I'm confused. What were you writing about. I mean, it was great writing but not that great of a plot in my opinion. I'm sure that many many people out there would get it and love it. But, that's just not how my mind works. Sorry!
I really like the way you wrote this. It's a bit like the Greco-Roman creation myth, starting with Erebus and Nox (except in that one, Erebus is "darkness" and Nox is technically "night") very good style, too.