I like it! I read the original and it seems to me like you did a great job writing something similar in the Potterverse. Plath's poem seems much darker whereas Ron's incident with the slugs is really rather humorous, but that sort of adds to the strange irony of even reading about slugs in poetry at all. I love the occasional rhyme, it makes it feel a bit more quirky and trippy off the tongue. What were the key words? Was Parisian one of them? Nice job! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thanks you. Yes *sigh* parisian was one of them. That was the only one I had real trouble with. The others were Flitwick, thirty, benign and icicle. I enjoyed writing this very much because the original has always fascinated me. ~Carole~
Oh I'm so glad to see this up on the archives, Carole. You really caught the essence of Plath's original AND within the constraints that I made XD
This is a great poem (and I have to say that it's nice to see something from Ron's perspective). Now I must decide whether or not it's too late to post a new challenge...
Author's Response: AGHHHH... too late to stop the evil new challenge. Thank you for reviewing, Julia. I enjoyed this challenge very much because it gave me the chance to revisit favourite poems. Not looking forward to August though .... eeep! (That's a joke. I will do it) ~Carole~