Firstly, I'll mention that I haven't read "The Vindication of James Potter" (yet - I hope to soon), so I don't know anything about these characters.
Nick seems like a really interesting character - you've set him up as what I imagine to be a 'traditional' Ravenclaw from the riddle a the beginning. I also loved his recital of the "British Magical Constitution of 2001", particularly how you tied it in with your point about justice.
You certainly gave a different view about justice, and I can imagine Harry making those changes because he likes to give everyone a second chance, but it was interesting looking at it from the other perspective... which is why your title is so fitting to this story.
There's so many things I could praise about this fic, Jess, I really loved it!! And hopefully I'll get around to reading "The Vindication of James Potter" soon :).
I love that you read this story, because OC stories barely ever see the light of day. Nick is a complex character in VoJP, and a lot of his ideals about how the world should work were skewed and ripped apart in this story. I just felt that he deserved to have his own story told.
As for VoJP, I'm actually planning on editing it heavily, pulling it down, and re-posting it. Right now, there are so many things that need to be fixed in it in terms of style, characterisation, and all that, I actually recommend waiting around for its second coming. Of course, if you want to read it now, go ahead, but I hope to present a better project at a later date.
Thanks so much for the review, and I'm glad you picked up on Nick's latent Claw-ness and his ways of coping with stress. He's a brillant boy, but life isn't kind to him.
Until later, and take care!
Jess, this was really an interesting look into a devastating background. I have only recently started Vindication, so I do not have that frame of reference coming into this piece, but I enjoyed this look into Nick's 13-yr-old existence, just the same.
I must say it struck a personal chord with me as I lost my dad at almost the same age... completely different, and yet this story had the ring of truth to me...
I especially liked the way you phrased this part...
had taken the death of his father, the most important person in his life, the man by which he judged all other men,
I've never thought about that before... that one's father is the standard by which all other men are judged, but I think you've hit on a profound truth there.
I enjoyed reading this. Nice writing! :)
Aww, thank you, dear. Once you get to that point in VoJP, you'll be amazed that this is the same man. He was so...normal, but he lost his dad. He didn't care about who Harry Potter was - only that he was the man who was vicariously responsible for his dad's murder. He's a strong kid, but sometimes, something in your head just snaps loose.
I judge most of the guys I date against the kind of guy my dad is. It's just the way it happens, I suppose - using your primary example of how to be a decent human being.
Anyway, enough rambling from me. Thanks for reading, and I hope you enjoy the rest of VoJP. :D
OOH, very interesting and well written. I love this character you've built and the details from him being able to answer the door-knocker to his recitation of the Magic Act thing (sorry, too lazy to type it up), show a boy who was really suited to Ravenclaw. You've done a wonderful job with this prompt that shows his grief, despair and thirst for revenge. - Just masterly!. I have a bit of an issue with his conversation with Proudfoot because I think he comes across as a little bit too old for a thirteen year old ... however just as I've written that I've suddenly remembered that he's a 'Claw, fiercesomely intelligent, and some thirteen year olds do speak MUCH older than their age should suggest ... so ignore that (unless you'd like to explain ;-)) . I wasn't sure about Proudfoot calling Harry 'Harry' to Nick. I thought he'd be more likely to use Mr Potter or Auror Potter ... something like that, but I guess these are supposed to be more relaxed times.
I love Vector in this. She is just as I imagine - a child hating sadistic Maths teacher in witches robes (don't tell Ritta!). Also the background you build up for the family, with his dad being a keen Herbologist and working for Draco was a wonderful touch.
One last question. Why 'sugar mice'? I'm intrigued.
I think you've done a good job with the prompt do good luck with the comp, Jess. ~Carole~ (hoping this time the review doesn't get chopped in half.)
I explained the thing about Harry's name on AIM, but for reference, I'll just state that Harry doesn't want to give the impression to his Aurors that he is by any means superior or unapproachable. He wants to be a fair boss and a friend if they need one. Now, if only he'd behave more admirably with his family.
I decided to use Vector as the new Deputy, since she's hyper organised by nature and not a lot of students take her class, she would be ideal. She's the Ravenclaw HoH because Flitwick became the Headmaster. It just seemed the proper chain of events. And for Nick's family, I wanted them to be good people with normal lives, because those are always the ones who get hurt by maniacs. They don't kill crackheads and crooks - it's always the ones who don't deserve it.
And the sugar mice, again for reference, was the gift that Flitwick gave to Harry in OotP for pissing in Umbridge's proverbial cornflakes. I was hoping someone would notice that.
Thanks for reviewing, and I hope you like Nick now, because what he does later would make you want throttle him and crush his windpipe. It's all part of my ebil plot.