beautiful! I'm almost in tears, this is a perfect poem for Snape, whose unrequited love for Lily is surely the most beautiful in all of fiction.
Hello Magical Maeve,
wow. That was beautiful, poignant and elegant. You've captured the tragedy and miracle of that dreadful night very well in less than two hundred words!
Very good work.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm liking the word elegant - I don't think anyone has ever described my poems as elegant before so that is quite the complement. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. :-)
Jan, this has left me completely speechless. I am in awe. You take the reader full circle beautifully and I love that.
And summer is shunned as evening settles soft.
I honestly do not know what to say about this line but it took my breath away and set a certain tone to the poem that is hard to place. I do not know whether to weep or smile because you have caught all these conflicting emotions and melded them together as one. And the way you have finished, oh, the way you have finished. It feels like the final beat of a song, the final chord. Tonally, the entire piece reminds me of Chopin's Nocturne in C-Sharp Minor. So melancholic and solitary and beautiful. You know the melody will go either way yet it still manages to surprise you. That's how I felt reading this poem.
Author's Response: Oh, Julia, a review like that from someone who can work words so well herself is a treat! And you know, funny you should mention Chopin, because he is buzzing around my head at the moment - and not so much his music, (which is generally hauntng and beautiful) but his life. See, it all seeps out of the collective imagination eventually! Thank you for the review - made my day.