aw so good. i'm a christian myself and i love these kinds of things.
Author's Response: Cheers! Glad you enjoyed it!
This was so interesting! I really like your Harry- though it might be a bit ooc for him to become pathetically obsessed with someone to the extent of stalking them, it was hilarious.
And I liked the fact that Draco made Harry wait. It made me laugh :) And the inclusion of religion. For some reason (well, because Malfoy's deeply religious and gay) Malfoy reminded me a lot of Sebastian Flyte from Brideshead Revisited, although Malfoy resolves his conflicts a lot better than Sebastian does. I liked the line about Harry not having to understand it, but to accept it. And the last line was hilarious. And, although I said earlier Harry was slightly ooc, I thought Draco was completely in character. Sorry for my usual incoherence but yes, great story. Alex x
Author's Response: Yeah. Someone had to be OOC. Even if just a fraction! Thanks for reading.
"Please! Untie me! I…I…I need to kiss you."
oh my god I love this.
Author's Response: XD Thanks!
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This was so brilliant! I was in splits in the beginning because of your sharp wit and unflinching sense of humour. Haha! I loved the dialogue, all of it, and Harry being chastised for ogling at Draco’s derriere was just…fantastic.
The narrative style you’ve used here – the “break-and-make” method as I call it (yes, I am a genius *rolls eyes*), is something I favour. I love reading and writing stories which are written in short scenes, and I think you employed it well here. Your gradual retelling of the post-War life of Harry – the return to Hogwarts, the break-up with Ginny, etc. was very effective. It didn’t sound rushed, but unfolded really well.
I think my favourite character here was Draco, although I also loved Harry – as well as Ron and Hermione. I felt bad for him, but he was so true to his Slytherin self. I must say he handled the pressure of being an ex-Death Eater smoothly (though not without hardship).
Oh, I also loved the whole Religion/Homosexuality debate, and how you incorporated it here. That entire paragraph where Draco confesses stirred my resentment against those who use religion as a means of demonizing homosexuality. It was a heartbreaking speech.
I have a few nitpicks:
"He's dating Astoria Greengrass! I saw them leave the Ministry together yesterday"
"Astoria?" scoffed Hermione. "Greengrass is his friend, Harry. They are mutual acquaintances in France"
"They already do, Ron! I can't sneeze without all of Britain knowing"
All these lines have full-stops missing at the end.
I also think “invisibility cloak” should be “Invisibility Cloak”, though…I wonder if it doesn’t begin with capital letters in the American version?
I enjoyed reading this story a lot, Ritta! Great job!
P.S. Uhm…I Googled DMLE and got Disease Mapping Using Linkage Disequilibrium and Death Metal Legion Erzgebirge as results. Thankfully, they had Department of Magical Law Enforcement, too. Slap me. ><
Author's Response: What a lovely review! XD Thank you my dear. I'll fix those grammatical errors. =] I'm glad you enjoyed my writing style - not a lot of people do, but it's my favorite way to write.
Very very good. Two thumps up! I've never read a slash story with religion mixed in. Especially since religion and homosexuality are usually separate from one another. So to read one mixing both was an experience. A really good. I hope you write more.
Author's Response: I don't think I did all that good of a job, but thanks for thinking I did. =] I'm glad you enjoyed reading it. Thanks!
This story hit home for me, and, ironically was published on my birthday :)
So thanks for writing a beautiful piece of work
Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed this.
A very good attempt ... but I don't think that Malfoy's religion was explained that well ... and how he could be gay as well as religious
Author's Response: Oh well. It was a challenge and I ran out of time. -shrugs-