Your characterisation of Draco was excellent (the other characters were great too, but especially him). The whole story was a nice depiction of how our society treats people. Draco's death was sad but definitely ended the story well. I really enjoyed this :).

It's a shame you don't write very regularly. But well, what's one got to do, is manage anyhow. I love your style of relatively long sentences, but whats good is that not a single word is unneeded. The sentence is complete, the point made, and for your enjoyment witty construction or solid personality of character showing in it.

I have not read Becoming Riita so I cannot comment on how the inspiration acted here. But as you have guessed, I loved it to bits. Yes, you make Draco always very appealing, it makes me wish the wizarding world had read this one-shot so they wouldn't be dagger over heals but head over heals for Mister Malfoy. I like his dignity, which Jo subtly showed us several times in the books, appear here and actually keep him on the right path. I loved the scene where he is trying to control his blood pour. Gets you truly about the situations we dont usually imagine where wizards DO manage without magic.

But I also loved how you made the Potters play. If Draco says no to me, well, I'll try to convince Harry to ditch his 'ginger' girlfriend. The suspension added a nice twist, a capture of consequences of what can be regarded as Harry's typical personality. In the start when Ginny is trying to convince him, I realise that Harry might at that point himself really believe that wrong is being done, but seeing its Draco might be reluctant to do something about it, such that he is refusing to Ginny but he actually wants to do it, but in a way wants someone else to convince him to do it. I suppose men are like that sometimes. Its lucky the girl is Ginny because I like how I could interpret it here, that later on in Harry's life she's the one who would give him ground and focus.

Nicely done.

-Akay-