Reviews For A Moment, A Love
Reviewer: summerlily42
Date: 10/08/10 19:34
Chapter: In Which Lily Attempts to Be a Normal Teenager

Awww! So cute!

Reviewer: summerlily42
Date: 10/08/10 19:24
Chapter: In Which Lily is Smothered by Weasleys

Nice chapter. I love Lysander's character! Soo sweet!

Reviewer: Maple_and_PheonixFeather
Date: 10/03/10 13:30
Chapter: In Which Lily Meets a Bunch of Crazy Pregnant Women

‘Don’t be ridiculous.’ Mum grabbed my hand, pulling me along like I was a child. I considered screaming that she was kidnapping me, but our relationship was strained enough already. Also, if the Auror office sent Dad to investigate a possible kidnapping in St Mungo’s it probably wouldn’t end well.

Loved this!!! It made me laugh so hard. I don't know if you meant for this fic to be funny, but I am contantly laughing while reading this. There are some hilarious lines!

Reviewer: Maple_and_PheonixFeather
Date: 10/03/10 13:18
Chapter: In Which Lily Considers Hexing her Brothers

I am really enjoying this story!! I've never really read next-Gen as a really don't care for it, but this story intrigued me, thus I started reading it.

I think that your characterization is really good. I think that you've taken a bunch of characters we really know nothing about and have written them in a totally believable way.

I also think that your plot is moving along extremely well. You have it going at a good pace, and I'm really enjoying it.

Just a few typos that I found:
‘My family are insane,’ I told her, and she laughed." It should be my family IS insane, as family is a singular unit.

I’m betting your grandparents will know about by morning.’

I think this one should be I'm betting your grandparents will know about it by morning.

I'm really enjoying this fic, and I think that your quality of writing is extremely high.

~Maple

Reviewer: Wand_Waver2006
Date: 10/03/10 11:35
Chapter: In Which Lily Attempts to Be a Normal Teenager

One word: wow.
I read this whole story the past two days. It was such a great way to be distracted from my homework! I started reading it and I was like 'Okay, pregnant teen, cliché warning?' But next-gens are a weekness ofmine, I just had to read! Your writing is very original, and I love your characterization of Lily--I never saw her as a perfect little angel, either. All I can say is you've definately found a reader, and I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: BookWorm530
Date: 09/29/10 16:28
Chapter: In Which Lily Attempts to Be a Normal Teenager

yes they are sweet! but i hope lily gets her wake up call soon-she has twins growing in there! im glad lysander is more grounded, he will definitely help her : ) nice chapter!

Reviewer: September December
Date: 09/29/10 13:32
Chapter: In Which Lily Attempts to Be a Normal Teenager

Awwwww, their just so cute together. I love that we got to see Lily's friends again. :)

Reviewer: h_vic
Date: 09/29/10 3:37
Chapter: In Which Lily Attempts to Be a Normal Teenager

I succeeded in having willpower and not reading this chapter until this morning, and I enjoyed it more for actually being awake. :)

I love how the whole seriousness of the situation still hasn't really sunk in for Lily. It makes it feel very convincing that she doesn't seem to yet appreciate the full ramifications - she doesn't really seem to have thought through what keeping them will mean, but she doesn't want to give them up, and she's more caught up in what people will think than how it will affect her in other ways. I get the feeling people will start to find out soon and it may just hit her in the face - I'm assuming that's why you introduced the unpleasant Slytherin girls because I'm guessing they'll be particularly awful about it.

The nargle on the bracelet and Lysander's slightly hurt reaction was a lovely little touch that hints at his relationship with his mum.

Great chapter, as ever, dear.

~Hannah

Reviewer: Georgina1994
Date: 09/29/10 3:23
Chapter: In Which Lily Attempts to Be a Normal Teenager

its really super amazing

Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 09/28/10 22:43
Chapter: In Which Lily Attempts to Be a Normal Teenager

Lily is going to get a good dose with these babies "everyone adores me". Yikes!! Can't wait for more!!

Reviewer: locanena
Date: 09/28/10 21:46
Chapter: In Which Lily Attempts to Be a Normal Teenager

good

Reviewer: Moony1998
Date: 09/28/10 19:42
Chapter: In Which Lily Attempts to Be a Normal Teenager

great story :D

Reviewer: CoolCatElly
Date: 09/28/10 18:53
Chapter: In Which Lily Attempts to Be a Normal Teenager

Jen!!

No need to tell you that I loved it! Thanks for the send-off gift! I hope when I come back from Scotland there'll be another one waiting for me! :-P

Great chapter with some really lovely moments. My brain is fuzzy because it's past 1am but I'll just say again that I loved at and that you are made of awesome. xxxx

Reviewer: muggler180
Date: 09/22/10 15:22
Chapter: In Which Lily is Smothered by Weasleys

Yeah i am soooo happy, she is keeping them. Great chapter, Percy was characterized perfectly

Reviewer: BookWorm530
Date: 09/22/10 7:14
Chapter: In Which Lily is Smothered by Weasleys

YEAH!!! I'm so happy that she is keeping the babies!!!! I was very excited to read about Christmas at the Weasley's but I'm disappointed because it didnt have half the characters I thought it would...Bill, Fleur, Charlie...and especially RON and HERMIONE! They are her aunt and uncle! I love the Weasley clan, wanted to see more of them. Great chapter though, thanks for the update!

Reviewer: locanena
Date: 09/20/10 19:29
Chapter: In Which Lily is Smothered by Weasleys

OMG WRITE MORE GIRL! YOU GOT ME HOOKED!

Reviewer: CoolCatElly
Date: 09/20/10 8:13
Chapter: In Which Lily is Smothered by Weasleys

Hi Jen :]

Oh, I feel quite sad after reading that. It had a more serious tone than the previous chapters, and I think it was needed. I love how the story is developing - how Lily is developing as she realises that her life is really going to change and she has to change with it.

Thank you for another lovely chapter
xxxx

Elene

Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 09/20/10 7:17
Chapter: In Which Lily is Smothered by Weasleys

Phew! Had me worried for last the few chapters! I do like this story alot and I can't wait for the meeting with Luna and Rolf!!

Reviewer: Georgina1994
Date: 09/20/10 4:43
Chapter: In Which Lily is Smothered by Weasleys

yaaaaaay
really good the story line is like getting heaaaaps more intense...
keeep it up :)

Reviewer: Georgina1994
Date: 09/20/10 4:24
Chapter: In Which Lily Meets a Bunch of Crazy Pregnant Women

i think its amazing... how long are you planning on making the stooory?

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