but still possibly canon, though this is the only thing I've ever written which is set in the future (beyond 2010) and it's even post-epilogue.

The next four: Good Bones, Ernest Endeavours, Abbot Ails and Justin Time are being beta'd (you may spot a theme there) and so is Voldemort Doesn't Play Quidditch.
-N-

Reviewer: hagridsbrother
Date: 09/27/10 23:54
Chapter: Great to be Back

you nailed the way luna would think at least in my mind

Author's Response: Thank you. Lunaís brain must be a very strange place. -N-

Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 09/27/10 11:31
Chapter: The Confession of Augusta Longbottom

Very good! I like that Neville would protect his Grandma to no end. Nothing would come of it now it anyway! I've said before I am really enjoying these stories! Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Neville would, indeed, protect Gran to the very end. Next: Good Bones. -N-

Reviewer: hpfan0912
Date: 09/20/10 18:44
Chapter: The Calm Before

I love this story!! But I didn't quite understand who the last chapter was narrated by...thoughts??
Keep writing! how long will this be?
hpfan0912

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Which chapter? There are currently four. They are: Madam Pomfrey, Cho Chang, Luna Lavegood and the fourth is called "Protheroe's Perspective". next: The Confession of Augusta Longbottom. -N-

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