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Name: Mie--jadus (Signed) · Date: 05/20/11 3:44 · For: Chapter 3 - Mad-Eye
I like it ;) Pleeease go on!

Name: greybac99 (Signed) · Date: 08/27/10 19:38 · For: Chapter 1- A Long And Worry Filled Night
hey hey weasleby!!! the first chapter was totally awesome! not even kidding, you have such great talent! haha you're the best!!

Author's Response: Tanks Greybac! I love that you took the time to read it!!! Glad you liked it!

Name: m2m (Signed) · Date: 08/27/10 12:48 · For: Chapter 2 - Arrivals
i really like the idea of the seventh book from ginny's perspective. good job, keep going!

Author's Response: Thanks! :)

Name: coolh5000 (Signed) · Date: 08/26/10 15:20 · For: Chapter 2 - Arrivals
This is actually my favourite era/type of fanfiction to read, and there are so few decent, chaptered ones out there. This is a really great start so I definitely hope you continue with it. Ginny’s PoV during DH invites a great story – even though we know the basics of what happened to her and the others at Hogwarts, there is so much that you can elaborate on and interpret and I really look forward to seeing where else you go with this.

The first two chapters are great. I feel like you’ve really captured Ginny’s character and voice, though I’m glad you’ve kept it in the third person as I feel it flows better than it might have done in the first. I found the relationship between Ron and Ginny in the first chapter really interesting and I think you wrote the awkwardness and snappy dialogue between the two very believably. I can certainly picture the two feeling like that towards each other, in spite of the family’s usual closeness.

I also think you put just the right amount of focus on Harry in the first chapter. With Ginny knowing she is about to see him again for the first time, it is obvious that she would be thinking about him a lot and you did a good job with her thoughts and feelings about him. However, I liked that it was not the focus of the entire chapter and that were other thoughts and characters presented here. Everyone you introduced came across as in character and great to read. I wasn’t completely convinced by Moody’s dialogue though, as I don’t remember him ever using ‘ye’ in canon, but it’s a very minor issue.

In the second chapter, you used the DH quotes well, using enough to help keep the story flowing but with plenty of new material from Ginny’s reactions so that it remains interesting and new. I really liked the waiting scene with Ginny and Molly. The idea of Molly leaving her house in such a state emphasises the worry and tension as it would usually be unheard of for Molly not to be tidying or busying herself with chores. And seeing her actions through Ginny’s eyes as she cared for George really showed the strength and comfort that Molly provides to her family and how Ginny is able to feel reassured that her mother can make everything better.

The only thing I think that perhaps could be improved is the chapter length. I almost felt these first two did not need to be separated, and not enough is happening in each one to make them standalone in their own right. Splitting it as you did stopped it from flowing as well as it could, and had I not found your story with two chapters already posted, I’m not sure whether I would have been satisfied with just the first chapter on its own. Your summary suggests you are taking this story all the way through the year at Hogwarts, and so I don’t necessarily think such short chapters are needed, especially so early on. Perhaps in the future, you might like to think about covering more in one chapter, though this is of course completely up to you.

All in all a great start, and I can’t wait for the next update!


Author's Response: Thank you so much! This made me smile so much! i love getting reviews from everyone! they keep me writing! I do plan on really lengthening my chapters. All the advice is wonderful! Thanks!

Name: Rose Nym (Signed) · Date: 08/05/10 16:06 · For: Chapter 1- A Long And Worry Filled Night
fascinating. nice job with Ginny. I've wanted to read about "the other trio's " (Ginny, Neville, and Luna) adventures at Hogwarts while Harry, Ron, and Hermione were hunting the Horcruxes. Hope this fic turns out great. Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Thanks! I hope you like whats to come!

Name: Jaqimaqi (Signed) · Date: 07/03/10 22:05 · For: Chapter 1- A Long And Worry Filled Night
This is just how I thought Ginny would be thinking. The fact that she understands why Harry couldn't see her anymore doesn't take away the pain you can read into it. You have a way of telling a story that takes you into the scene yourself. Can't wait to read more. Keep writing.

Author's Response: Writing is my passion and I hope that it shows! These words of support keep me going.

Name: bekki-unknown (Signed) · Date: 07/03/10 17:24 · For: Chapter 1- A Long And Worry Filled Night
This is great, I love how you've kept it in tie with the Deathly Hallows, except from Ginny's point of view. Although, it is a bit short - please publish more!

Author's Response: Don't worry, they will definitely get longer.

Name: decdraft (Signed) · Date: 06/29/10 21:02 · For: Chapter 1- A Long And Worry Filled Night
Good start! You have written how I would think Ginny would feel really well - and I like the tenseness between Ron and Ginny. Can't wait to read more.

Author's Response: I've always imagined there being issues between. I hope you like what will be coming soon!

Name: msk8 (Signed) · Date: 06/29/10 18:51 · For: Chapter 1- A Long And Worry Filled Night
This looks very good. I thought it was kind of odd for Moody to say "ye", but otherwise, very good. I think you captured how Ginny would be feeling right now. She understands why Harry broke up with her, but she doesn't like it. I'm a bit confused about where and when this scene is taking place, however.

Author's Response: This is during the Seven Potters chapter. I'm very glad that you like it!

Name: Rosty (Signed) · Date: 06/29/10 12:06 · For: Chapter 1- A Long And Worry Filled Night
Love the story idea - that year at Hogwarts where everything is different is barely shown in the 7th book, so it is interesting to get a good look at it. Keep writing this story!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I hope you like the rest of it!

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