Reviews For Awaiting
Reviewer: FawkesToTheRescue
Date: 10/17/10 14:22
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow, I am so glad that I got the chance to review this poem. I've been jumping on everything good lately!

This poem was simple yet stunning. And I loved it.

One small comment I have to make is when you say "With a poweful, strong, awesome voice" I am aware that you mean the meaning in which it is "inspiring awe" but someone reading might think of it as that slang term and think "Woah this doesn't fit here. But I guess if that's what they're thinking, why are they reading poetry?

The last two stanzas that are nearly the same but slightly different have a super cool effect on the poem. It makes the end strong and it reflects the mood of the poem really well. It's fantastic.

The line, "I'd be a fool to hide," reflects a lot of thought. This is probably my favorite line because it sort of shows some indecision and it is a nice line of thought. It gets you inside the mind.

Great poem. Glad I got to read it!


Author's Response: Hello! I knew when I chose "awesome" as a word that people would take it the wrong way, but that's not my fault. They can think what they want, but I know I'm right. You phrased that nicely. :) That line is probably my favorite also, for the reasons you said. Thank you for the great comments and for reviewing!

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