Reviews For A Moment, A Love
Reviewer: boqiex3
Date: 06/28/10 21:06
Chapter: In Which Lily gets Horrendously Drunk, and then has a Horrendous Thought

Omg I really love this fic! I CANNOT wait to see her parents' reactions!!

Reviewer: yuppitzmeganx3
Date: 06/28/10 20:25
Chapter: In Which Lily gets Horrendously Drunk, and then has a Horrendous Thought

this is great i been waitin haha i know it wasnt long but tha wait killed me

Reviewer: September December
Date: 06/22/10 22:54
Chapter: In Which Lily Beats a Few Bludgers

OMG! This fic is great . Honestly you are a brilliant author jenny b. Please update soon:)

Reviewer: OkiBlossom
Date: 06/21/10 16:29
Chapter: In Which Lily is a Delinquent

Jen,

So, I was afraid to do this since you’re ‘Queen ‘o SPEW’ and all, lady, but love the opening scene. I was expecting you to jump right in there, but you didn’t. I love being proved wrong in writing. You don’t have Lily as ‘Little Miss Innocent’ or ‘Little Miss Sympathetic Novel’, so thank you. For cliché death, thank you. The title, although I can’t remember the style, I like that. I can’t see McGonagall beaming regularly simply because she a Potter. In that case, I think she would have beamed often at Harry, for she loved James as that Quidditch player, but maybe you’re going for that teenage view?

All right. Now, a little further down, I have to say you’ve swung back into McGonagall, and this girl … this girl. You know, this characterization is spot on for the youngest, rebellious, identity of the youngest child (at least that’s what I’ve learned in sociology classes.) This might just be something you might what to consider: everyone, everyone (even though you might be trying to make that point) except for Lily is drop dead gorgeous; it’s leaning toward cliché a little, if you catch my drift. They don’t sound like real people, almost, and I guess that’s what I’m trying to say. Lily certainly doesn’t sound insecure on the surface, and certainly not that swallow (thank you, Jen), but it sounds a far cry from believable. Well, everyone but Lily and Lysander, but the dividing white line’s there: one of the things that I’m struggling with my OF and learned from a writing professor is this: never make your characters either too good or too bad because you are not the judge of your fiction, the audience is. I’m learning that and many other things myself. It’s not wrong, but do you get what I’m trying to say?

The Room of Requirement whatever you what it to be indeed! I wonder what they were thinking to open it: ‘We need a place to ... you know.’ (Sorry, is that going too far?) Nice. Not too explicit. Lily and Lysander is a nice pair, especially, since, hey, weird, she was called after his mother. It’s a nice pair. I like that you bring up real societal issues in this word because many won’t tap that vein, but they were young ranging hormone teens too, and it happens. That’s part of the reason I read this; you challenge norms with a realistic spin and you question things, no sheltering.

Well done, Queen o’ SPEW. I’d like to know your thoughts.

Keep writing. Interesting.

Jenn/ Kuri

Reviewer: locanena
Date: 06/21/10 14:12
Chapter: In Which Lily Beats a Few Bludgers

Write more and more often

Reviewer: U-No-Poo
Date: 06/20/10 1:04
Chapter: In Which Lily Beats a Few Bludgers

Aaaah, its getting so good! Your foreshadowing is brilliant; obvious, yet subtle, if you know what I mean? Anyway, I can't wait for this story to be updated again!

Reviewer: yuppitzmeganx3
Date: 06/20/10 1:04
Chapter: In Which Lily Beats a Few Bludgers

i really love this! i cant wait for tha next chapter thanks for up dating so fast

Reviewer: SilverLily_13
Date: 06/20/10 1:00
Chapter: In Which Lily Beats a Few Bludgers

Actually, I like your song lyrics. :) They're like some indie wizarding band's obscure song lyrics that got caught up in mainstream pop. But I digress, I tend to over-think these things. The characters are really developing so well. I love the closeness of Lily and her friends, and how some of the characters you've mentioned in passing are related to ones from Harry's days.... (MacMillan, Wood, Greengrass; aw, now I feel all nostalgic!)

Haha, the PMS stuff was amusing... but likely I only find it so because I'm a girl.

Inter-house parties on the Quidditch Pitch? Genius.

I have nothing but praise for this chapter, and I eagerly await the third. :)

Reviewer: September December
Date: 06/17/10 21:59
Chapter: In Which Lily is a Delinquent

Wow this is great! I love how you mention Rose and Scorpius. So sad that When Worlds Collide is over. I really liked that fic. You know it would be so great if you have a chapter from Rose's POV when or if she ever learns about Lily's pregnency. Like you gave James in WWC.

Reviewer: yuppitzmeganx3
Date: 06/16/10 0:22
Chapter: In Which Lily is a Delinquent

so far i really like it cant wait for more

Reviewer: U-No-Poo
Date: 06/15/10 3:38
Chapter: In Which Lily is a Delinquent

I can't wait to see the rest of this! It's freaking awesome so far!

Reviewer: U-No-Poo
Date: 06/15/10 3:33
Chapter: In Which Lily is a Delinquent

I can't wait to see the rest of this! It's freaking awesome so far!

Reviewer: SilverLily_13
Date: 06/15/10 1:35
Chapter: In Which Lily is a Delinquent

!!! (I couldn't think of an appropriate exclamation to start off with... but I think three exclamation points gets the point out there.)

You shouldn't have been nervous at all about posting this! At first, I didn't like the idea of Lily being a troublemaker, at all. Then, before the chapter was half over, I was in love with the idea. :) Interesting, uniting the Lovegood-Potter family--it makes a very unique relationship. (And it was a very nice touch mentioning Rose and Scorpius, too.)

Waiting for the next chapter!

Reviewer: muggler180
Date: 06/14/10 19:21
Chapter: In Which Lily is a Delinquent

i loved it, can not wait for the next chapter

Reviewer: ritapotter
Date: 06/14/10 15:39
Chapter: In Which Lily is a Delinquent

nice. i love WWC one to the best, im happy that there is a follow up. great

Reviewer: macheel
Date: 06/14/10 12:12
Chapter: In Which Lily is a Delinquent

I really like it

Reviewer: emobaby1993
Date: 06/14/10 11:36
Chapter: In Which Lily is a Delinquent

no ofense but im not liking it so far! srry!

Reviewer: boqiex3
Date: 06/14/10 9:44
Chapter: In Which Lily is a Delinquent

This is wonderful, I love it! I have no idea why you would be nervousabout posting it. Really excited for the next update!!

Reviewer: BeeKayBee
Date: 06/14/10 9:39
Chapter: In Which Lily is a Delinquent

I like it!
I can't wait to see you get into the dynamics of their relationship. :) AND what has happened to Rose and Scorpius!!

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