Very nice buildup! I like how you've set up some tension with Harry, at least on Oliver's part: he's such a gentlemen he immediately recognized and felt a little bad about Harry liking Ginny too. It will be interesting to see how that resolves, as well as how you write Ginny's interest in Oliver (unless this is a one-sided romance, which will be very sad for Oliver!) Good luck as you continue!
Author's Response: Thankies, Gina! I'm thinking that to be a good captain, one has to be somewhat sensitive and observant to other's feelings. And I like to think of Oliver as someone who would notice these things, and see that this wasn't his game to play... :P We'll see how Oliver does - I'm going to try to stick to canon as much as possible, but still, I couldn't stand a sad Oliver :P Thanks, Gina, for reading!
Nice job! I think Oliver and Ginny could be a good couple given what we know of their Quidditch careers later on. I'm glad you addressed their age difference here. It will be interesting to see how it turns out for them - does the next chapter jump ahead or continue from here? Good luck as you continue! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Well yes, I thought the same - they really should be a good couple. The only problem is the age difference... in this chapter, that is. ;)
Can he wait 5 years?
Good chapter about a person's last year at school.
Author's Response: We'll see - another chapter's on the way :) Thank you lots for reading and reviewing!
Hello. I like Oliver fics - partly because I've written one and so I'm intrigued at fresh takes on his character. He's so obsessed with Quidditch that there has to be something more to him - LOL. Anyway, I like your interpretation of him. He's still as focused but that's not all there is to him and you can see that it troubles him slightly that he's drifting away from his friends.
I have some issues with the timeline in your fic. They're about to play Hufflepuff, which in POA, was the first match of the season (they switched barely two days before from playing Slytherin) yet Oliver talks of them having a rough season. They had had a rough season, but he was content with the team this year and trusted them to do their best. In fact their season before wasn't rough because Quidditch matches were cancelled when the Chamber was opened. That's a minor thing though.
I do like the revulsion he feels at realising Ginny is only twelve - poor Oliver! But I don't understand why he doesn't immedietly know who she is. He knows Fred and George very well, after all, and I'm sure Ginny would have been introduced at some point especially as she's a second year. Mind you boys are bad at social niceties so perhaps it didn't occur to the twins to do that.
To wrap this up, I enjoyed reading about the lovely Oliver and thought your characterisation of him was really good. Good luck in the competition ~Carole~
Author's Response: Hi Carole! Urgh, I'm awful at fitting my stories with timelines. I tried digging some for this story, but I try not to let canon control the outcome completely, because which team they played when is after all not the point in my story. I'm glad you pointed that out, though, as it's something I need to work on. Overall, I think you'll just have to have a bit of imagination when reading ;) It's hard fitting stories into the canon timeline and get it 100 percent right and still have an interesting, original story. Anyway - I'm glad you liked my Oliver, he really is an interesting character to write! Thank you for reading :)