Reviewer: silverlining95
Date: 05/15/12 19:37
Chapter: Chapter 5

Another review from me after re-reading this for the millionth time, I love it so much!

I need Maddy and Al back in my life :( Please update soon! Pretty please?!

Fenella x

Reviewer: silverlining95
Date: 01/21/12 21:16
Chapter: Chapter 5

I didn't expect to like this to be honest, but I'm writing this because so far it has been truly amazing! The characterisation of Maddy is seriously impressive, unlike some OCs she has depth and you can truly empathise with her, and the concept of losing someone you thought was your best friend is something I can unfortunately identify with. I also find the characterisation of Rose to be PERFECT! She is exactly how I imagine her to be, intelligent and astute like Hermione but with a slight edge to her... I guess what I'm trying to say is I hope you'll be posting more chapters soon, I'm not sure how long I can cope!

Author's Response: Wow, thankyou! I'm glad you're enjoying it. And I'm pleased that you approve of the characterisation - this story sort of depends on that being perfect, otherwise it wouldn't work at all. Not going to lie, an update may be a while away, but I promise you I will get to it as soon as I can! Thanks for your review!

Reviewer: KentuckyCutie112
Date: 08/02/11 2:52
Chapter: Maddy Can't Make Up Her Mind

The part where you said "That would be absurd" Made me laugh so hard because of A Very Potter Sequel!! I LOVE the story! Keep writing it!!

Author's Response: Hahaha, I didn't even realise the AVPM thing until I was re-reading over it. I made an unintentional funny! Thanks for reviewing, athough it's been a while, I haven't forgotton about this!

Reviewer: grangergirl35
Date: 06/27/11 23:08
Chapter: The Perfect Day

Awww . . . This story really hit home with me. Losing a friend, finding new ones, seeing the guy you like fall for the b**** u hate. You captured every emotion I've felt over the years, and I don't know whether to hate or congratulate you!! :)

Author's Response: Haha, that's the idea for this story. Just about every teenage girl, including myself, has gone through this. Thanks for your review! An update might not be for a while, but it'll come!

Reviewer: hallows_vs_horcruxes
Date: 04/18/11 18:45
Chapter: The Perfect Day

That was really, really good :) I can't wait to Beta for this and get to read it before anyone else ;)

Author's Response: Thankyou! Just sending you the next chapter now!

Reviewer: TheAlieVee
Date: 04/12/11 14:34
Chapter: The Perfect Day

Poor Maddy!!! I had tears in my eyes as I read that. I really hope Charlotte screws up and Maddy and Al can be together.

Author's Response: Well, you'll have to keep reading to see what happens next, but a little hint - a lot of screwed up things happen in the next few chapters :) Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: OtterMoone
Date: 03/18/11 1:13
Chapter: The Perfect Day

Aaaawh :'( poooor Maddy!!!!

The only critique I have is that you constantly change from the past tense to the present tense, and it gets a little disorienting at times. Other than that, can't wait till the next chapter! And please, PLEASE, don't wait as long as last time! :P

Author's Response: Thanks for the criticism, and yes that's something that I really should work on! Haha and I won't make you all wait that long! I'm just about to open the document for Chapter Five and start typing!

Reviewer: Potter_lover13
Date: 02/24/11 16:28
Chapter: The Perfect Day

i loooovvvvveeeeeeeeee it please update soon!!!!!

Author's Response: thankyou! i'll try to get a chapter up soonish!

Author's Response: thankyou! i'll try to get a chapter up soonish!

Reviewer: the_quiveringquill
Date: 02/23/11 18:24
Chapter: The Perfect Day

THAT WAS AMAZING. I have to say, the number one thing I love about this story in general is how true it is. All of your characters are really realistic and I feel like I really do know these people. This chapter specifically: I loved the quidditch match. I liked the symmetry of the scene with Lavender and Ron to Charlotte and Albus and how Maddie is Hermione in a way. One thing you might want to do is warn people at the beginning of the chpt. how far ahead in time you were jumping. I didn't get it until Al mentioned it really. Besides that I loved the story, please keep writing!! upload soon!!- Ellie

Author's Response: Thankyou so much for the review! I'm sorry for such a late response! But it's lovely to hear that I have the characterisation down pat - if I can't get that right then the story won't work at all. Anyway, I'm writing the next chapter at this very minute and it shouldn't be too long before you can see an update from yours truly!

Reviewer: grangergirl35
Date: 02/23/11 9:10
Chapter: The Perfect Day

Next chapter, pot favor?

Author's Response: Haha, sure, thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: iwishicouldwrite
Date: 02/18/11 12:28
Chapter: The Perfect Day

i love next generation stories, and Maddy is a really easy character to relate to! nice job so far and i'm looking forward to more :)

Author's Response: Thanks for your review!

Reviewer: TheAlieVee
Date: 01/05/11 12:22
Chapter: Maddy Can't Make Up Her Mind

Poor Maddy =( The story is really good so far. I'm wondering what exactly happened between Maddy and Charlotte but I'm sure it will be highlighted in a later chapter? Please update soon =)

- Alie V

Author's Response: Yep, some of it's been foreshadowed already, but the big bit's coming up a chapter or two's time. Thanks for your review!

Reviewer: ShadowNeo
Date: 12/07/10 16:15
Chapter: Maddy Can't Make Up Her Mind

I love how you are so descriptive, and always using the right word at the perfect time.
Update soon please!!

Author's Response: Thanks for your review!

Reviewer: Hopes Mom
Date: 10/28/10 8:33
Chapter: Maddy Can't Make Up Her Mind

I hope you are still working on this story because I have enjoyed it so far. I like Maddy and Rose. Scorpius quit palying Quidditch because it was too much effort? Wow! It alsways sticks when the guy you like talks to you about the girl he likes - poor Maddy! Thanks for writing.

Author's Response: Haha, like most teenage boys, Scorpius is lazy. Quidditch's too much effort for him. Thanks for your review!

Reviewer: the Idiot in Ravenclaw
Date: 09/05/10 19:18
Chapter: Maddy Can't Make Up Her Mind

Aw this is so good. I'm dying to know what happens next. wicked good :]

Author's Response: Aww, thanks! I'll be updating soon!

Reviewer: OtterMoone
Date: 09/04/10 14:22
Chapter: Maddy Can't Make Up Her Mind

Aww..... I like this story! It's so good, and I love Maddy :) Please update soon ? I'm adding this to my Favorites. You have at least one loyal reader here (;

Author's Response: Aww thanks! I'll update shortly!

Reviewer: lucca4
Date: 08/21/10 14:49
Chapter: Forgive and Forget - Or Not

I like the premise of your story--it's very intriguing. You've made Maddy a character that's easy to be empathetic with, because she represents so much of what Muggle teens go through in high school.

Some parts of the story were a bit choppy, like when Maddy suddenly gives us a description of her appearance. Granted, it was nice to know what the main character looked like, but it wasn't incorporated into the story as subtly as it could have been.

It also seemed a little convenient that every other compartment was full. Why didn't Rose sit with her cousins? Surely they didn't all sit in one compartment without her? It was a bit reminiscent of the start of Harry and Ron's friendship--but Ron couldn't sit with his older brothers because they would have deemed it not "cool" (for lack of a better word) to sit with their younger brother. Harry and Ron were *both* needy; their friendship was born from their two-sided loneliness. Rose and Maddy's budding friendship seems a bit one-sided, considering Rose has all her cousins and probably the Ravenclaw friends she's made over the past years, and Maddy has no one (or at least, it's hinted as such with the apparent "fall-out" between her and her friends).

Maddy liking Albus seems a little sudden. We weren't even introduced to him until she sat at the Gryffindor table, where it's implied they are somewhat friendly, but perhaps not best friends. And then out of the blue, Maddy gets jealous that Charlotte is flirting with Albus, who apparently likes Charlotte. From your story summary, it was obvious that a Maddy/Albus was going to appear, but the foundation of their relationship is a mystery to me. There isn't any back-ground information as to how close they are, and this should have been established *before* it became apparent that Maddy has a crush on Albus.

Anyway, your story was a nice read, and I look forward to the upcoming chapters!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! You have given me a lot to consider. I agree with the description; I didn't work it in well and it wasn't subtle enough. However, the missing pieces, the mistakes in Maddy and Albus' relationship are there for a reason, and will be explained at a later chapter. As for the Rose and Maddy scene, I've written her in as a Ravenclaw to highlight the differences between her and her Gryffindor cousins. She feels like she doens't quite fit in with them, and therefore tries to forge her own friendships within Ravenclaw. As she is a shy person, she has trouble making friends and therefore she is somewhat of a loner. After a ten week hiatus, I'm back and ready to write more of this story as well as a few others of mine! Thanks again for the review, and I hope that you keep reading!

Reviewer: ringobeatlesfan4
Date: 08/11/10 18:57
Chapter: Maddy Can't Make Up Her Mind

Update this like super fast, okay? Maddy's a really interesting character, and i like the characterization of the next gen kids, they all seem very believable =] I fail at reviews, so I'm just going to say that I reallyreallyreally like this, and that you need to update soon! {Becca}

Author's Response: Thanks Becca! My beta emailed me the fourth chapter back the other day; I shall update this story when I have time to go make the changes. ~ Jordana

Reviewer: willowy-lily tree
Date: 07/25/10 11:24
Chapter: Forgive and Forget - Or Not

It is really great so far. Next chapter please!!!!!

Author's Response: I'm about to post it up! Thanks for your review.

Reviewer: Gin_Drinka
Date: 07/22/10 15:09
Chapter: The Gryffindor Reject

Ohh, poor thing. I'm curious about the incident. Looking forward to an update!

Author's Response: Thankyou! I'm on hiatus for a while, but I have a few more chapters that I'll post up. After that it'll be a while before I write again. Please review again!

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