Reviews For Moon
Reviewer: the opaleye
Date: 08/10/10 19:58
Chapter: Perihelion

Aw that was a very sweet scene. I love how you wrote the awkwardness of the situation. Very well done!

Author's Response: Thanks This chapter was a lot of fun to write. Awkward, and a dodgy joke about boobs, too. N

Reviewer: the opaleye
Date: 07/26/10 21:17
Chapter: Transit

Hey Neil!

I spotted this last night just before I was about to go to bed and thought I'd give it a go! I love it! You have an interesting take on Lavender Brown post-Battle and I'm really looking forward to seeing how you flesh out her character further. I also love Mark Moon. I can tell he's not going to turn into some two dimensional OC. Keep up the great work! I can't wait for the next update :)

Julia.

Author's Response: Julia Thanks for the review. This is a sequel (of sorts) to Bare and continues Lavenderís story from there. It was originally written for the Original Character challenge, but grew into a six chapter shorts story which, unfortunately ended up at 11,000 words. It was too long to be a one-shot (as required by the challenge) so I edited it. This is the full and final (and in my opinion better) version. It will be six chapters. Many of Markís secrets will be revealed in the next chapter, Perihelion (which Iíve just submitted). Neil

Reviewer: WeasleyMom
Date: 06/02/10 15:30
Chapter: Occlusion

I liked this Neil. I started to feel really connected to it during the scene between the two girlfriends... you wrote that really well, especially considering you are... well, not a girl. :D Hehe. I started to really feel for Lavender during that part, and began cheering for this relationship to work out.

I liked Mark, and even liked the play on words with his name and her condition... what a nice twist at the end with the family connections. He is a great OC, an easy guy to cheer for... I'm glad Lavender came around.

Good luck in the challenge!

Author's Response: Lori I enjoyed writing the Lavender/Parvati section. It helps if you can sit quietly in the corner of the pub nursing your pint (and simply observing) while your girl and her friend discuss boys. (-: Mark was originally called McTavish, but I found the name Moon on the class list and, given Lavenders "condition" and Lupin's name I simply could not resist. Thanks Neil

Reviewer: minervassister
Date: 06/01/10 7:11
Chapter: Occlusion

Great to read more about Lavender.
Loved the Edinburgh setting, very authentic.

Author's Response: Thanks This will be the last of my Lavender tales for a while. I may be English, but Edunburgh is about 200 miles closer to me than London (and it's a nicer city). N

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