Reviews For Onions
Reviewer: hestiajones
Date: 09/20/10 8:20
Chapter: The Smell of the Onions

Hello!

I loved this little piece. :) You wrote Arthur and Molly really well. It was a tragic moment, certainly, as we know how the trio are coping at that moment, and that Fred will ultimately die. But you ended it really well.

Yikes, though, at the house smelling of onions. Lol! Really enjoyed it.

~Natalie.

Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely review!

Reviewer: Elf01
Date: 07/29/10 12:44
Chapter: The Smell of the Onions

I think that Molly and Arthur are mostly in character. I think that Molly would use house work to distract her from her worry and would want to cover up the fact that she was upset, in front of her children at least if not in front of Arthur. This is my major problem. If any of the children had been coming over or if there was a chance that they might call I would really believe that she would chop onions and use them as an exuse for her crying. However Molly and Arthur have been married for a long time and Molly even acknowledges to herself that Arthur alread knows how upset she is. However sometimes you need to pretend that you are hiding being upset even if you know that the person you are hiding it from already knows how you feel so it didn't distract from my overall enjoyment of the fic.

I also think that her attitude to Dumbledore is realistic, being angry with but accepting that he was a good man.

Arthur would know why she was really chopping onions even if she hadn't done far too many. I think that he is in character and I like how you have portrayed their relationship “Molly, you know full well that you don’t like onion soup very much,” Arthur said evenly. “And you have enough onion here to feed twenty people who actually do like it.”. I think that this is really something Arthur would say.

The premise of your fic, while simple is very orignal and well done.

Author's Response: Thank you very much. As said in the last line, sometimes it's nice to cry about something else, right?

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