Reviewer: HermioneJean1
Date: 04/26/13 8:20
Chapter: Abbott Ails

*sniff* FRED! WHY DID JK KILL YOU?!?!?!?!?!?!

Great chapter

Author's Response: Thank you. That's a question I can't answer. -N-

Reviewer: HermioneJean1
Date: 04/26/13 8:15
Chapter: Ernest Endeavours

Ernie... Interesting. Is his name really Ernest or did you make that up?

Author's Response: I'd have said yes, because Ernie is the shortened form, but I'm not certain that it's canon. -N-

Reviewer: HermioneJean1
Date: 04/26/13 7:55
Chapter: Good Bones

I've always liked Susan. You're right about Ernie. He IS slightly predjuduced. I liked this chapter.

Author's Response: :-D

Reviewer: HermioneJean1
Date: 04/26/13 7:55
Chapter: Good Bones

I've always liked Susan. You're right about Ernie. He IS slightly predjuduced. I liked this chapter.

Author's Response: :-D

Reviewer: HermioneJean1
Date: 04/26/13 7:55
Chapter: Good Bones

I've always liked Susan. You're right about Ernie. He IS slightly predjuduced. I liked this chapter.

Author's Response: :-D

Reviewer: HermioneJean1
Date: 04/26/13 7:55
Chapter: Good Bones

I've always liked Susan. You're right about Ernie. He IS slightly predjuduced. I liked this chapter.

Author's Response: :-D

Reviewer: HermioneJean1
Date: 04/26/13 7:55
Chapter: Good Bones

I've always liked Susan. You're right about Ernie. He IS slightly predjuduced. I liked this chapter.

Author's Response: :-D

Reviewer: HermioneJean1
Date: 04/26/13 7:54
Chapter: Good Bones

I've always liked Susan. You're right about Ernie. He IS slightly predjuduced. I liked this chapter.

Author's Response: :-D

Reviewer: HermioneJean1
Date: 04/26/13 7:54
Chapter: Good Bones

I've always liked Susan. You're right about Ernie. He IS slightly predjuduced. I liked this chapter.

Author's Response: :-D

Reviewer: HermioneJean1
Date: 04/26/13 7:54
Chapter: Good Bones

I've always liked Susan. You're right about Ernie. He IS slightly predjuduced. I liked this chapter.

Author's Response: Thanks again, my susan is a rather straight-laced young lady, but she's fun to write. -N-

Reviewer: HermioneJean1
Date: 04/26/13 7:48
Chapter: The Confession of Augusta Longbottom

I'm speechless...............…………… good chapter.

Author's Response: Thanks. -N-

Reviewer: HermioneJean1
Date: 04/26/13 7:44
Chapter: Protheroe's Perspective

Poor Tonks and Colin. Cool original character!

Author's Response: Thanks, you'll see Polly again, and not only in this story. -N-

Reviewer: HermioneJean1
Date: 04/26/13 7:35
Chapter: Great to be Back

I. LOVE.LUNA. SHE IS THE PERFECTION OF AWESOMENESS! Whoops! Forgot about Caps Lock! :-0

Author's Response: Luna is Luna, and she's a lot of fun, and a lot of hard work, to write. -N-

Reviewer: HermioneJean1
Date: 04/26/13 7:30
Chapter: Galleon

You're so good at writing!!!!!!! Your stories are just... Addictive! Even more than chocolate or macadamia nuts or both together!

Author's Response: Thank you, that's good news. Every writer wants to keep readers reading. :-D -N-

Reviewer: HermioneJean1
Date: 04/26/13 7:25
Chapter: The Calm Before

Poppy Promfrey. Who would have that anyone would write from her POV? Great start!

Author's Response: Thanks, I wanted to set up the battle from the perspective of someone who didn't fight, Poppy was an obvious choice. -N-

Reviewer: SoGranola
Date: 03/11/13 23:38
Chapter: Son of the Air

I've really been enjoying this story, and was going to wait til the end to review, but I had to after this chapter. This was beautifully written; I love the use of the second-person POV here. I feel like 2ndP is really hard to make work but this is a stellar example of its effectiveness when done well. I also really like the reminder that the battle wasn't all wizards. And how poetic that Buckbeak got his revenge. Well done.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review.
This was my first attempt at second person. I was looking for a way to show a non-human perspective, and coincidentally there was a discussion on the boards about second-person at the time. I’ve only ever attempted it on one other occasion (Owl Post). I had to do something to mark the efforts of the four-legs in the battle.
-N-

Reviewer: witch1561
Date: 12/13/12 7:29
Chapter: The Confession of Augusta Longbottom

I've been re-reading this story and appreciating it all over again. It is a wonderful collection of chapters, showing the battle from the many different points of view of the people involved, and giving a wonderful sense of how it affected them. A battle like that would be very traumatic (as Madam Pince says, many of the participants were teenagers) and this fills out the original descriptions so well.

The only mistake I can see (and I'm assuming it's a mistake - apologies if not) is in this chapter (Augusta's). Her obituary describes her as the mother of Frances, but that's the female spelling of the name (I should know - it's my mother's name :) ) The male equivalent is Francis, often shortened to Frank. I think occasionally the male spelling is used for girls, but not the other way around and given the Longbottoms' ages and a tendency to use more traditional names I don't think this is a mistake they'd make.

Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.

As I’ve probably said, these stories were submitted to the house cup challenge on HPFF in 2010. My decision to remove them at the end of the challenge and rewrite them (the originals were written very hastily) got me banned, despite the fact that the mods had agreed. I tried to write as many perspectives as I could.

Well spotted, and thank you. I’ll edit the chapter and make that correction. I used to work for a Francis (Frank) and I went to school with a Frances, I should know the difference (like Leslie and Lesley – i is male). You are quite right about the longbottom’s use of traditional names.

Reviewer: annegirl_shruti
Date: 09/14/12 12:22
Chapter: Ouroboros

Okay, I thought that chapter 5 says Augusta Longbottom watched Roldolphus Lestrange die. But here, Lucius Malfoy says he escaped. I'm confused and I think Malfoy is too....

Author's Response: Thanks for spotting the error. I had managed to switch Rodolphus and Rabastan in this chapter. It's now fixed (as are all of those annoying symbols, I hope). -N-

Reviewer: sejackson91
Date: 07/10/12 18:07
Chapter: Index

Well done! I must admit I put off reading this story for a long time cause I didn't want to read a tearjerker. However, this wasn't exactly what I was expecting and it was brilliant. I particularly liked cho's chapter because in your later stories I always thought you were giving her too much credit as a nice person but her POV really made me believe she could grow to be a nice person. I also loved te chapters like Seamus's because his thoughts were so focused on unimportant things like who is dating who. I thought that really put into perspective that although they were fighting a battle for their lives, there were still teenagers trying to live their lives.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review.
I was tempted to submit this as twenty-five one-shots. But despite the different perspectives, many of the stories are interconnected. I see Cho as basically good, but overy emotional for Harry, who is better at dealing with a girl who gets angry and tells it as it is (Ginny) than one who bottles things up until the tears flow.
Seamus is a typical teenage boy (from what little I remember of the experience). This story is, as I’ve said, the foundation on which everything else is built. If you want to know why “my” Terry and Susan became Aurors, this is where you find out.
-N-

Reviewer: Ruchira_M
Date: 06/23/12 14:10
Chapter: Index

Another great story. You're brilliant!

Author's Response: Thank you. -N-

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