I like it! I read the original and it seems to me like you did a great job writing something similar in the Potterverse. Plath's poem seems much darker whereas Ron's incident with the slugs is really rather humorous, but that sort of adds to the strange irony of even reading about slugs in poetry at all. I love the occasional rhyme, it makes it feel a bit more quirky and trippy off the tongue. What were the key words? Was Parisian one of them? Nice job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks you. Yes *sigh* parisian was one of them. That was the only one I had real trouble with. The others were Flitwick, thirty, benign and icicle. I enjoyed writing this very much because the original has always fascinated me. ~Carole~