GAAAHHH! Julia, why couldn’t you have posted this last night when I was not so busy!? I would have left you a ridiculously long review instead of the insufficient one I’m about to Seriously, I am so happy that you told me about this. THESE are the kinds of stories that make fanfiction utterly and completely worthwhile. This was beautiful. This was real. This was a culmination of seven years of love and pain and lust and friendship and your words made me sigh and smile and tear up a bit.
I know you love your Harmony, but you seem to understand Ron/Hermione just fine. :) Seriously, their characterization was flawless.
The image of the window and its transition of something unblemished into something cold and needing to be broken was superb.
Author's Response: AMANDA! It's been in the queue for a bit but I could have posted it on LJ for you come to think... anyway. Thank you! I'm so so so glad you enjoyed it because I know you love Ron/Hermione and so your review means a lot. I'm quite surprised that people think I understand Ron/Hermione because that was what I was worried about the most. As you said, I've written Harmony and also some other Hermione/George etc so it was strange writing canon!Hermione for once. It's good to know that she was in character with Ron. I love how you mentioned the window. That was what set this whole fic off. I was thinking about post-Battle Hermione and I had this sudden picture of her in my head standing beside a window with all the others shattered. Again, thanks for reading and reviewing! I was a bit worried about what you might think so I'm grinning from ear to ear right now. Julia XD
The mother ship is definitely calling you home, Julia. Ron/Hermione is where you belong... hehe. (Hey, I couldn't resist, as they are my OTP) I love how you wrote them both, but particularly Hermione in the waiting and the description of all she was feeling and not feeling. Grief is hard to articulate, and you've really found the words here. Your prose gives you up as a poet, for sure. I love the language...
"But there was an insurmountable grief that hung heavy on her chest, as if each breath were full of lead, as if each smile were black and dead. "
I could quote a lot more, but I'd end up cutting and pasting too much.
I will admit it's always hard for me to imagine their first time happening this quickly, just because they are both so awkward. But you've written it beautifully, and I loved it. Please consider writing more with this pairing!
Author's Response: Oh thank you, Lori! That means a lot coming from you since I absolutely adore Scenes from Shell Cottage. To be honest, I'm not really sure that Ron and Hermione would have their first time so soon either. You are right that they are both awkward but I had this plot bunny hopping around and I thought that Ron would be in such an emotional and vulnerable place at that moment that it could happen. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I really enjoyed writing this pairing (which surprised me as I tend to write non-canon pairings) so I'm sure you will see more of them from me in the future! Julia XD
Wow. Intense. Great story. Great characterization - you really get Ron and Hermione. Write more!
Author's Response: Thanks! I quite enjoyed writing them together so I probably will write more of them. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
awww... that was kinda cute in sort of a weird way...I liked it... very good characterization of Hermione
Author's Response: Thanks. I hope it wasn't too weird!