Reviewer: PeppermintToads
Date: 07/23/12 2:46
Chapter: First Date Disaster

Aww! That was so cute! :D I can totally imagine Vernon's name being Clive .. heehee .. ^_^

Author's Response: Thank you. Woe, I'd forgotten I'd given him the middle name Clive - ha. ~Carole~

Reviewer: TeamHarry112
Date: 01/18/11 20:17
Chapter: First Date Disaster

Aww!! I really liked it!!

Author's Response: Thank you. It was fun to write. ~Carole~

Reviewer: just_love_reading
Date: 01/02/11 4:57
Chapter: First Date Disaster

this is soooo sweet!!!!
Petunia is sooo mean
but i already knew that!!
really great one shot!!!

Author's Response: Thank you. This was a bit of fluffy fun. The follow up is called Veils, if you're interested - hee hee. Petunia is just as mean in that, too.

Reviewer: Silver Selana Moon Potter
Date: 11/07/10 9:50
Chapter: First Date Disaster

aw! A cute and happy story!

Author's Response: thank you.

Reviewer: lilypotter1326
Date: 08/28/10 12:55
Chapter: First Date Disaster

that was a very great story please continue!

Author's Response: Oh thank you. Well, that's just a one shot but was a prequel to Veils, if you're interested. Pluss I have a lot of other Marauder stories on the site - chief of which is Lions of Gryffindor. Glad you liked this one though ~Carole~

Reviewer: ringobeatlesfan4
Date: 08/11/10 19:11
Chapter: First Date Disaster

Gah, Carole, epic :) I think you captured the characterization of everyone reallly well--especially Sirius and James--and I think that the part with Petunia's wedding invitation was fairly spot-on. I definitely see Petunia as not wanting Lily at the wedding, worried that she might mess something up with magic... It seems like the Petunia-ish thing to do. I really liked this; it was definitely sweet.


Author's Response: Thanks Becca, This was just a little bit of fun, but you might enjoy Veils more (hint hint). Veils is more Petunia based. Glad you liked the characterisation. Sirius is just a love to write at times. ~Carole~

Reviewer: hermy008
Date: 08/10/10 12:32
Chapter: First Date Disaster

that was cute! you seemed to capture what lily would have acted like, along with james and definetly sirius. (hey lils, lol) good job!

Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Sirius is naughty. ~Carole~

Reviewer: Fiffer Haliwell
Date: 08/09/10 11:23
Chapter: First Date Disaster

Once again you delivered a wonderful story. It was sweet but not cliché. I really quite liked it.

Author's Response: Thank you. It was fun to write, albeit fluffy. ~Carole~

Reviewer: WeasleyMom
Date: 08/09/10 11:16
Chapter: First Date Disaster

GAH! This is so swoony! Between you and Gina, J/L has officially become my runner-up OTP. :) I love them here. We know that James was arrogant sometimes, but I have a hard time believing that was the bulk of his personality. I love him here, and Lily, too. You write them so well, without stereotypes.

Loved her breakdown and the reason why. I think she would have been heartbroken at her family circumstances. Great read, Carole.

Author's Response: Yes... we're luring you away from Trio era... Join us, Lori... the Marauders await! thank you so much for the review. It means a lot that you read, enjoyed and then told me so *grins* Thanks again ~Carole~

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 08/09/10 10:41
Chapter: First Date Disaster

Awww very sweet ending to the disaster date! lol

Author's Response: Thank you. It is a bit fluffy, but they do deserve some fluffiness, i think. ~Carole~

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx
Date: 08/09/10 5:55
Chapter: First Date Disaster

Aw. You're right. That was short and sweet, just how I like it. I never knew that Lils was such a rude nickname! I've read a lot of stories, not all HPFF, with characters called Lily and nicknamed Lils.

I really liked Veils, so this was a good prequel to it. Well done, and keep it up!


Author's Response: It's an old slang term for boobs, especially for the Marauder era. I added it here, because I've read so many stories where James calls her Lils and I couldn't work out why she didn't hex him - ha ha.Thanks for reading ~Carole~

Reviewer: lilyfan
Date: 08/08/10 20:38
Chapter: First Date Disaster

i don't think petunia was soo mean to the extent of not inviting her sister to her own wedding!!!
overall the fanfiction was sweet, james potter is really modest.tehe :)

Author's Response: I don't think Petunia wanted Lily at her wedding at all. She'd have been terrified of Lily performing magic in front of Vernon and his family. You might like to read Veils which this is the ... hm ... prologue to, I suppose. Veils is from Petunia's POV. Thanks for reading. ~Carole~

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 08/08/10 20:04
Chapter: First Date Disaster

Nice! I like the set-up, with the three things that go wrong. I particularly liked how James was nervous. And oh, the bit about 'lils' was too funny!
It was quite sad, Petunia blatantly telling Lily not to come to her wedding. No wonder Lily was so upset. And awwww, James found her and helped her - so sweet!
I think what I like best is the quiet subtlety of their kiss. Who says they always come crashing together in the middle of a huge row?
Oh, I also like how the very end ties to Veils, since I've read that and know how it turns out, lol. Is this LoG compliant too? Cute story! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gina. This one's been hanging around for a while, but I altered it to be Veils compliant. As for LoG, I don't think their first date will be like this. In fact, I know it won't -ha ha- but I have lots of different scenarios in my head for that when I get to writing it. Glad you liked the kiss. I kept it understated because I wanted the other parts of the story to come through, plus first kisses are usually quite subtle, aren't they? ~Carole~

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