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Name: chattyswimmer (Signed) · Date: 05/19/10 18:03 · For: Small Amounts of Welcome
This was so original! I really enjoyed it. Good work.

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the story, and I hope you will read and review others.

Name: hestiajones (Signed) · Date: 03/25/10 5:06 · For: Small Amounts of Welcome

I am sorry about the late reply, but there were some things I wanted to put across.

About the portraits issue, canon evidence suggests that magical portraits exist only for dead people, so that had me confused. In HBP, when Harry and McGonagall enters Dumbledore's office, Rowling writes, "And a new portrait had joined the ranks of the dead headmasters and headmistresses of Hogwarts." This seems to suggest that only dead headmasters/headmistresses got their portraits there. (An issue could be raised about Severus Snape, but then he voluntarily left the post.) And, also, I am sorry but when I raised that issue in my review, I hadn't read the other reviews, and I'm sure no response had been published from the author's side.

I have no issue about when Professor McGonagall retires as long as it is before the next generation of Potters and Weasleys come to Hogwarts. And I haven't read your other fic, Arcane Scora, apart from the first chapter, so I do not know who holds the other positions in the school. Neither do I see any statement which claims that this follows an another fiction of yours. However, the earlier point I raised was this:

"Even though they must have been completely new and younger ones, I still feel that you could have mentioned them at least in a line or two."

As you were summing up a lot of members of the staff, I merely felt you could have mentioned the others briefly. In any case, I liked the story, and these are points which I am raising as a reader.


Author's Response: Wow, someone up on their arguing hat today, and I'm too lazy to bother arguing back. I don't know if that means you won or what, though.

Name: hestiajones (Signed) · Date: 03/19/10 23:46 · For: Small Amounts of Welcome
This was an interesting one-shot, and Flitwick felt very real. Although, I am not sure that even for such a tiny man, whether a glorified broom closet would be big enough a place to be called a “comfortable” office. Wouldn’t he have to meet students there? :D

I do have a question about the portraits, though. Wouldn’t a person have to be dead in order to get that portrait? Dumbledore was kicked out twice – in COS, and then in OOTP, yet there is no mention of his portrait being hung on the wall. Mmm…we don’t get to see the office during those episodes, so we may not know. What do you think?

I was also wondering about the selection of the Headmaster. Which era is this set in? Who was the DADA teacher? What about Muggle Studies? And Professor Vector? And Potions? Even though they must have been completely new and younger ones, I still feel that you could have mentioned them at least in a line or two.

On Dexter Fortescue’s voice, did you mean to say that his voice was similar to that of Florean? How were they related? Or did you mean that his surname was now associated with ice-cream? The use of the word “voice” seems to stick out a bit.

Apart from these nitpicks, I felt that this was a good portrayal of Flitwick. He does seem the type who would be nervous about the job. And oh! I also liked how you showed his insecurities about his height. :D Good one!


Author's Response: Well, as far as the portrait question goes, I left a fairly long explaination in the previous review. Please refer. And to what year the story is set in...one sec, gotta do math...August of 2010. In my version of the Potterverse, this is when McGonagall retired. And let's see...Muggle studies: too young (and haven't figured out the character yet), Professor Vector: not interesting enough to mention and probably less experience, Potions: Professor Vhartan, and still holding that job in Arcane ScoRA (all my stories (except for AU) follow the same universe). And for Fortescue, oops! I meant to say name, and I will change that right away.

Name: OkiBlossom (Signed) · Date: 03/19/10 14:05 · For: Small Amounts of Welcome
This was really good. I do have one question because this threw me off completely. Don't the Headmasters or Headmistresses have to be dead before they get their portrait hung in the office? I liked your characterisation of McGonagall though. It was confusiing coming from two different ways, but that's an interesting thought. I liked the atomsphere of the predecessors a lot. Snape's humour. Yeah, I always thought he was hilarious and not dark. Good job.


Author's Response: I don't know if there was ever any real evidence that a Headmaster had to be dead in order to get their portrait painted. But maybe Dumbledore's portrait was never painted because it was never quite clear that he had no chance of comig back. But with Professor McGonagall, she was getting quite old and had made it clear that she planned to retire, and maybe that is why she had her portrait painted. And maybe even if death was the case before, maybe the policy has become a little more lax in the future, or maybe it was always a little iffy to begin with. And I'm glad you like Snape's part, small as it might have been.

Name: Memish (Signed) · Date: 03/17/10 23:20 · For: Small Amounts of Welcome
That was very funny! =] Seems to me a realistic portrayal of how poor Flitwick would feel taking on such a big job.

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the story!

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