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Name: theatregirl6 (Signed) · Date: 12/27/11 6:48 · For: Chapter 13-Engulfed in Flames
I really enjoyed this story and I cannot wait for more! I enjoy the suspensful romance and also the Hamlet line right in the middle (note the penname) The only thing that really irks me is the use of godric instead of God but that's just me :)

Author's Response: Thank you for the wonderful review! :) The Godric instead of God thing for the characters from wizarding famiilies is something that I did think about for a while before I decided to do it. It still sounds a bit weird to me sometimes. But, since a lot of the interjections in Jo's novels include Merlin or one of the founders, I didn't think that it would be realistic for Sirius to go around saying, "Oh my god!" all the time. xD

Name: MaybeOneRaindrop (Signed) · Date: 12/20/11 4:44 · For: Chapter 13-Engulfed in Flames
I really like your writing style, especially this end bit 'there was no grief, no guilt, nothing except a stag bounding away into the forest.' Very nice.

By the way, I love your username! Mine is AVPM related too! ;)

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! :) And I lovelovelove AVPM, especially Goyle. "No. Only quiet. Maybe...one...raindrop...." *looks off into the distance* xD

Name: Liet Dumbledore (Signed) · Date: 12/17/11 5:57 · For: Chapter 13-Engulfed in Flames
This is a heartbreaking story. It has definitely captured my attention and I can't wait for the next chapter! Please hurry and submit it!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for leaving a review, and such a lovely one at that! Chapter 14 is actually done, but real life has interfered with my submitting it. I'll try to do so quite soon!

Name: liljoo1013 (Signed) · Date: 11/25/11 23:54 · For: Chapter 1- That Easy
I really have enjoyed this story so far!!! and i really want to know what happens next! update soon please.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! :) Chapter 14 is all done; I just need to find time to give it a last look and post it, which is proving surprisingly difficult (time-finding, that is, lol).

Name: Shreeja (Signed) · Date: 10/25/11 12:02 · For: Chapter 5-What Friends Are For
"“Some things are.” It wasn’t Remus’ fault that he was a werewolf. If the situation were reversed, James knew that all the other Marauders would risk their lives for him."

This line was, perhaps to me, one of the best in this chapter. It is a line hard to forget, because of (obviously) what Pettigrew did in later years. But it shows what the Marauders and their friendship stood for when at Hogwarts, and reasons for Pettigrew choosing the dark side would probably be another fan-fic :P

Loved your writing.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the wonderful, in-depth review! :) That was one of my favorite lines when I was writing it, and I'm glad you picked up on the reference to Peter's betrayal because that was my intention. As to the evolution of Peter Pettigrew, look for my upcoming fan-fic entitled "When Good Rats Go Bad!" No, I'm totally kidding (not least because that's a terrible title), but Peter has always interested me as a character.

Name: Shreeja (Signed) · Date: 10/25/11 11:59 · For: Chapter 13-Engulfed in Flames
Hi. I read all of your chapters, and I think the plot is wonderful. It doesn't stagnate, and encompasses not just the James-Lily relationship, but other relationships with James, like James-Sirius (with special reference to this chapter). I love how you use the language. Also, I am eagerly waiting for the rest of the story.

Author's Response: Wow, thank you! This review just made my day! Yeah, I think that James' and Lily's relationships with their friends and family are important to their characterization, even though James/Lily is my OTP. Plus, Sirius has always been one of my favorite characters and I want to do him justice. :) I'll try to update soon!

Name: Pottergirl33 (Signed) · Date: 10/21/11 21:28 · For: Chapter 13-Engulfed in Flames
I really liked how you wrote about Sirius's reaction to seeing James at the funeral. Update soon.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I've been trying to add more depth to James' relationships with his friends because, even though it is primarily a James/Lily story, the Marauders are really important to him too. Hopefully I'll get chapter 14 out with less of a wait this time. :)

Name: jamlil (Signed) · Date: 10/20/11 8:51 · For: Chapter 13-Engulfed in Flames
it was good. i thought james had told sirius about his mom not Mr Potter. he is such a stupid person.sirius has a right to cut his friendship with james.update soon

Author's Response: Thank you! And no, James didn't tell Sirius. That was part of the reason Sirius was crying in the last chapter because Sirius felt like James had no right to keep something like this from him. Don't give up on James yet. He is selfish--that's partly from the way he has been brought up--but people can change. Anyway, yes, I'll try to update soon!

Name: Dumb Brunette (Signed) · Date: 10/20/11 1:21 · For: Chapter 13-Engulfed in Flames
I love it :) update asap :)

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I'll try to :)

Name: Monana (Signed) · Date: 10/19/11 20:08 · For: Chapter 13-Engulfed in Flames
Finally! I love your fanfic! It's really good and I've been waiting for the next chapter for what feels like ages. And again you don't disappoint me. It was really good! Now I can't wait for the next chapter :D

Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely review! :) I've been insanely busy so I am not as quick at updating as some other authors on the site, but I promise that I won't stop writing!

Name: jamlil (Signed) · Date: 09/20/11 12:40 · For: Chapter 12-Family Matters
oh that was great.you're doing fine.update soon please :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! And I'll try to make the next chapter even better than fine! :)

Name: Dobbysocks796 (Signed) · Date: 09/17/11 12:34 · For: Chapter 12-Family Matters
Oh my goodness! Your writing is fantastic! Never seen such excellent character development with Sirius

Author's Response: Thank you very much! What a nice review to come home to after a long day at work. :) I've been trying to develop Sirius more because he's one of my favorite canon characters and too often he just gets written off as a womanizer. There's much more to him than that, I think.

Name: Bluestreakspirit (Signed) · Date: 09/16/11 22:08 · For: Chapter 12-Family Matters
Ooh I get it now because of the chapter end note!! I think that the letter was James telling Sirius that his mom died, and Sirius loved her so much and was so upset that he wasn't allowed to come home!!! :(! But :) that I figured it out! Keep writing and I'll keep reviewing!!!

Author's Response: Nice! Actually, my beta (the lovely Soraya) was telling me to make it more obvious, so I'm glad people are getting it. That's not all that will be revealed in Chapter 13, though! :) Thanks for reading & especially for your feedback!

Name: StarsApartlover (Signed) · Date: 09/16/11 13:48 · For: Chapter 12-Family Matters
I think Sirius found out about James mother. Great chapter

Author's Response: I think you may be right. Thanks so much for reviewing! :)

Name: GinnyPotterFan26 (Signed) · Date: 09/11/11 13:07 · For: Chapter 10-Missing
This is a really great story, and I think your portrayal of Lily is wonderful.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review! I wasn't sure if I was focusing too much on deepening my characterizations of James and Sirius, so I'm glad you think Lily is wonderful. :) Chapter 12 was in the queue...so I suppose that means it's in fan-fiction limbo for now....

Name: Siriusblack_tonks (Signed) · Date: 09/04/11 13:27 · For: Chapter 1- That Easy
Update soon please!

Author's Response: I will, I swear! I just need to tweak the ending of chapter 12 a bit more. Thanks for reviewing! :)

Name: island_babe_23 (Signed) · Date: 08/26/11 20:26 · For: Chapter 11-A Little Unwell
Great job! Can’t wait for more.

Author's Response: Thanks!! Chapter 12 is done and as soon as it's as perfect as my beta and I can make it I'll post. :)

Name: ProfessorZah (Signed) · Date: 08/20/11 12:21 · For: Chapter 1- That Easy
Well-written! My only criticism: I think blast-ended skrewts were created by Hagrid in an illegal breeding experiment (in Goblet of Fire). So they probably would not have existed at the time of this story.

Author's Response: Wow! My only response to that is, ten points to the House of your choice! Neither me, my beta, nor the mods caught that, but you're completely right. I changed it accordingly. Thanks for reviewing! :)

Name: Hopes Mom (Signed) · Date: 08/17/11 11:01 · For: Chapter 11-A Little Unwell
I love your James but he is an idiot for saying nothing to his friends. This chapter is sad but rings true - thanks for writing!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading! And I'm glad it rings true - it's based on personal experience, although (thank goodness) not with a parent. I think James is being an idiot as well, but unfortunately keeping his problems to himself is part of what I think his character would be. Oh well, we like him anyway. :)

Name: weasleygirl2 (Signed) · Date: 08/16/11 13:49 · For: Chapter 11-A Little Unwell
PLEASE update soon.

I think you really got the emotion spot on in this chapter, especially at the end. The relationship with James and his mother is so sweet!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I was trying to make it clear that he really loves his mother without it being too sappy, so I'm glad you liked that part. Chapter 12 is done, but needs some tweaking. I'll update as soon as I can! :)

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