Reviews For Non Compos Mentis
Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione
Date: 03/20/11 3:03
Chapter: Chapter 1

Oooh, I loved the last line. Somehow it really sums up the whole story, which was a nice mixture of well-written, interesting plot and characterisation and just plain funny. Great characterisation of everyone involved - I loved the part about how Rose and Hugo bicker, just reminded me a little of their parents haha. I also liked how you turned this into a growing up story, particularly for James and Albus (and Rose a bit as well) - it meant that even in such a short story you showed great character development.

I almost felt a little sad for Harry at the end, with the whole thing about his boys growing up, but then you brought in that fantastic last line and I thought that he's still going to have to watch them go through a whole lot more before that time arrives.

Anyway... I think this review has been a rather less sensical (I know that's not a word... though I really think it should be) than normal, sorry about that... But great story!

Just one thing - I wonder, how long would Harry be able to keep the secret from Ginny? I think she would be too aware of how her sons are to not be suspicious, and I can't imagine Harry being able to lie to her that well... I would imagine he'd be a little like Arthur is with Molly.

~Katrina

Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked this, because it's probably the first one-shot I'd ever written that I really liked a lot. If you haven't guessed, a little bit of personal experiece went into the making of this story (except I was nine, which is far less appropriate, lol). To the developing young teenage, alcohol is oh, so potent, especially when the cider was made to be alcoholic, not accidentally so. Plus, I make a living off of torturing Albus. :D

My views on Harry's parenting skills are a bit different than normal. He's not always 'there', since his job is demanding of his time and concentration, so when he is around his kids, he wants to make sure they don't see him as the parent who only swoops in here and there to lay down the law. Plus, I think he would understand how embarrassing this would be for Al and feel bad for him. Heck, I felt bad for his as I wrote this, so I couldn't risk his mum's wrath. :P Whether or not she remains in the dark is yet to be seen, hehe.

Thanks for your brilliant reviews. They always make my day (and my f-list loves hearing from you, as well!), so thank you much! Eventually, you'll run out of stories to read, though. lol

~Jess

Reviewer: Fiffer Haliwell
Date: 05/13/10 22:13
Chapter: Chapter 1

I loved this story in fact this story made my day. Whle underage drinking is bad, this was such an innocent way fo it to happen. I mean they didn't go out looking for drinks. It was funny to watch especially after reading the whole story fotehm beaing grown ups. I think harry played teh cool dad card even if he is keeping thigns from Ginny (not smart) but then again everyone has secrets with their parents, it the fun thing of being a kid. I really liked the story.

Author's Response:

Well, hello again!

I'm so glad you liked this story. It was a complete bear to write, because it was for a challenge that involved so many random prompts, you would not believe, lol. If you haven't guessed by now, Albus is my favourite character (though it doesn't seem like it with all that I do to the poor boy). He's also a bit less wise to the world at that age, so naturally, he was my target. 

I, too, disapprove of teen drinking, but this story, like so many others, was inspired by a personal experience of my own. When I was nine, I attended a local mill festival, which celebrated the historical significance of our town. Vendors of all sorts were there, and a constant favourite was the local apple orchard owner, who pressed fresh cider every year. 

Well, my particular jug of cider, apparently, was not so fresh. I don't know if you've ever seen a drunk nine-year-old, but I assure you, it's not pretty. It was completely unintentional on everyone's part, though I probably should have stopped drinking it once I realised that it tasted odd, but of course, I loved it and wanted to finish it off. Woops.

So there you have it. My pre-teen four-alarm hangover became a story for my readers to enjoy, lol. I wrote it, hoping that any youngsters that read it would learn a valuable lesson. 

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, as usual. And, also as usual, take care and happy reading!

Jess

Reviewer: Auroura_P
Date: 05/01/10 1:12
Chapter: Chapter 1

Poor Albus. It's more fun to watch people get drunk and act stupid then it is to actually do it yourself.

Keep up the great work!

Author's Response:

Thank you very much for reading!

This was written for a challenge, and I had to insert the oddest and most random events into it, and it was, in Captain Obvious terms, a challenge. However, I really do like how it came out. As you know, torturing Albus is one of my favorite pasttimes. :D

Thanks for reviewing, and happy reading!

Jess

P.S. - The Epilogue for Vindication of James Potter is in the queue right now, so look for that to come out really soon. :)

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 01/29/10 20:56
Chapter: Chapter 1

That was *fantastic*! I loved every minute of it. It was not only deliciously fun to read, since we have all either been there ourselves or been there with a friend, but it was exceptionally well-written! Kudos for capturing the older canon characters so well and for instantly bringing life to the next generation. This story was very well-paced, and there were so many subtle hints of character, connections made, and great lines that it was really just about perfectly done. I am very impressed! I hope you do well in the challenge!! ~Gina :)
PS. Is the last line a hint of things to come?? :)

Author's Response:

Yay, I think I just turned a brilliant shade of red that would make Godric Gryffindor jealous. Bless you for that. :D

It was actually inspired by something that happened to me when I was nine. We had a mill festival that celebrated both the local agriculture and the local Native American tribes, and every year, they always sold fresh cider, which was always wonderful and delicious. Well, one year, I bought some, drank the whole quart, and I found that I couldn't walk straight. When I got home, I told my dad, who laughed until he choked on his own air...I guess that was my first 'bender.' Hehe!

And as for things to come...my plot bunnies multiply like, well, bunnies. I have a feeling that the Potter/Weasley kids, at least in my mind, have a lot more trouble to get into before I'm done with them. It was a nice aberration from my normal doom/gloom angsty stuff to write this, and I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

Jess

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