Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 06/03/10 15:44
Chapter: Deathly Conjures

Oh my God!!! There were a couple of amazing parts in this chapter. First, Alex realized that her doggeral verse was important and powerful--although she probably knew that already. Then she was actually ready to call a ghost and that ghost was Ben Journey. Just think of the things she can learn from him. Great chapter.

Reviewer: heirofgryffindoorcasey103
Date: 06/02/10 15:28
Chapter: The Bone Flute

so i have been following dear Alex since her very first chapter in Larkin Mills. i just wanted to say that i check the page almost daily and that i love reading about her adventures. i am a little confused though. 1), why would Darla try to kill Charlie? it just doesnt make sense to me. and also, i thought Alexandra didnt have the bone flute anymore! and which is the true story about Darla's sister? okay well i love this tale and i hope to read more soon!

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 06/02/10 12:37
Chapter: A Deal with Darla

That was all pretty amazing. I've never been real excited about Anna's character. To me, she's been a "goody two shoes" and kind of boring--a conscience. And now she's so overcome with guilt that she's really gotten boring. She couldn't have thought that what she did was going to make her feel good. Darla, on the other hand, is very devious and more interesting. She goes after what she wants and will be much more useful to Alex. This is getting exciting and scary. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 06/01/10 13:18
Chapter: Sweethearts and Traitors

What a shocker--talk about traitors. I wonder why Anna did that. I have a feeling that it's very hard to outplay Abraham Thorn. As to why, I wouldn't doubt that Anna was promised something with regard to her father so she told the Aurors about Alex meeting her father. He was still more than one step ahead of them. I wonder if Alex will be able to forgive. The scene with Larry was interesting. I'm glad Alex's father came along and rescued her. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Hesperia
Date: 06/01/10 6:30
Chapter: The Most Deathly Power

Great chapter. I liked your description of Death's abode, and the Seventh Seal reference -- one of my favorite movies. I have to say, I don't believe Death really means to return Maximilian to life if Alex kills someone. If Death made deals that easily, there would have been stories about it being done before. So I'm not sure what he's up to. And Darla...what the heck? I guess we'll find out...

Reviewer: dominiqueweasley
Date: 05/31/10 23:40
Chapter: The Bone Flute

OH MY GOD!!! SO INTENSE!
I love this story to bits and pieces, but how could you leave us with such a cliffhanger on a Monday? Ahhh!

Reviewer: TheSmirkingDragon
Date: 05/31/10 19:50
Chapter: The Bone Flute

Ooooh. Intense. I'm really curious as to how everything's going to turn out.

I can't imagine being in Alexandra's place. She's a year younger than me at this point, and is left with a literal life-or-death choice. It's a corrupting choice, deciding who lives and who dies. I could never make the choice, and I find it astounding that Alexandra can consider it so calmly (even with her subconcience rearing its head in her dreams). So easy to just give it to someone, let them react and take it, watch them fall, but so impossible to do. I think you showed that struggle well for Alexandra's character, though it's so completely different from what I would do (though I probably wouldn't have gotten into such a scrape, anyway).

Thank you for telling us what was so bad about mistletoe wands! I've been wondering about them since you first mentioned them at all. Now I'm curious if there's any myth or lore connections with mistletoe, which I'm sure I'll look up soon.

Darla is such a wonderful character. I thought it was bizarre that she'd try to kill Alexandra the first time, and I'm curious about what, exactly, her motives are (because I'm sure she has some reason). I was beginning to feel sorry for her with her sister dying, but then we find that she was just manipulating Alexandra. I'm not sure what exactly to think of her at this point, and I can't wait to find out what exactly she's doing now. I'm betting on it being a ploy to get Alexandra back down there, and prehaps try to kill her (once again).

I love how you've created such an expansive world. Whenever I consider what the wizarding society in America is like, I usually refer to most of your ideas. A few parts, like some of the societal groups, always grate me a bit (the Ozarkers, for one. I never saw wizards as being very sexist, and it seems like all the Rashes do is exert their power (given to them by Constance, Forbearance, and Innocence's parents) over the girls. I love how some of the issues between wizarding America and Britain are so similar, like SPEW, and so different. America seems so corrupt in its government, and I'm sure we wouldn't see it from anyone's eyes but Alexandra's (or anyone connected to her father by similar bonds). It's so wrong that children are judged by their father's deeds, but so common. Unfortunate, isn't it?

-- Selina

Reviewer: bigtimer
Date: 05/31/10 14:06
Chapter: The Bone Flute

best ending to a chapter yet holy cow darla is in for some serious pain now she better have run away. whats the deal with the thorn cirlce attacking those places can't wait to find out!!

Reviewer: Kaiserin
Date: 05/31/10 9:09
Chapter: The Bone Flute

Risking her neck to save Darla from her own stupid self!? *snorts*
This is really silly, she should have told on her and that's it!! The attack and the illegal wand...
NOW I'm actually happy for that lovely Confederation Act... It's going to be just miraculous seeing that retched thing do something good. I mean, ironic, an Elect to held accountable for her acts, right?

They can't NOT judge her after this.... It'd be simply too unfair!! Then, again, the Confederation knows a thing or two about unfair and how to take it to a whole new level. Maybe they'll use some lame excuse to get Darla off the hook... which would also get Alex off the hook, since if anything, Alex has done LESS illegal stuff than her...

I wonder how will Death feel about Darla trying to do his job for her... With all the killing she's been skeeming. Hopefully, not pleased. As for Alex, she might simply argue she's back to return the token...
I only wonder how's Alex planning to join Darla, since there's only one Thestral in the stables... Puzzling...

Reviewer: Kaiserin
Date: 05/28/10 16:07
Chapter: The Most Deathly Power

Holy Deathly Power!!!!

THIS is a never expected turn of events!!!!

Alex amuses Death!! Let Troublesome be one of a kind!! I think this chapter was very well-thought, carefully planned, it was just so symetrical, so unexpected yet making so much sense!

I think Death's appearence (adjusted to what everyone expects) was a great idea. And the "guidance" from Journey was good too. I mean the fact that he didn't seem to know much about what they were doing!

I'm a bit depressed that Alex did not get to see Max, at least... But it was more or less a ride in the park, actually. No one got hurt (other than that cut on Alex's hand and Darla's nose) no tiresome perils to face. It was all, stressy, of course... But (for now) everyone remains unharmed.

I lost my breath when Alex nearly gives the deathly token to Darla.. (She soo deserved it!) BTW, I can't shake off the outrage at her nastiness! She gave Alex a fake obol! What on Earth was she thinking!!

Assuming she was doing all this to use Alex as a guinea pig and she if she could come back from Beyond... With a fake obol, she might have never done, thus leading Darla to believe that her own sibling-saving quest was impossible.

So, did Darla already know how to go beyond and that she would be able to come back, and did that to trick Alex into creating an obol for herself? Or to get the Deathly token, perhaps? Otherwise, why did she stay in that basement? Why did she even bother going with Alex?

It's a bit confusing for me... but I guess thats' the idea, right? Not being sure of Darlitch's true intentions? Boy that girl's disgusting!!

Also... I'm still curious as to this Deathly Regiment thing. What is it? Did Max join it? We haven't really heard what IS it, am I right? Only that people who died in un-conventional magical ways join them... and they kill people for the Confederation(!?!?!)

As for the minor cliffie... I wonder if Alex will tell Anna everything, everything? About Death's token, I mean... And about almost giving it to Darla... (I agree with Alex, BTW, Darla DOES deserve it!)

And what on Merlin's name is going to become with that terrible thing!! The token!! I really, really, really hope that it only works when Alex gives it, not if stolen or lost!! (because with Charlie's ways, that could happen!)

Lord, this story is simply getting better and better.

I'll wait anxiously for the next update!! ^_^

Reviewer: bigtimer
Date: 05/28/10 15:52
Chapter: The Most Deathly Power

holy moley what a chapter i kinda hoped she'd give it darla she'd desreved it. i wonder is she going to use the token or what i can't wait to find out.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/28/10 9:06
Chapter: The Winter Ball

This chapter was really full of information. I chuckled at the thought of a white boy from Cleveland starting a hip hop club at Charmbridge:D I thought YAY for Alex when she asked Dylan to the ball. The choice of Larry as a medium to pass information on to Alex was very strange. If I were Alex I might still be very suspicious. The thought that Anna's and Alex's dads might know each other is intriguing. Excellent chapter.

Reviewer: potterchassid
Date: 05/28/10 6:54
Chapter: The Most Deathly Power

Oh, and I wonder, does that mean that Darla had already been in the Lands Beyond, and was hoping to save her sister by sending Alexandra to her death?

Reviewer: potterchassid
Date: 05/28/10 6:53
Chapter: The Most Deathly Power

Excellent chapter. Yes, I can see how you have changed your writing style a bit. The Lands Below lasted several chapters, elapsing over several days, while here, it took only part of a single night. I can see that she will now have to hide this obol, until she finds herself in deathly danger and uses it (conjures it), perhaps in a different book, in self defence, or even better, in defence of someone else or of several people.

Thrilling tale.

Reviewer: primagirl89
Date: 05/28/10 6:25
Chapter: The WODAMND Act

Beautifully written scene with Alex and Death. Not sure what I was expecting from the Most Deatly Power but I do like his attitude. Darla is even sicker than I thought. I honestly thought Alex was going to give her the obol. What tension in that scene. Will Alex kill somebody? Somebody may deserve it but does her soul become forfiet if she does? Her father perhaps? It is his fault that Max is dead...

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/27/10 12:00
Chapter: A Long, Cold December

Well, I am exhausted after reading this chapter. I feel like I was on Mr. Toad's Wild Ride. I felt bad that Alex didn't go caroling but I could understand her reasons--she's stubborn. I was pleasantly shocked when Ms. King and Julia came to visit via Floo. I totally agree with what they did. I could almost feel a more relaxed attitude between Claudia and Alex. And, YAY--Alex got a new broom. That was a wonderful gift. I've mentioned before that I really don't like Diana Grimm. Her arrival can only be a negative omen. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/26/10 10:42
Chapter: Things Change

It seems like Alex is really in trouble this time. I can't believe things went so wrong. And, I really can't believe that Alex let someone ambush her. I guess she can't think of everything but she should've kept an eye on her own back. It sounds like Anna is really angry this time too. I can't imagine how much trouble Valeria is in either. I can't wait to see how you'll get Alex out of this one. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/25/10 10:19
Chapter: A Tightly-Wound Plan

Wow--that was just amazing. I did not expect Alex to summon Triss. Alex's schemes get more and more complicated. If she pulls her plans off it will be beyond wonderful. I would totally drive myself crazy trying to plan something like this. I don't know what else to say except I expect Alex to be getting the best grades at Charmbridge. Her analytical skills are superb. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Hesperia
Date: 05/24/10 18:27
Chapter: Through the Veil

And Alexandra died. The end.

... Yeah, I think not. :) At the same time, I highly doubt she's going to be able to actually bring Max back. So I'm very curious to see how all this will be resolved. I have a feeling that nothing short of seeing Max's spirit, and having him tell her himself to quit trying to revive him, will make her stop.

I like the use of blood in these deathly rituals; it brings to mind ancient Greek mythology. I imagine it may be associated with other cultures' myths too.

Reviewer: Homeless Hippogriff
Date: 05/24/10 15:16
Chapter: Through the Veil

The scene with Anna shows that Alex has learned to express her emotions better, but I also love how you seem to use Charlie to put more emotion into heavy scenes like this. Heart-wrenching.
Your writing is always so good, but one sentence in this chapter stood out:
"Skuld stopped and thrust her nose inquisitively through the ghost, then let out a disgruntled snort as Alexandra threw the saddle over her."
Poetry! Not only is it a hilarious image, but also it makes me feel like I'm there in the stable when I read it.
I was sort of expecting a big cliffhanger at this point...can't wait for the next installment!

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