Reviews For Serpentine
Reviewer: roseilinda_granger
Date: 08/02/11 19:07
Chapter: Prologue: Not Gryffindor

This is great I love it sooooooooooooo much!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: ShadowNeo
Date: 12/04/10 20:01
Chapter: Prologue: Not Gryffindor

This is so well written. I dare say JK Rowling would have a tough time wording this better!

Reviewer: Rose Nym
Date: 08/05/10 16:11
Chapter: Prologue: Not Gryffindor

intrigueing. Please write more!

Reviewer: crazycook95
Date: 07/02/10 23:29
Chapter: Prologue: Not Gryffindor

Ok...this is awesome! I just love Lily Luna so much more because of you:D

Reviewer: leftrightmiddle
Date: 06/30/10 12:47
Chapter: Prologue: Not Gryffindor

Hahaha that was soo good! keep writitng :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really appreciate the encouragement and the review (:

Reviewer: msk8
Date: 06/29/10 18:58
Chapter: Prologue: Not Gryffindor

Eeep. Oooooh, I'm excited to see how this turns out. Not many stories I've read have dealt with the Slytherin ostracization. I like your interpretaion of Lily. A lot. :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I honestly haven't read any fics that focus on Slytherins besides Draco fics, and the occassional Blaise or Pansy fic. I have an obsession with making people see the good in others. (I have a fic I should post here, and everyone who reads it ends up *liking* Rita Skeeter!) This idea just came to me when I was thinking, why would someone *want* to be in Slytherin? I was brainstorming, and proving the Slytherin stereotype wrong seemed like the best reason to want to be a part of it. I wanted to make that choice really dramatic, and I'm really into sorting NextGens into unexpected houses. Lily, to me, has some of Ginny's feistiness, and I like the idea of it all coming full circle, since Harry was almost put in Slytherin, but asked to be put in Gryffindor. Hahah, wow, now I'm rambling... Anyway...thank you so much, and I'm so pleasantly surprised and how much people are enjoying this fic. More to come soon! Many thanks!

Reviewer: ProfPosky
Date: 06/29/10 15:42
Chapter: Prologue: Not Gryffindor

Such a delicious idea...

Author's Response: Hahah! YUM... Thanks so much for the R&R. It means a lot!

Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 06/29/10 14:43
Chapter: Prologue: Not Gryffindor

I really like this! Her explanation for why at the end was really great! There will be more right?!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to R&R! (: It really means so much to me. I've read stories on MNFF and been on here for a while, but for some strange reason, I've never posted fics here. They're only been elsewhere, and though I love it there, it's so cool and refreshing to come here and realize I don't have to request reviews! It's really strange, in a super good way!! Haha, anyway, long story short, this is my newest story, so YES, there will definitely be much, much more! I'll continue to post stories I've already written as I update this, too. So excited! Many thanks, again, for your review.

Reviewer: The_Dream_Team
Date: 06/29/10 10:52
Chapter: Prologue: Not Gryffindor

Whoa. I actually had a gasp moment when I read your summery, so I just had to see what it was all about! Wow, Lily is really brave, I definitely wouldn't be able to do that! But how will she get along in Slytherin? Will she have any friends? I'm really excited to see how this story turns out!

Author's Response: Hahaha GOOD! :) It's so awesome to hear that my summary is drawing readers in. They're not always my strong point--I usually just use a quote from my story! I know, if I were Lily, I'd definitely just agree and say, "Yup, Gryffindor is fine with me!" She's definitely going to struggle this year. People in Slytherin don't necessarily like the Potters, and people in the other houses are not going to like her because *they* didn't hear her conversation with the hat, so everyone just thinks she's...well, evil. Haha I feel bad for her brothers, too, who also won't have an easy year. It should mean some pretty interesting chapters in the future, though! So excited that you're interested! Many thanks for the review.

Reviewer: Annalise28
Date: 06/29/10 9:09
Chapter: Prologue: Not Gryffindor

This is a good prologue to begin your story with. I like the idea, as well. The only thing I will criticises is that Lily is eleven, yet she sounds as though she is at least fifteen years old. I think, in later chapters, you should be careful about keeping her in character and at the right age. I suggest you get a beta who is good with this.

Also, even though it's a prologue, it is rather short. But I can't criticise that. It just means I want to read more!

I like it a lot.

~ Annalise x :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review! Yes, Lily is definitely a bit mature for her age, but then, I feel that she would really have to be in order to think of her plan. I may tone her down a bit in the future, though, but for now, to me it makes more sense for her to be a little mature for her age. I've definitely met kids her age who think that way, though they are indeed hard to come by. I always like to hear that! My chapters are usually 1500-2500 words long, so I expect chapters for this story to be around that length, maybe longer. They'll definitely be at least 3 times as long as the prologue, for sure! Glad you liked it, and I really appreciate your review!

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 06/29/10 8:42
Chapter: Prologue: Not Gryffindor

This looks like it is going to turn into a very interesting story. I really liked this first chapter and am curious to see where you take this :-)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so happy you enjoyed it, and thrilled you took the time to leave a review. (:

Reviewer: siriusblackhead
Date: 06/28/10 20:52
Chapter: Prologue: Not Gryffindor

Wow. Really interesting. At first I thought she wanted to be in Slytherin to rebel and be unique, (like this story itself is doing, in a way. It's refreshing to not read a '20 super amazing Weasley's/Potters all in Gryffindor and the Quidditch team stuff you always see) but the reason Lily came up with is very good and very true, if not a bit mature for an 11 year old.

Looking forward to reading more!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Haha, yes. I've written on another fanfiction site before and decided to get my work on another site for new opinions, and people there definitely know me for my quirky stories that tend to rebel against fanon. :) Haha. This one is my newest story and my baby, and I'm so happy to see people interested in it! MNFF is great because I think I'll be able to update this story faster on her than anywhere else! Yes, Lily is definitely a bit mature for her age, but then, I think her parents were as well. (At least Harry was.) I really appreciate that you took the time to read and review, and thank you so much for my first review on MNFF! Very cool!

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