Reviewer: SnapesFollower
Date: 01/22/11 16:27
Chapter: Chapter 1

Really interesting story that easily could've been right word for word! Perfect explaination for the unexplained... :)

Reviewer: TheCursedQuill
Date: 08/31/10 15:30
Chapter: Chapter 1


I loved this story! I never gave much thought to what actually happened in the chamber, but you got me thinking about it, and I love what you did with it! I particularly loved your interactions between Ron and Hermione; they were very in character and seemed like something JK would write herself.

You’re characterization of everyone, actually, was really spot on. I liked how you made Neville the one to stand up and take charge, as he really did shine in the final battle. He’s grown as a person and become a lot more courageous, which you’ve shown perfectly in the short amount of lines you wrote with him. The one thing I didn’t think was very accurate was how you had Ron instantly think about the basilisk. I love Ron, but to be honest he’s not the quickest of the bunch. I don’t think he’d come to that solution so fast, especially since Hermione didn’t even think about it. Unless he had been thinking about it for quite some time, which you don’t mention he does, I wouldn’t think Ron would come up with the answer so quickly.

““I know, I know,” he said. For a moment, they just looked at each other, sitting next to one another. They were only a few inches apart, but Ron could barely stand the fact that he wasn’t wrapped around her. Finally, Hermione stood up. Wiping her eyes quickly and tucking her hair behind her ears, she glanced around for a moment, looked down at Ron and asked, “How long has it been since we’ve been down here?””

I just loved this part! It’s sweet and awkward, and exactly Ron and Hermione! I also love when she has to put her arms around him on the broomstick. The two of them together are so worried about what the other thinks of them, everything becomes awkward when they need to get close. You pulled off their relationship really well.

You wrote the two together very believably without making it too cliché or fluffy. It was a great read! Keep up the good work!


Reviewer: Little Shakespeare
Date: 07/29/10 14:23
Chapter: Chapter 1

LOVED IT!!!!!! Especially with the Horcrux part

Reviewer: Phoenix13
Date: 06/13/10 0:13
Chapter: Chapter 1

I was one of the ones who tried to fill in this moment. It was about three years ago when I could not write. Yours is much better. :) I like the way you characterized Ron. He's very...Ron. One thing I noticed, though (because someone pointed this out to me when I was writing mine), is that the horcrux probably wouldn't attack Hermione like that. The only reason the locket attacked Ron was because it had, in a sense, "gotten to know him." Ron wore the thing around his neck for months, and he built up some kind of attachment to it. The cup wouldn't really have had time to get to know Hermione and what would prevent her from destroying it because they'd just retrieved it earlier that day. So while it's a good idea (and you did it well, all the "stupid Hermione Granger"s and such) I'm not sure if that would really happen. But I'm not JKR, so who am I to be that nitpicky? ;)

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! And hmm... I hadn't thought about that. Perhaps, perhaps. I suppose we'll never know, though, which sucks. I vote we make JKR write another book to tell us. :P

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx
Date: 06/07/10 10:38
Chapter: Chapter 1

That was great! I've read a few fics trying to fill in this moment and this is one of the best.


Author's Response: Oh, wow! thank you so much.

Reviewer: bootsm
Date: 06/06/10 23:13
Chapter: Chapter 1

It was great! I really loved it hermione/ron is my favorite!

Author's Response: thank you. mine, too!

Reviewer: haydensnape
Date: 06/06/10 21:56
Chapter: Chapter 1

This was brilliant. Very well written, and it fits perfectly with the story. Very realistic. Also, your Ron seems more likable than book Ron. I know that might not make sense, but there you have it. Excellent job.

Author's Response: Thank you so, so much! I'm glad you liked it. :D

Reviewer: haydensnape
Date: 06/06/10 21:51
Chapter: Chapter 1

This was brilliant. Very well written, and it fits perfectly with the story. Very realistic. Also, your Ron seems more likable than book Ron. I know that might not make sense, but there you have it. Excellent job.

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