I liked the story but I didn't like so many of the song lyrics being integrated into the text. I didn't know you could quote that much of a song in a story or does calling it a song fic allow that?
You should write more Ted and Andromeda because you write them so well. I hadn;t read this before although I have heard a lot about it. I think I was put off because I didn't know the song that well, but having listened to Darren Kriss - ha ha - I can relate to it now.
Small nit-pick I asked. I accepted. I ran away. I didn;t quite get this. I was thinking it should be 'I asked. She accepted ... because I was assuming the asking was a marriage proposal. If that's not the case then I'm not totally sure what Ted was asking or accepting. (although I'm possibly being very very thick and it's to do with the dance.) You need to put me out of my misery, here.
,br> Lovely oneshot. I love his POV. ~Carole~
Author's Response: You have read this. You voted for it in the first HP Couples Remix activity heeheehee. (Yes, I remember all this >.>) About that crit, I think I meant that he asked for her hand, accepted their fate and ran away. Kind of very vague, though. I mean, now that I look at it this way, it does sound a tad confusing. <.< Thanks for pointing it out, I shall look into this. And thanks for the review as wellllll! <33
mrwah love the fic, love the characters, love the plot, love the writing, everything but the song!!!!!
Author's Response: Hahaha! I'm sorry you hated the song. I rather like it, and this entire fic was inspired by it. :) But to each, her own. Thanks for reviewing, though! ~Natalie
*sniffs* I just typed you this really long, energetic review, and then my stupid *smashes something* lousy *smashes something else* computer *throws it on the floor* lost internet connection! *wails*
Anyhow, I'll try to retype this as correctly as possible . . . here goes . . . .
You know how I feel about this story? Well, I don't know how to explain it, but I kind of get this kaleidoscopic explosion of feelings! That's it! No, really. It's true.
1. I feel . . . . slightly annoyed. Not by you, but by that song. You know it used to be cool. But after I heard it about 78 times, I started to get annoyed by it.
2. BUT I was a little bit happy because I would have enjoyed this less if you wouldn't have put that song in there. It almost . . . makes me want to listen to it! Really! That's pretty powerful writing there.
3. This story makes you feel warm and spongy (wow don't you love my weird adjectives?) and it's not too gross or anything and it has a slightly modern feel. I LOVE IT.
Thank you for giving me something to spend my time on, Natalie. I love your writing.
And I took the Sorting Quiz. Wonder what house I'll be in?
Author's Response: OOOH! I really hope you get placed in Hufflepuff! I am one, and we have been beating the crap out of the other houses in the House Cup area for quite a long time. Hahahaha!
*hopes none of my friends in the other houses see this response* Thank you for reviewing this particular story! It's one of my favourites and I am so sad that it didn't get as popular as I'd expected it to be. :( I know over-playing songs can cause them to grate on your nerves, so I avoid doing that. Haha!
"Spongy" is a nice adjective. I shall use it in one of my fanfics. :D:D Listen, Megan, I really adore your reviews. They have been cheering me up for a few days now. I really appreciate it. Thanks a gazillion!
Oooo! I love that song too! But this fic is kinda hard to read when you're trying to sing the while reading the lyrics! ;P
Author's Response: Brilliant song! Also, sorry about the inconvenience, but you shouldn't have sung along, silly! :D Thanks for the review.
Very nice! I was going to start Becoming Ritta, but when I went to your author's page and saw this I was like - whoa. See, I've been hearing this song on the radio loads this summer and found it really catchy. But until I came to your author's page, I had no idea what it was! Seriously - I almost hummed it to someone today to try and figure it out. So I figure I was destined to read this story. :)
I think I've said this before, but you write in first person really well. With this story you really captured Ted's feelings terrifically. Great job!
The song lyrics fit in with the story really well. The only thing was, knowing this song is so recent (like, hearing it today!) was kind of incongruent with knowing Ted and Andromeda most likely ran off sometime in the 1970s and probably weren't dancing to Train. So it makes me wonder - is there a 1970s song that would work? No idea and it doesn't really matter, since the lyrics still go great with the story regardless.
I'll have to get to Becoming Rita another day, but it's one of the big pieces on my to-read list so I will someday!
Author's Response: Hello!
What a surprise! I never thought you'd be wandering into this story. :) Oh well, I got the song as a prompt for this challenge at SBBC, and I don't think I'd have ever started writing Ted/Andromeda if it wasn't for it. Yeah, the song seems a bit out of place as those two eloped in the 70's. lol. But I knew their story was perfect for this. :D
And don't worry about BR! lol. I know the length can be off-putting for people. THANKS FOR THE REVIEW!
Natalie. Natalie. Natalie.
I have loved this drabble (well I guess I should call it a fic now) ever since I first read it. You chose the perfect pairing for the song and the way you have written Ted is just as uplifting and hopeful as the song from which it is inspired.
...a kaleidoscopic explosion of feelings.
I have to point this line out because it perfectly sums up the song. Such a bright, colourful phrase for a bright, colourful song. Well done, Nat. Keep being awesome. You truly introduced me to Ted/Dromee so thank you.
Author's Response: Hey Julia!
Thanks for this uplifting review. :D I am glad I managed to make Ted/Andromeda for this. In canon, we know so little about them - apart from the fact that they eloped (and defied the Blacks), we don't know anything about their dynamics of their relationship. But it was that point which drew me in. They really had to be intensely in love to pull such a stunt, and ...well, yeah, the rest is SBBC history. ;) Thanks again!
Love ya, Natalie.
I was really excited you decided to put this up on the archives, because I never got a chance to discuss it. But, I don’t know how much of an actually discussion it would have been. Because this is going to be the worst review I’ve ever left for you…it’s going to be like the one I left for Sunday Lunch where I just gushed tearfully about how much I loved it, and that was about all. Because daggum it I love your Ted and Andromeda. Seriously seriously seriously.
You really have a gift at giving Ted a voice, a personality. He really comes alive in so many ways, but especially for how he and Andromeda could have come together: “We don’t really speak, although I can feel her presence as though my senses were built solely for that purpose.”. That line is amazing. And the whole paragraph where he describes the building of their relationship…even in those few lines you FEEL it. And yet, she doesn’t feel stronger than him, somehow. Maybe that’s just me, but they do feel balanced in a way, because you know in the end, she dancing FOR him. She left her family FOR him. She’s amused that her dancing worked, and wants him to look at her, to kiss her. AARGH! So so good.
I love your knack of using sentence fragments without overdoing them:
“I asked. I accepted. I ran away.”
‘ “Look at me,” she whispers. I obey. Lovely brown eyes.’
And yet you contrast it so beautifully with the massive run on sentence at the end that works wondrously.
So…you are marvelous and I fangirl you more and more with everything you write.
b29; Your twin.
Author's Response: WOW! I thought you weren't going to come online at all. haha!
Anyway, this review made me gush with love and pride. And I got so shocked when I saw "ahattab33". lol. Wow. Uhm...yeah, what I can say about this fic? I mean, I think it is the best thing I've written to date. AND I am so happy you thought they were balanced, because they ARE. Andromeda nearly comes off as the one running the show, but no, it isn't.
So, now, even I dunno what else to say - except that THANK YOU FOR THE REVIEW, and your love and support. :D
Awww, this was so sweet! It's actually the first Ted/Andromeda I've ever read, but I may have to read more now.
And I LOVE that song! It's so much fun to sing. :)
Author's Response: Hey!
Ted/Andromeda is my new OTP. I love writing them, and I'm writing one more. :D Thanks for the review!