Aw! That was really sweet. I loved the descriptions at the beginning as well as how you managed to tell a story in such a short space, which I think (as a generally verbose writer--and reviewer!) is a real talent. I absolutely adore the idea of leaving the school in the boats, the same way that they had arrived, but of course I think they'd need more than they did to start off with, having grown so much over the years.
Your story, particularly the ending, ties in with the title nicely, which I really appreciate and enjoy. I liked this story very much, but I do think that it would have been better if you had a beta, because my inner beta reader eye already spotted a few errors with regards to spelling and punctuation and grammar. That was the only thing which distracted me from what would otherwise have been a pretty flawless story. Still, well done, and keep it up!
Author's Response: Wow thank you so much for the compliments! I'm so glad you liked my story. I did some research, and J. K. Rowling mentioned that the seventh years left Hogwarts in the boats, so that's where I got that. I know that I really should have beta readers, but I don't like people seeing my work before they're published, and I don't like people telling me how I should write, so some grammatical errors do get past me sometimes. Thanks again for the review!
There's on;y one word to describe this: Awesome. Enough said. Truthfully, James/Lily is one of my favorite ships, right next to Remus/Tonks and Teddy/Victore.
I truly enjoyed this,
Nymphie THE Original
I would like to see more driving this story forward. I think a meditative short story can work, but it needs to be rooted in the present; I needed more of a sense of the motivation behind this story. It seemed to be mostly nostalgic musing, and I didn't get a chance to see what being "deeply in love" means for them.
I wholeheartedly encourage you to keep writing! I can't wait to read more of your work.
a short nd sweet story! :)
Aww very sweet! I loved it :-)
That was sweet. Loved it; thanks for writing.