Reviewer: PeppermintToads
Date: 04/14/12 13:18
Chapter: What Mulciber did to Mary Macdonald

That seems to explain quite a bit, I'd been wondering about that! I think that it was rather mean of Lily to accuse James like that, but it was nice of Mary to stick up for him. And Severus Snape would know a spell like that, especially since his cleverness is motivated by black magic...even as a fifth year, which makes me sad. I wonder why Mulciber liked Mary so much if she was a Gryffindor and a Half-Blood?

Author's Response: Mulciber desired her, he didn;t like her particularly, he just fancied her. It's rather like Voldemort understanding that Snape 'desired' Lily because he couldn't conceive him loving her. Lily was a bit mean to accuse James, but this is pre SWM, so she thinks James is a mean old bully - ha! (Well, he is a bit, but he's redeemed later). Thank you for reviewing. ~Carole~

Reviewer: bekki-unknown
Date: 11/27/11 23:56
Chapter: What Mulciber did to Mary Macdonald

An interesting answer to Lily's question in book 6, one which J.K Rowling doesn't answer herself. It makes me wonder whether J.K had something in mind about this event but it didn't get put in the book, or if it was just left to the imagination of her readers. I do enjoy reading imaginative stories like this one. It makes me glad that the readers don't know everthing.

Author's Response: Thank you. I agree with you about the unexplained things in the books. It certainly makes it interesting for fan fiction writers. The incident here had to be something that Snape could see as not being too dark (just a bit of fun) but for Lily to get freaked out about. ~Carole~

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx
Date: 10/31/10 9:05
Chapter: What Mulciber did to Mary Macdonald

Ah, I see how this could be viewed as a laugh and Dark Magic. Especially since it sounds like a Prince hex - one that Snape made up by himself as opposed as finding it in a textbook. It's very typical of Lily to pin the blame on James and I don't blame him for being angry, really. Great job, on the whole. One question: are those their actual names? As in, Lucan Mulciber, Angus Avery, etc?


Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I made the names up, they're just Mulciber and Avery in the books. Glad you liked the story. ~Carole~

Reviewer: haydensnape
Date: 05/16/10 19:01
Chapter: What Mulciber did to Mary Macdonald

Though I am a huge Snape fanatic, I really like it. (: Clever plot and well written. Good job. :D

Author's Response: Thank you. The fact that you're a self-confessed 'Snape fanatic' makes your review even better because you enjoyed the fic. ~Carole~

Reviewer: Charles Sinclair
Date: 05/08/10 20:59
Chapter: What Mulciber did to Mary Macdonald

A good story.

The characterizations and flow of the dialogue were perfect; perhaps the clause here should be that that is understood in the sense that I've always imagined them.
I'm not completely convinced about the situation though - to my liking it is a little to close to a rape scene.
The Regulus/Sirus ambiguity is perfect.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I understand what you're saying about the situation, but I wanted it to be something that a girl would probably take far more seriously than a boy. Kissing/groping someone can be seen as a laugh - especially in that era (70's) - you should see the sit-coms in UK at that time. Of course the female concerned doesn't find it amusing at all. Glad you liked the characterisation and dialogue though

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 05/05/10 20:13
Chapter: What Mulciber did to Mary Macdonald

I thought the scenerio was realistic. Nasty but not illegal.

Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad you thought it plausible. ~Carole~

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 05/03/10 19:09
Chapter: What Mulciber did to Mary Macdonald

Great idea! I think you managed to find something that could be interpreted in several different ways. You worked Snape into the club very well, and I really liked how Lily jumped on James at the end, even though he was the one to rescue Mary! My only question is: James asked Mary not to mention the Cloak, but didn't the Slytherins see it too? I wonder how it would have played out if James had stayed hidden during the rescue - but then, that might not have been very in character for him.
Oh, and great research on all those names!! A nice missing moment. ~Gina :)

Author's Response: I'm thinking that as it was dark and that the Slyths were otherwise occupied with Stinging Jinxs to their groins, and that they were furthur away than Mary was to James, that they didn't see it was a Cloak. Good spot thiugh - ha ha. Thanks for the review, Gina. ~Carole~

Reviewer: witch1561
Date: 05/02/10 14:35
Chapter: What Mulciber did to Mary Macdonald

A good explanation for this incident: and we don't really know whether Snape was there or not... but he certainly helped them.

I think it was well characterised: the only small point I'm not so sure of is Snape being in the Qudditch team, but maybe I just misread that bit. They are all very believable: Snape want to be included, as does Regulus, Lily tries to protect her friends and James proves he can be nice as well - and dives in to play the hero in a manner quite reminiscent of his son...

Author's Response: No, Snape's not in the Quidditch team - it's Regulus who's thinking about his captain, Mulciber. I must have not made that clear - so thanks for pointing that out. Glad you liked the story and thank you for reviewing ~Carole~

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