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Name: bigtimer (Signed) · Date: 05/14/10 16:15 · For: A Deal with Darla
wow thats all i have to say

Name: primagirl89 (Signed) · Date: 05/14/10 15:34 · For: A Deal with Darla
wow! Not expecting Darla and her to become somewhat allies-thought Darla had a death too but her actions much more extensive than I thought. Didn't think Alex would behave that way with Anna; hopefully she doesn't explode later but she is very mature now. How horrible to threaten to take away her mother! Would they really have done that? Just give Alex another reason to hate the Confederation. Looks like things aren't going to get better now that they have Muggle transportation classes-nice touch. well worth the wait (disappointed it wasn't up at the usual time).

Name: AnDream (Signed) · Date: 05/14/10 14:30 · For: The WODAMND Act
Oh no! You didn't post any thing today and I'm Freaking Out! I gotta know what happens next. Btw I love you stories, I probably don't review as much as I should (I'm always reading on my phone) but yeah, I think your awesome. Keep up the awesomeness. ;)
- andream

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 05/14/10 10:46 · For: The Doorway
I think Alex still feels some loyalty to her father even though she doesn't want to. Let's face it--he's a very powerful wizard--he can do things. It was nice of Diana Grimm to give Alex at least a little information about Anna's father. I would bet there's even more layers of bureaucracy above Diana and no one wants to let information out. Great chapter.

Name: rambkowalczyk (Signed) · Date: 05/13/10 16:43 · For: Ghost Sickness
I apologize for not writing reviews although I have been reading each update as soon as it appears.One of the factors in my procrastination is I felt the need to reread the second book.

One of the major ironies I discovered in this chapter is that most people think that ghost sickness is a superstition yet this was the official explanation by the Governer as to why the Governer and security staff got sick and to justify searching the trains last year when Alex was going home from Croatoa. Yet the Angelique's family doesn't seem terrified of ghost sickness.

It is curious that the house elves acknowledge the sickness, yet no one believes them and that Alexandra saw the spectral green around Benjamin.

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 05/13/10 15:51 · For: Rebellion
That was certainly unexpected. I wonder if Ms. Gale was hit with the Killing Curse. And, why is it always Alex who discovers things like this? She's always in the wrong place at the wrong time. Of course, if she wouldn't go around where she's not supposed to it would help. I feel sorry for poor William. What is going on with Innocence? Her sisters were shocked. Great chapter.

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 05/12/10 16:36 · For: Ghost Sickness
I'm getting a little tired of Em showing up constantly when Alex is investigating something:D It was heartwarming to see Alex stand up for William. His shows of respect for her were cute, especially when he called her ma'am. I thought for a minute that Innocence had lost her toad on purpose just to get the boys to do their gentlemanly duty and help her find Misery. It was kind of unexpected when Ms. Gale got yelled at for letting students go out ghost bustin' by themselves. At least Alex isn't in too much trouble. Great chapter.

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 05/12/10 14:08 · For: In the Basement
While I admire that Alex didn't take any crap from the Rashes, I'm also glad that she didn't get into worse trouble. I almost think she needs detention--she's still brooding too much over her brother's death. I like Innocence but I can see where she'd be horribly annoying. The ghost in the basement is very mysterious. Great chapter.

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 05/12/10 10:57 · For: Finding Trouble
Wow--that was a really exciting duel. Max would've been proud. Those Rash boys are just big bullies. I hope they've learned a lesson. Too bad Alex got caught but at least she kept her friends out of trouble. Great chapter.

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 05/11/10 13:37 · For: The Girl Who Came Back
I'm sure Alex is thinking that if she can go back in time she can go back before Max died and prevent his death. For some reason I don't think you can use time turners for that reason. I can't believe they let Darla back in school. That just seems unfair to all of the other students who were expelled. The Pritchards will have their hands full with Innocence. I'm so glad Anna came back. That's one less worry off of Alex's mind. Great chapter.

Name: potterchassid (Signed) · Date: 05/11/10 9:38 · For: The WODAMND Act
Oh my, oh my, now that Alex has opened up to Anna she was betrayed? But Abraham knew what to expect and was faster none the less ... powerful. I wonder whether we will see in this book what Abraham meant about the Thorn Circle not needing to remain a secret anymore.

Name: crystalphoenix (Signed) · Date: 05/10/10 23:08 · For: Sweethearts and Traitors
Oh, Anna. Of all the things... she must have known that this will destroy all of Alexandra's trust for her. It's kind of understandable, since she probably thought it might help her father, but I still don't see why she would throw away their friendship for so slim a chance.

Name: Kaiserin (Signed) · Date: 05/10/10 20:21 · For: Sweethearts and Traitors
Ouch... That had to hurt Alexa great deal. After all the time she spent feeling terrible about keeping Anna in the dark...
Turned out she couldn't actually trust her, uh?
I get it, Anna was desperate. AND, if Alex had told her what she was up to, it might have helped prevent Anna from turning into a traitor.
I shudder thinking what will become of Alex and Anna now... Poor poor poor girl.... Betraded by her best friend when she was doing something soo risky for her.
Thank Merlin Abe is ten times more awake than those loosers!! I think it's the first time you could tell I root for him!
It was quite interesting to see the nearly civil exchange between Alex and Larry. Of course, he had to be an arse and try to hex her at the end... *cough*jerk*cough* Nasty piece of work that "Elect" is. Honestly, he only has it in for Alex because he's jealous!! That Abraham Thorn's daughter hating is bull!!! He's a pampered little boy who recents her because he's not in the spotlight!! If he only knew half the crap she's been through thanks to "daddy"... Urghhhh!! Hate Larry!!!
BTW, I noticed, Abe made Alex pull the same stunt Max did. Wasn't Maximilian some sort of double agent for the confederation while he was actually helping his father? Fishy Abe!!! Very fishy indeed!!
Anyhow... great chapter!!! Really, really, truly loved it!!! Kuddos for the great work!

Name: bigtimer (Signed) · Date: 05/10/10 14:48 · For: Sweethearts and Traitors
i can't believe that anna would do that to alex, and alex turning on her father. great chapter such a good one loved how he knew that there were auors coming for him lots to find out

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 05/10/10 12:41 · For: The Ghost Writer
Call me silly but I still have hope that Max will somehow reappear. The description of the Radicalists was pretty funny. They're obviously old hippie types:D, like me. Alex's conversation with the ghostly author was very interesting. Alex can't seem to go to the Wizarding shopping area without getting into trouble. I was afraid for a moment that the people at the Owl Post Office would recognize Alex. Where's my favorite pet jarvey. You know how I love the obnoxious little beast. Great chapter.

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 05/10/10 11:13 · For: Innocence
I have a feeling that Innocence is kind of a brat. She seems to do things behind her sisters' backs. I'm happy to see all of Alex's friends back, as I love your characters, but I'm worried about Anna. Will she return to Charmbridge? Too bad the Rash twins have been put in charge of the Pritchards. For all of their talk about being mannerly they aren't very mannerly at all. Inocence's comment about the Rashes having a fit if they saw girls' bloomers was pretty funny. How will Alex get another broom--I think her father should give her one, anonymously:D Great chapter.

Name: ahattab33 (Signed) · Date: 05/09/10 1:04 · For: The Winter Ball
I’ve been an avid reader since the first Alex Quick book…but a terrible reviewer. I don’t think I’ve even left a review for Deathly Regiment yet, which is one of the most terrible things I can do as a reader. I’m here to make up for that just ever so slightly. I deeply admire these stories, for many reasons.

I think the most effective element of these stories is the characters. Alex herself is deeply flawed, and having been on this journey with her, you empathize with her, you root for her. And yet at the same time, you also understand the frustration of Anna and Julia, at her inability to face her own weaknesses and emotions, and at her seemingly impossible journey to get Max back. I think the strongest part of the characterization is that not everyone appears what they seem at first. This chapter is an excellent illustration of the ambiguity that is present in many of the characters: Dean Grimm and her sister are hard, no nonsense, strict, meddlesome, interfering…and yet:

“Do you really think after all your escapades, all your lying, that you'd still be on your way back to Charmbridge if she and I weren't doing our best to keep you out of the hands of the Juvenile Magical Offenses Division?”

The ability to have no conclusions to be drawn immediately on any character is something that I no longer take for granted reading this series…even Darla, after the last book, is still ambiguous, and that is a powerful testament to your writing, considering we are only seeing the books from Alex’s POV.

For the series overall: the plots are powerful, complex, and wickedly addictive. There isn’t a boring chapter – it is always moving, revealing something interesting, humorous, character driven, intriguing…I can frequently be found at my desk at work with your story up on my Blackberry, which is one of the lame excuses I give for not leaving a review, as it becomes tedious to type on out when there are two letters per key and I now appear to be typing a lengthy text message. I’ve cried, I’ve gasped out loud, I’ve gone back to reread certain passages once things have been revealed, I’ve made guesses and second guesses and thought about the story during random times of the day.

Now, as for this chapter in particular:

Alex has still not reached that point of acceptance of Max’s death, which I feel is both obvious in this chapter from her conversation with Anna, but realistic…to a point. I keep debating about how precocious and determined she is to do something like steal Valera’s time turner, and yet I have to keep reminding myself of her age. I know that you’ve been told several times she acts much more mature than her age, and I every once in a while when I read a sentence she says, or a word she uses, or an action she takes, I have a little, “Hmmm…” moment myself. She is very cheeky, witty, quick (almost instinctive) to bite back to authority, and driven towards an almost adult goal of changing a large and important part of her life. But at the same time, it’s her character development that allows me to embrace this. She’s obviously a powerful witch, and while she doesn’t necessarily flaunt it, she doesn’t back down from it either, and sometimes uses it to her advantage. She also is not emotionally developed, and I think it’s this emotional development – the inability to accept Max’s death and her own inability to open up to other people – that is the strongest factor for her immaturity and age, as she is constantly arguing she can handle situations, where even we as the reader, who sees what she’s been through, knows that sometimes, she can’t.

I have a soft spot for Anna, and therefore really enjoyed the scene between the two in the beginning. I think their friendship is such a strong part of Alex’s life, whether she realizes it or not, and it made me heave a sigh of relief when they were on better terms. In addition, it helped to illustrate that while Alex is still working on that emotional maturity thing (“You're right. I've lied to you. I've hidden things from you. Not just from you — from everyone. I've hurt a lot of people, including my own sister.” Alexandra closed her eyes. “I'm not good at talking about... stuff, Anna.”), she’s still not there yet (“Are you done trying to bring back Max?” Anna asked softly. Alexandra didn't answer immediately. “No,” she said at last.”).

The dance idea can of course, become clichéd, but the way in which clichés are written can make them readable, subverted, whatever you want to call it. The focus of the Winter Ball, in this case, was not necessarily the outfits, or the hair, or the dates – although, part of it was. But, really, it all seemed to flow smoothly in one chapter, interspersed throughout with Alex being completely nonchalant and trying to persuade Anna to go, and making fun of the others for making a big deal (the fact that she kept rolling her eyes at everyone kept making me giggle). But of course the kicker of the whole thing was Larry Alpo.

As with many of the chapters, each chapter manages to have a mini-cliffhanger of its own, lol. And its own twists and turns that manage to be surprising and eluding, but that make sense when you think back on it. As of right now, having Larry Alpo, the last person in the entire school she would dance with, relay the message, do it by DANCING with her, seems like an odd way to do it, especially due to the suspicion it’s bound to arise. But…I’m willing to have a little faith…to see why it might have happened that way, as the “why”, or after-effects, are not usually felt for several chapters. Again – the ambiguity. And what is the significance of Valentine’s Day? I do feel like, because of the massiveness of the stories, and the fact that I haven’t re-read the other two books, and that I read them every few days at a time and not necessarily continuously, that there might be some significance that I don’t remember, but that we’ve been told? Or…that I’m having too much fun digging into it, and there might not be really any significance at all. :) I enjoy that aspect of these stories.

I think it is a shame that this story does not get more substantive reviews, and I apologize for myself for not leaving reviews when reading, as I have done with every chapter of the Alex Quick stories. I know you have written this story out in its entirety, and that there isn’t much in the way of constructive criticism in here, but at least know that you have a very appreciative admirer who hopes you continue to write Alex’s journey.


Author's Response:

Wow, what a wonderful, long review! I think that makes up for your lack of previous reviews. But feel free to write more. ;)

Your observations about Alexandra's mental state and emotional development are spot-on. If anything, she regressed after Max's death, and she hasn't really recovered yet. She's trying, but her trials are not over yet...

Name: Hesperia (Signed) · Date: 05/08/10 4:01 · For: The Winter Ball
Aw, Alexandra and Larry! Okay, he was under a spell of some type, but I thought that was cute. :D

Name: bigtimer (Signed) · Date: 05/07/10 15:56 · For: The Winter Ball
can't wait to see what alex and abey-ham talk about good chapter

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 05/07/10 15:09 · For: The Witch of Old Larkin Pond
I feel so bad because Alex lost the broom her brother gave her. You know, I'm not liking Diana Grimm--she's always so mean--but I've always been anti-authority to some extent. Although, Alex could've been a little more polite. And what's up with Bonnie? Great chapter.

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