Awww..... that doesn't need much explaining.
Haha, now I'm going to leave you a less crappy review than I did on LJ!
Just as the other reviewers pointed out, I really like how you characterised Teddy. He seemed like he was in such a state, and his emotions and doubts were so real for me as a reader. I really don't think I've read a better rendition of him during my time in fan fiction (I haven't read Teddy/Victoire as a pairing, but I've read them as separate characters). He is just so genuine and human, it really adds so much to your story.
Victoire was good for as much facetime as she got. Though Teddy was the main focus of the fic, Victoire was a huge part of this, and I really loved how you had her lie to Teddy. Imperfect people make perfect stories to me, and the way both she and Teddy were imperfect, flawed human beings really added so much to their believability.
Your Harry made me laugh. He's so much like the Harry I know in my head. He was a star, covering for Teddy, even against he fearsome flock of redheaded Weasley women. That takes some stones, hehe. He didn't judge, but he was understanding. Contrary to popular belief, Harry had a lot of growing up to do after DH, and learning to accept mistakes and so forth was part of that. You showed an appropriate amount of insight into his personality, and since he's my favourite major character, I really love that about this piece.
Your meticulous work with the timeline was... I have no words. There was not one canon mistake. Not a single one. I can't even describe the number of times that I've read Next-Gen stories and figuratively - and sometimes literally - beat my head on my desk, frustrated because a simple fact in canon, easily accessed through the Lexicon, was missed because the author couldn't be arsed to look it up.
The fact that you got everyone's age right, the characters in general, and it was well-written makes this an awesome fic - one which I intend to put in the recommendation thread on the Beta Boards for this category. You made me smile the first time I read it, and I loved it just as much the second time around.
The pacing and flow of the story were spectacular. There were no dead moments in the story, and there were none that were too overloaded with information or drama. It was structured just so beautifully for readability and enjoyability. It is a gift among writers (and one that I do not have, I'm afraid) for ease in reading their work. Enjoy this gift, and don't you dare waste it!
I hope you love this fic as much as I do, because you've really done a stellar piece of characterisation for Teddy. Total win for you!
Well, that's all for now, so take care and happy writing. I am, of course, on the lookout for new chapters of The Torment Bred in the Race. ^_^
Author's Response: God, I love your reviews, LOL! I really love Teddy ... more than might be healthy, so to hear such good things about his characterization is wonderful. TTBitR is coming slowly what with finals for school fast approaching, but I'm working on it. Amber
I really liked how you captured the innocence of Teddy and Victorie. Also I liked how you made it interesting and it made me want to read it faster so I would know if they got together in the end!! It was really well written!!!
That was really good. I like how you kept both Teddy and Victoire acting according to their age, and like one of the reviewers below, I liked the suspense of the earlier parts.
This was a really good start. I would love to read more Teddy/Victoire from you. :)
Author's Response: Thanks! I've been wanting to do a Teddy/Victoire story for a long time, and finally, the time was right. I love Teddy more than is probably healthy, so I'm sure there will be more of him in the future!
How consistent was the characterisation! Everything just kept on happening at the right moments - Harry's interesting letter, their kiss, the waking up, Molly, James... and if it wasnt the plot, it was the right dialogue and narration to make the reader laugh. Outstading, really. A unique idea explored with keen skill.
More! More! More!
Author's Response: Wow! Thanks for such an amazing review!
^_^ Real good piece of fanfic!
It was not one of those fics that you can smell all along the way its was going to end!! You actually had me fooled they would not end up together until the last second!! Good one!!
Author's Response: Thanks for your kind review!
nice story :)
Author's Response: Thanks!