I loved it!! You should really write some sequel to it!
I said it before and I'll say it again, you need to continue this. At least until he gets through Hogwarts. If not maybe the meeting of Harry's family and Dudleys.
The story is great! I love the idea of a wizard being born into the dursley family especially because of how they view "Harry's lot". I think that if you had the time this would make a great hp novella.
Red Haired Mom,
Please continue this fiction. I can see so many possibilities. Driving Vernon and Petunia nuts is one. A friendship between Harry and Dudley would be another. Not to mention Harry's kids would have another cousin. Please!!!!!!
Interesting spin. I did see an interview with J.K saying that she thought of putting Dudley and his magical son on the platform, (19 yrs later) and the decided that magic wouldn't of servied contact with Vernon's genetics. Patunia I assume would've been privately glad, she did always love her sister, and she kept Harry regardless. I liked your take on events though I'm almost sure Dudley's wife was named Dasiy.
I really liked the plot of this fic, I’ve always liked to believe that Dudley’s son was a wizard so I was very excited to see what you made of it.
The characterisation in this fic seemed a little odd to me. I think you had petunia’s character down to a tee, but a DIFFERENT Petunia to the one we saw in the final book. I thought the portrayal of her here was very much more like the early books, and although it was a really good early petunia, I would have liked to see a bit more of the type of Petunia that we, or at least I, saw in the seventh book. I thought Harry’s characterisation was good in parts but there were glimpses of things that didn’t strike me as very Harry-like, when he said “ma-am” for example. I loved your character of Dudley though, you really showed his different side, very much the side we saw in book seven, both he and his wife were fantastic and so lovely.
The plot was good and well handled; you fitted a lot into few words. I liked the interaction between Harry and Dudley and the way you showed the changes that had occurred in the twenty years, although I am surprised that Harry and Dudley hadn’t seen each other before now, any particular reasoning behind this?
So, it was a really cute short story, well done =D
This fic caught my eye as soon as I read the title. I love reading fics about growing up and acceptance; and Dudley’s acceptance of the wizarding world was really nice to see. I completely agree that this is how it would happen, and that Dudley and Harry would become quite close in their later years of life. Dudley was very in character for me when he stood up to Vernon on having his son be a wizard; I think the events in Dudley’s life with Harry really changed his perspective on wizards and the wizarding world, and you clearly captured that in his character.
The only thing that I think could change in this fic is the formality of it all. I feel like everyone is speaking way too formal for the occasion and it makes it sound less emotional and almost detaches the reader from the story by not being able to connect to the characters.
“Mother Petunia, who was at the door?”
“One more word, Aunt, and I will Silence you and not allow you to speak again,”
I’ve never heard anyone call someone Mother before and it seems a little awkward; the second reads awkwardly too as it’s quite a mouthful and just doesn’t seem like something someone would shout out. I do, however, like the part when Petunia starts talking about the Weasley family, “You’d think they’d never heard of soap, or does your kind not use soap? That little girl looked to grow up and be just as much of a nothing as her mother. Married into poverty and breeding more freaks than she could feed…” It’s very full of wicked emotions and is exactly something that she would say.
I’m a little confused as to why Dudley and his wife are with Petunia and Vernon. Do they live with them, or are they just visiting? I would find it a little odd that Dudley lived with his parents when he had a family; surely his mum and dad would kick him out sometime!
I like how you ended this story, having Harry think about Dudley meeting his family. It’s very heart-warming and makes me smile! :) I really do think that Dudley and Harry would become close and your ending suggests that. I’d love to see how things turned out afterwards in Diagon Alley, and even see how Christopher does at Hogwarts! I suppose I’ll just have to imagine… unless a really great writer would like to put it into words ;)
Great story with a great plot, I loved it! Keep up the good work, and hopefully I can see more about Christopher and Dudley from you in the future!
wow awsome you should continue christophers story make it intresting id love to hear more
I love how you made Dudley mature yay your a very good writer hope to hear more stories
awwww,,,,it was nice seeing Dudly be able to embrace wizardkind. lol
That was great. I always wondered if one of Dudley's kids would be a witch or wizard.
The ending sounds like it needs more chapters.
that was sweet i like it
Hey! This is a great idea for a story! I love the idea of Harry going to get Dudley's child for Hogwarts. I especially like the idea of Dudley being okay with it, given that handshake in DH. Christopher seems to have somehow turned out okay in spite of his grandparents. Nice story! ~Gina :)
I think is really good. I agree this shouldn't be AU.
i enjoyed this story alot, id really like to see harry adn dudley's trip to diagon alley too
Author's Response: I've thought about writing a sequel to this but as of right now, I don't see it happening anytime soon. There are way too many other writing projects in the works. Thanks so much for your review. I'm so glad you liked the story.
It was great. I really liked it.
Author's Response: Thanks. I'm glad.
This was nicely done, although I've read similar stories. Everyone still has their own style and story. I really liked seeing Harry return to the Dursley home. I love the concept that Dudley has a wizard son and that he's accepted that fact. I listened with interest to see how far Petunia would go with her insults. How nasty to insult the Weasleys, but Petunia never did have the best manners. Wonderful story. I enjoyed reading it. Keep writing.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. This was originally written from a prompt that in my head couldn't be written any other way. I'm really glad you liked it. In the original version Petunia was a lot nastier but I revised it at the urging of a couple of people who thought it was a little to AU. I couldn't see Dudley not accepting the fact of his son being a wizard since the scene in DH. He seemed to have an 'about face' in his thought processes and maybe even grew up a bit. Thanks so much for the review. I'll keep writing if you keep reading. Deal?