this is so well written i am crying and laughing at the same time!!!!
Author's Response: It’s because of Draco, isn't it? He’s always good for a laugh. -N-
h my gosh, every chapter is amazing!
Author's Response: Thank you. -N-
this is really good. I have the chills from reading that last part.
Author's Response: Thank you. i must right more about Susan. -N-
It made me cry!!!!
soooo good!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. -N-
its great. i love seeing luna portrayed by someone who can actually write!!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the compliment. Luna is fun (but difficult) to write. -N-
I loved reading all the Chapters so far...
But i was wondering if you ever planned on doing a Hermione chapter i think it would be amazing to get her point of view of things...
:D
Author's Response:
Thanks
In the early stages of planning I considered a “What happened in the Chamber of Secrets?” chapter, featuring Ron and Hermione (probably from Ron’s point of view). I didn’t write it and at the time I made a deliberate decision not to write directly about Harry, Ron and Hermione. They appear in various chapters at key moments (Ernie’s reaction to the Dementor attack, Ron’s punch from Draco’s perspective, etc.) but I did not intend to write directly about their battle.
The story is now approaching the final moments of the battle. Harry’s “death” is covered in the next chapter Snakeslayer which, like this chapter, deals with the end of the battle. My original plan was for the following chapter (Broken Flint) to be the last, but I’ve had ideas for two or three more. I had not planned a Hermione chapter and I have no intention of writing one, but I won’t say that I won’t (never say never)! But it’s very unlikely that I’ll write a Hermione Chapter. Short review, long reply, sorry – you’ve got me thinking.-N-
Written from a very refreshing point of view. More, please!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. It will be some time before I attempt another second person pov story, sorry. But the next chapter won’t be long. -N-
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. It will be some time before I attempt another second person pov story, sorry. But the next chapter won’t be long. -N-
You are an amazing author. I love the perspective you wrote this in, it feels like i was really there. It was a different way to write this story and you made it work like all your other stories. Can't waitt for the next one!
Author's Response: I have always wanted to try a second person point of view. I think that it worked for this particular chapter, but I don’t think that it would work for everything. -N-
Excellent! I know revenge is wrong - but - this was excellent - loved that Buckbeak killed McNair. And loved, as always, your characterization. I really felt like I was listening to Buckbeak. Debbie
Author's Response: Thank you. I had a lot of fun with the language in this one, particularly coming up with names. I hope that Sharp-Metal-Man got his comeuppance in the best Grimm tradition. -N-
Cool!
Author's Response: Thanks. -N-
that was a really interesting chapter, what a unique perspective to write from! Your descriptions wee great, is there going to be another chapter?
Author's Response: I have two more chapters completed. I shouldn’t need to tell you who the hero of “Snakeslayer” is. The other “Broken Flint” features several Slytherins. -N-
Another great chapter.
It just sounded so right.
Very apt names, especially liked Furry-face.
Don't want this story to end, it is so good.
Author's Response: Thank you. This chapter is my most experimental, in both subject and perspective. There are two more chapters completed, and two more in draft, but I’m not happy with either of them. -N-
My great-grandfather was one of the Accrington Pals that didn’t come home, and I think for you to dedicate this to them is incredibly touching. This chapter is my favourite so far because it’s so moving and so much more realistic in a way than the other because it draws parallels with real life. The way it’s told as well, I thought was fantastic. There’s real emotion in Oliver’s words, and I loved the details you brought to this to make Voldemort’s regime even more terrible; the old lady arrested at eighty-seven, the retirement that only lasted hours, and the Beater with the wooden leg. Despite this being a magical setting, things like this I can really see happening in a non-magical situation (though obviously without the Quidditch...), and for me, it made it all the more poignant and all the more real. Plus, I loved the reference to Bill Shankley. Fantastic job.
Author's Response:
I shared a flat with a guy who also had a great-grandfather in the pals. The original idea behind this story came from my curiosity as to why Oliver was at the battle. He wasn’t DA, he left the year before they were formed. Using Quidditch to draw him into the battle seemed obvious, but until I remembered my idea for “The Lee Jordan Show” I wasn’t sure how to write this.
As I’m sure you’ve realised, many of these tales are experiments. Some are more successful than others, but this is one of my own favourites (I probably shouldn’t have favourites).
If you’re going to steal a sporting quote, it has to be Shankley (or Brian Clough), unless you want the madness that is “King” Kevin 'We managed to wrong a few rights' Keegan.-N-
This was really well done, just like all the other 18 chapters. I love the way you have so many different perspectives; for instance, Lavender's parents :) I don't think I've ever come across a fanfic (or one-shot) based around them. Nice work!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I put a lot of work into Lavender's parents when I was writing Moon. But in the final version, they didn't even appear, so I decided to use some of the stuff here. I'm glad that you're enjoying this story. It is coming to a close. -N-
Another great chapter, you are adding layer upon layer to the story and all so authentic.
You are really achieving something special here.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I was definitely unsure how something like this would be recieved. It isn't getting the reads that my one shots and H/G stories get, but it's an interesting experiment. Though the next chapter is the most experimental. -N-
Hopefully this review will say the right chapter: sorry about the last one.
It's interesting that Lavender's father is far more keen to keep quiet when he's a half-blood, but her mother isn't so worried. I suppose she has something to rely on - it isn't as dangerous for her.
I think you've captured the attitudes of the various parents very well: their children might be legally adults, but to them they're still kids and in lots of danger.
Author's Response: The location of reviews doesn't bother me. I'm simply grateful to get them, so thanks for the review. (-: As in all war situations, a lot of people will keep their heads down and hope that no one notices them. Pastor Martin Niemöller was, unfortunately correct. "They came first for the Communists, and I didn't speak up because I wasn't a Communist." etc. -N-
revenge is a dish best served cold...
Author's Response: Augusta, I'm sure, would call it justice. -N-
I hope you do a follow up on what happens after the wards fail!! Love you stuff!!
Author's Response: Thanks. I have (sort of) in Chapter 11, Waning Moon (the unnamed parents Mark meets are Don and Carmine). The next two chapters "Son of the Air" and "Snakeslayer" take things past the point where the wards break. -N-
Please keep writing. I'm having a hard time waiting for the next tale. I've simply been reading for the enjoyment, so really haven't noticed errors. Your chapter on Augusta Longbottom was spectacular.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I hope to post another chapter of Aurors and Schoolgirls soon, and I have a one-shot called Swimsuit Quidditch (it's humour - I needed a break from the Battle) in the queue. I intend to post the next chapter of this in a week's time, "Son of the Air" will be my first second person pov story. -N-
I like this: somehow it seems like Angelina to be thinking of her love-life as she falls to the ground.
I suppose there are two ways you could go with the future George/Angelina relationship and this is one, and in many ways this is more believable: it is at least a healthy relationship. But I don't think it would happen any time soon - George has a lot of grieving to do first.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review (though confusingly, it’s posted on chapter 1, not chapter 18).
This is the only way I could make sense of George/Angelina, and you’re right, (at least according to my timeline you are – I plan for three years before they get together and two more before they marry.-N-
