Reviewer: unicornwarrior
Date: 08/04/11 2:07
Chapter: One-Shot

very well written, but i just don't like the idea of harry losing everything after the war. But it is still very good, nethertheless, it's just personal preference :)

Author's Response: I understand your preferences and respect that. Thanks for reading =]

Reviewer: bookwormfairy
Date: 08/05/10 14:32
Chapter: One-Shot

I love it!!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: scorpius_and_rose_4ever
Date: 06/17/10 17:52
Chapter: One-Shot

this is confusing and i dont like it but it is written nicely

Author's Response: Thanks for the support.

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 06/14/10 21:23
Chapter: One-Shot

Hi Ritta! It's so nice to see you writing and posting! You were right, this is very dark. You did a really good job of making it believable, too. The beginning gave just enough information for the reader to nod and understand and accept that this is what happened to Harry. The bits with the cutting were chilling.
I liked the way you alternated between the past and the present, telling two stories, really. It made it like sort of a mystery to figure out what was going on in italics based on what you were giving us in regular print.
Very original pairing! I find the idea of Pansy being exiled fascinating. I could definitely see Harry going into self-exile. You built up their relationship nicely. I can't say I'm rooting for them, of course ;) but it made sense in your story. Did you write this from a prompt?
Nice job, and I'm not even going to mention commas! ;)
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks, Gina. I'm glad it came off as dark. I wasn't sure I was channeling Harry correctly, but I tried. The alternating italics are meant to be the continuation of where the normal narration ends so it is like telling two stories except it's the same one. Lol. I did write this for a prompt. -coughs-CommaNazi-cough-

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