Reviewer: Trucker
Date: 02/21/10 0:31
Chapter: Chapter 1

I loved it! All it needs is a little polishing of the minor details, like using "un-phased" when you mean "unfazed" or "between one of the homes" which doesn't work because "between" requires two homes to make any sense.. .

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Good catches on those corrections, too. They've been changed accordingly. Look-out for a follow-up in Towerborne's adventures. -JBS

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