Reviews For A Moment, A Love
Reviewer: Sabriel Rose
Date: 11/22/10 11:31
Chapter: In Which Lily's Life is Over, and That's Just the Beginning ...

Love it! Writtan perfectly

Reviewer: CoolCatElly
Date: 09/09/10 17:30
Chapter: In Which Lily's Life is Over, and That's Just the Beginning ...

Yay she knows!

I love how realistically you've written all of this - it reminds me of Juno for some reason... No, it's not really like Juno is it? But anyway, the "Game's up you puny little thing" line was LOL.

xxx
Loving it all the way

Reviewer: summerlily42
Date: 09/08/10 18:07
Chapter: In Which Lily's Life is Over, and That's Just the Beginning ...

Hm... I would have done Lily's reaction a little differently. Maybe when she got out of the bathroom acting like everything was cool, and having the chapter ending with her crying whole-heartedly. Maybe she just hasn't accepted it yet.

Reviewer: leftrightmiddle
Date: 09/07/10 18:15
Chapter: In Which Lily's Life is Over, and That's Just the Beginning ...

I think this Lily is alot different from the ones that are usually written. She's alittle more of a rebel, she's alittle reckless, and no one would ever expect to read Lily Potter portrayed that way, but I love it. Great job :)

Reviewer: inspirations
Date: 07/31/10 12:57
Chapter: In Which Lily's Life is Over, and That's Just the Beginning ...

Jen, I love this story. One thing about it that really stands out to me, and should, is Lily. You’ve given her such a distinctive voice and a character already, and I almost feel as if I know her. Little asides like ‘oops’ in chapter one make her seem all the more real, just because I think that’s the way we think sometimes, like we don’t always think long sentences, if you know what I mean. :/

The chapter titles are very funny, and they indirectly give characterisation to Lily, too, because they seem as if they come from her, despite being in third person. The way they all begin the same reminds me of the episode titles in Friends too which made me smile :)

Lily’s interaction with other characters, particularly Erin, is great. Initially I liked Erin because she is funny and stands really well with Lily, but in this chapter I think we really see how good a friend she is. She’s such a rock for Lily as she discovers she’s pregnant, and doesn’t let Lily pretend everything’s fine while putting off the test. Whether she’ll remain that way throughout the story, I guess we’ll find out, but I’m thinking and hoping she will, judging by her reaction in this chapter.

In this chapter I loved how much more accepting Lysander is of a possible pregnancy than Lily, and it‘s going to be interesting to see whether that attitude continues when Lily confirms the pregnancy to him. He’s been so calm so far, but will that continue? I think he’ll support Lily, but it’s how he handles it and how she handles it, and how they handle it together that I’m looking forward to reading. The conversation in this chapter shows contrast in the characters by Lysander telling her to take the test straight away, and Lily continually putting it off. I’m curious as to how the characters and their relationship will develop as a result of the pregnancy.

So, to conclude, I can’t wait to read more! I’m so anticipating the following chapters, and seeing how they’re going to handle everything, and how people will react to it -- if they’re told at all. Great start to a promising story :) xx

Reviewer: muggler180
Date: 07/28/10 15:29
Chapter: In Which Lily's Life is Over, and That's Just the Beginning ...

I love the new take on Lily instead of the perfect daddy's girl. Can not wait to see what happens next. Please update soon!

Reviewer: September December
Date: 07/09/10 18:54
Chapter: In Which Lily's Life is Over, and That's Just the Beginning ...

Can't wait to see how Lysander takes it! Please update soon.

Reviewer: boqiex3
Date: 07/09/10 11:00
Chapter: In Which Lily's Life is Over, and That's Just the Beginning ...

Ahh yes! She finally realized it! So excited to see the reactions from everyone else! Great work!

Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 07/09/10 7:33
Chapter: In Which Lily's Life is Over, and That's Just the Beginning ...

IT was very interesting and I loved all of Lily's internal dialogue! Hilarious! My favorite was "Oh blast bugger damn Merlin to hell for all eternity"!! LOL!

Reviewer: ritapotter
Date: 07/09/10 6:13
Chapter: In Which Lily's Life is Over, and That's Just the Beginning ...

like it

Reviewer: Georgina1994
Date: 07/09/10 6:00
Chapter: In Which Lily's Life is Over, and That's Just the Beginning ...

when are you going to upload the next chapter...
the story is veery good

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