Reviews For Shattered Trust
Reviewer: Kerian
Date: 03/10/05 16:29
Chapter: Chapter 7: Shame

I appreciate that you didnt make her be the best keeper, like so many authors do. I like characters you arent perfect! Aww and I can just see Lily setting them up in the near future! And I loved the scene with Bella and Sirius. Another great chapter!

Author's Response: Ha, yeah, for awhile I was twitchy about the fact that I thought she was a Mary-Sue. But really, thought I, is she really the Keeper type anyway? ...Nah. Hence, her failure. As for Lily...well...there are subplots, that's all I'll say. I had to sneak Bella in there with Sirius -- we know they hate each other in book 5, or we can assume so, so I wanted to really highlight some tension between them. There will be more, believe me. Thanks so much for this review and all your others, they mean a lot to me all the time, but especially today.

Reviewer: iheartsirius
Date: 03/07/05 15:54
Chapter: Chapter 6: Grace

what. the. HELL. you just ended it there? uuugh i hate you! stupid shy people who dont kiss after arguments... :( update soon, where they're in the room of requirement or wherever, or i'll come after you with a chainsaw.

Author's Response: *cringes away from Wrath O' Doom* lol. Sorry! I know, I do that a lot. Ha, the 'shy people not kissing' comment reminds me of the friend I'm sending this story too. "Come on! Just make them snog already!" I am well-known amongst my friends for dragging out romances torturously. I'm sorry. I will update as soon as I think stories are going through fast -- it's a bit slow lately, isn't it? *hides from chainsaw* Don't hurt me! Don't you want to know how the story ends? lol. Thanks SO SO SO much for always reviewing my stories!

Reviewer: Sarah lee
Date: 03/07/05 2:09
Chapter: Chapter 6: Grace

this was the best chapter yet!It was so good seri actually tells them the truth! update soon bye!

Author's Response: You thought so? I admit, it was sort of cute...but it gets cuter! I have a couple other chapters already written, so I'll send them in soon. Thanks for keeping with this story!

Reviewer: Fawkes17
Date: 03/06/05 13:56
Chapter: Chapter 6: Grace

Yes! Chapter seven (or six, whichever it is intitled) is here! That was a great chapter, very well writen (as always). I, too, cannot wait until Seri decides to tell the others of her past (if she does) and what other significant matters the Music Room holds. Aww, Remus is so sweet! Can't wait for more!

Author's Response: It's really chapter 6, since chapter 1 was a prologue. The 'if she does' thing is the main point, as to her past -- she might not tell them, but things go around, you know? I mean...ahem. *pets Remus* *for no reason* lol. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Kerian
Date: 03/05/05 10:23
Chapter: Chapter 6: Grace

So well done! I was waiting to see how she would get around to telling the others about her past! I loved that they finally ended up in the music room! I wonder if the others are going to find out... I can definetly see James and Sirius causes some damage if they do! Another well written section! I loved it very much!

Author's Response: Yes indeedy, her past did have to come out. The music room actually ends up being more important than it seems...*shifty eyes* As to the others finding out...well, if I answered that now, I'd ruin the entire story! Yikes! Thanks so much, you're a wonderful reviewer!

Reviewer: Kerian
Date: 03/01/05 11:55
Chapter: Chapter 5: Resentment

Hehe... Im reviewing again as I wait for another lovely chapter. I loved the entire concept of that two person couch. I cant wait until the girls start trying to set her up with Remus. Update Soon

Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much. You have no idea how much I needed a review. *beats her head against a wall* Well, that lovely chapter's been waiting in queue for about a week now, along with all my other chapters and stuff...gah. Hee hee, the two person couch was a bit of random humor I felt like putting in, because I thought this story wasn't quite funny enough. And how did you know that the girls try to set her up?! I MEAN...*koff* Thank you for following this story and reviewing, it really means a lot to me!

Reviewer: Fawkes17
Date: 02/25/05 21:18
Chapter: Chapter 5: Resentment

You are the J. K Rowling of the Marauder era! I'm serious, you are. This story is just so well writen that it's perfect! I am addected to your style, and the plot is just awesome! You have a great talent, and I'm glade you're sharing it with the HP fanfiction world. I can't wait for the next chapter.!

Author's Response: Whoa! (And that's a good whoa.) I'm just Thrilled. I'm so happy that you like my story! It's my pleasure to be posting these stories, because, again, I get to read beautiful reviews like this one! Next chapter's still in queue, and once that one's up, I have another chapter already written up, so I've got plenty coming. Thanks SO much for reviewing and being a supportive fan!

Reviewer: Sarah lee
Date: 02/22/05 13:32
Chapter: Chapter 5: Resentment

COOOOOOLLL!.your story is so cool plz post next chapter soon!

Author's Response: Ha ha, thanks! I am actually writing the next chapter as I reply! Or, er, something like that. Thanks for the review! :)

Reviewer: Kerian
Date: 02/21/05 20:58
Chapter: Chapter 5: Resentment

Great story! I've been meaning to read it for awhile and I really like it! I like the way you had her blend in to the group gradually instead of having them all immediatly act like they'd known her for years. It was well done. Update soon

Author's Response: I'm so glad you like it! And here I thought I did stick her in too quickly -- well, one is one's own worst critic, I guess, right? Thanks for the compliments and the review! I will update as soon as I have enough inspiration to write. *blush*

Reviewer: BeckyRose
Date: 02/21/05 0:18
Chapter: Chapter 5: Resentment

Fabulous!!! I must commend you on this great work!! I absoloutley love your versions of Siriius and Remus...they're so gosh darn adorable!!! I can't wait to read more on this....I'm highly intrigued....VERY highly, mind

Author's Response: Yahoo! I love reviews. Yeah, I'll admit it, Sirius and Remus are extremely cute, in totally different ways, of course. Two favorites, right there. VERY intrigued, you say? Hmm...I'll have to get to work! Thanks for the great review!

Reviewer: SiriuslyPadfoot12
Date: 02/20/05 22:06
Chapter: Chapter 5: Resentment

Amazing. I love this story, Moony! ::beams:: I love Seiri. I'm sick of reading Mary-Sues and she is the perfect antidote. I await your next chapter!

Author's Response: Padfoot, you old rascal. Well, a review for a review, eh? I hope you appreciate that 10 I gave you. I shouldn't have, it made me cry AGAIN. Anywho...well, since Seiri is rather like me...and I'm not a Mary-Sue...that makes odd SNESE. (BAHAHA.) Next chapter will be delayed due to the sudden inspiration regarding certain musical-based one-shots. Cheers, Pafoo!

Reviewer: Snowflake_Dove
Date: 02/19/05 20:12
Chapter: Chapter 5: Resentment

This is a really good story! I thought it was going to be Sirius and Seri too! I love this story!!!

Author's Response: Squee, thanks! Haha, I must be sneakier than I thought, so many people thought it would be Sirius/Seiri! However, they ARE distantly related, so...yikes. Thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: 99luna_lovegood99
Date: 02/17/05 20:57
Chapter: Chapter 5: Resentment

i love it! see, i told you it would be good to take a while to write something AWSOME!!! which is exactly what you did. Mind you, i really like the plot that you set up, when i read the first and second chapters, i thought it wold be sirius and seri happily ever after, but now, it seems more like seri and remus happily ever after :D the way i like it

Author's Response: Hee, I'm glad you liked it. Sorry to have kept you waiting so. Ah, see, with the Sirius/Seiri thing...this story is a sequel to my unfinished story "A Joker's Tale," and that's all about Sirius and his love life. In short, if you read "Shattered Trust" and then "A Joker's Tale," you ruin the latter story for yourself. (...I didn't make any sense at all with that.) And the Seiri/Remus thing...well, it's almost right, except that'll take awhile. Hmm...*shifty eyes* Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: potter black
Date: 02/17/05 0:09
Chapter: Chapter 5: Resentment

yay! a nice long chapter, keep writing!

Author's Response: w00t for lengthy chapters! The next chapter is going to be my favorite, I know it. Thankee for your reviews!

Reviewer: Dynie
Date: 02/15/05 21:22
Chapter: Chapter 4: Bravery

Just read the last two chapters, this is realy good. I do hope you update soon. Oh, and I love those little poems you add to each chapter.

Author's Response: :-D Glad you liked them! I updated yesterday, and chapter 5 is in queue. (Well, technically chapter six, but the first chapter was a prologue...) All those little poems are some of my favorite song snippets ever. Thankee for reviewing!!

Reviewer: 99luna_lovegood99
Date: 02/14/05 19:35
Chapter: Chapter 4: Bravery

oh yeah, happy valentines day!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Aww, thanks! You too! (Even though it's a day later...whatever!)

Reviewer: 99luna_lovegood99
Date: 02/14/05 19:32
Chapter: Chapter 4: Bravery

it is already tomorow!!!!lol, just kidding, well, actually, no, it is tomorow, but then tomorow never comes, but then i said it tomorow and tomorow istoday but today is today not tomorow, oh well!!!! whatever!!!don't put it up if it is not so good, take your time to think about your story, that's what i do in science. the perfect time when my teacher is babiling about something i will never need to know in the future.

Author's Response: If it makes you feel any better, I updated. :-D I should be doing homework, too. Oh, well. Thanks for reviewing, again!

Reviewer: 99luna_lovegood99
Date: 02/12/05 20:15
Chapter: Chapter 4: Bravery

when will the moniters accept it! i have been waiting for a long time cheaking you and my other favorite (Collision which is in my favorites) every hour!I can't take it!!!

Author's Response: *feels ever so guilty* Er...I haven't sent in the next chapter yet. Don't hurt me! It's been difficult, and I had about four hours in which I could write and ABSOLUTELY NOTHING came to me. It was the worst case of writer's block I've ever had. But I'll try to have it up today...or like tomorrow...Thank you for reviewing so regularly!

Reviewer: potter black
Date: 02/11/05 3:04
Chapter: Chapter 4: Bravery

i Accidentally sent my reveiw for this chapter to the 4th chapter! but as i said in that one it is my fave story!

Author's Response: Pssh, no problem at all. :)

Reviewer: potter black
Date: 02/11/05 0:10
Chapter: Prologue: Fury

my fave story at the moment. thanks for updating so quickly, keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Yeesh, no problem at all, as to the updating! It's more a treat for me, I get to read these reviews! I will try to have the next chapter in by the end of the weekend, at the latest. Thank you for all the great reviews!

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