Reviews For A Moment, A Love
Reviewer: locanena
Date: 09/08/10 19:39
Chapter: In Which Lily Encounters an Australian Sex Bomb

awesome!! I'm pretty sure Rose and Lily know about the pound. still love it.

Reviewer: summerlily42
Date: 09/08/10 18:49
Chapter: In Which Lily Goes From Being a Teenager to Being Pregnant

I predict a major temper tantrum from Harry coming soon : )

Reviewer: summerlily42
Date: 09/08/10 18:41
Chapter: In Which Lily gets to Wear the Lucky Duck Pyjamas

Did not expect that one!!! Nice surprise! Hm.. I could see a miscarriage going on somewhere, just to add drama. Or what about Lysander leaving her? No! I don't want that to happen! haha nice job.

Reviewer: summerlily42
Date: 09/08/10 18:07
Chapter: In Which Lily's Life is Over, and That's Just the Beginning ...

Hm... I would have done Lily's reaction a little differently. Maybe when she got out of the bathroom acting like everything was cool, and having the chapter ending with her crying whole-heartedly. Maybe she just hasn't accepted it yet.

Reviewer: summerlily42
Date: 09/08/10 17:59
Chapter: In Which Lily gets Horrendously Drunk, and then has a Horrendous Thought

I've mentioned it before, but your personification is fabulous! Little things like having the Fat Lady smooth out her dress and having Lily hate Feya make your story very believable. Great job!

Reviewer: summerlily42
Date: 09/08/10 17:48
Chapter: In Which Lily Beats a Few Bludgers

This is the type of fic I would love to write: One about the next generation. The personification of Lily is wonderful by the way-- and maybe some foreshadowing at the end?!

Reviewer: summerlily42
Date: 09/08/10 17:36
Chapter: In Which Lily is a Delinquent

I love Lily's personality! It's so bubby, confident and rebellious. My friend read this fic as well and she said that Lily was exactly like me ; )

Reviewer: muggler180
Date: 09/08/10 10:57
Chapter: In Which Lily Encounters an Australian Sex Bomb

Great chapter!! I get so excited when another chapter is posted, thank you for updating so fast. I can not wait for Christmas at the Burrow

Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 09/08/10 7:17
Chapter: In Which Lily Encounters an Australian Sex Bomb

I like it, but still not of the opinion that Potter grandchildren would be so easily given away like that.

Reviewer: BookWorm530
Date: 09/08/10 6:53
Chapter: In Which Lily Encounters an Australian Sex Bomb

YEAH!!! christmas at the burrow...i cant wait! i love how rose is marrying a slytherin haha just classic. thrilled by the speedy update, i love your story. hoping she doesnt give the babies up for adoption....

Reviewer: leftrightmiddle
Date: 09/07/10 18:15
Chapter: In Which Lily's Life is Over, and That's Just the Beginning ...

I think this Lily is alot different from the ones that are usually written. She's alittle more of a rebel, she's alittle reckless, and no one would ever expect to read Lily Potter portrayed that way, but I love it. Great job :)

Reviewer: GinnyPotterFan26
Date: 09/05/10 22:50
Chapter: In Which Lily Considers Hexing her Brothers

I like that you worked in a little post-WWC info there (nice to see that some things turn out how you hope they will). I can't imagine what going through this is like, but you portray the emotions so well that I get (however faint) an idea. I really like your writing and I like that this world is a little more real than the world it is based off of, while still giving us some of the wonderful characters and relationships we know and love.

Reviewer: GinnyPotterFan26
Date: 09/05/10 21:01
Chapter: In Which Lily Beats a Few Bludgers

Ah, but there are males (or at least one). It's alright though; it was tastefully done and very important to the plot, so props for that.

Reviewer: locanena
Date: 09/05/10 18:14
Chapter: In Which Lily Considers Hexing her Brothers

Please write back asap

Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 09/05/10 16:54
Chapter: In Which Lily Considers Hexing her Brothers

awwwww. holding onto my opinions for the moment. But I do love it!! Burning dinner to read it!

Reviewer: BookWorm530
Date: 09/05/10 15:32
Chapter: In Which Lily Considers Hexing her Brothers

i love this story! lily just CANT put the twins up for adoption! i liked the concept of a contraception charm vs using a condom...very wizard-like! i also enjoy seeing ginny and harry as parents and seeing their children all grown-up. cant wait for more!

Reviewer: muggler180
Date: 09/05/10 14:03
Chapter: In Which Lily Considers Hexing her Brothers

Great chapter as usual. I am still really upset with Lily's decision of adoption. Hope it changes

Reviewer: coolh5000
Date: 08/31/10 14:09
Chapter: In Which Lily is a Delinquent

Jen!

I have only told you privately how much I love this story, so I thought I’d come and gush so everyone else can see too. I was in the mood for something to read so I thought I’d start from the beginning again.

First of all, I love Lily’s characterisation in this chapter. I really have known girls like this. Lily’s entire attitude, from the way she talks back to McGonagall (I have heard people talking to their teachers like this, though it takes some nerve to do it in front of one like McGonagall!) It’s quite amusing that Lily is surprised that McGonagall doesn’t have the same ‘soft spot’ for her as she does for the other Potters. She’s almost completely oblivious to the fact that she’s not exactly a model student, and that is actually quite real. A lot of teenagers don’t realise what a pain in the neck they can be and have a tendency to blame the adult instead.

However, in spite of this, Lily does not come across in a bitchy way and is a likeable character who I engage with her pretty much from the beginning. The interaction with her friends is very age-appropriate – talking about school, boys and not much else, and gives a good idea of her character.

I also like that Lily and Lysander’s relationship is already established, and very serious, at the beginning of the story. It lets the reader know that it’s not going to be a Romance story with the plot all about the chase and them getting together etc, but that it will be about what happens after that. The reader already knows from the summary what is going to happen of course, so not beating around the bush with half a fic about how they reached the point of making the baby is a good thing.

The scene at the end is done tastefully with the right level of detail for what we might need to know later on. Overall you’ve given a good opening with this chaptered and have set up a story and characters, that anyone would want to read more of.

Hannah

p.s You haven’t sent me another chapter recently, have you? I didn’t think so but it would be typical of me to have missed it.

Reviewer: muggler180
Date: 08/18/10 8:12
Chapter: In Which Lily Goes From Being a Teenager to Being Pregnant

This chapter was amazing as usual, but I was hoping Lily would decide to keep them instead of adoption.

Reviewer: RupertsPheonix
Date: 08/16/10 14:58
Chapter: In Which Lily gets to Wear the Lucky Duck Pyjamas

i like this quite a bit. :) I'll be interested to see everyone's response (family-wise, that is). :)

Good job!

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