Reviewer: WeasleyMom
Date: 06/02/12 4:00
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is a lot different than anything else I've read from you, Jess, but I really like it. Nice job capturing the grief of a child for his parent. I knew it was Scorpious, obviously, and I liked the things we learned about Draco here. I liked the use of the word "mark" to mean both the mark Draco had on the world and on Scorpious' life, as well as the one he had to live with on his own flesh. Nice.

I was a bit obsessed with who his wife was... I see you had Rose in mind, which is a nice fit. I think the cantankerous uncle sounded like he knew an awful lot about the subject at hand. And while all the Weasleys would have known grief, none would have known it like George would. Is that who you had in mind? I really like the idea.

Do you think I could use the words "really" and "like" a few more times in this review? Haha, you deserve better, but you know how my reviews go.

You are so versatile, Jess, and this is only one example. I liked the letter format, and the irony that he was actually sending the letter in to Roxanne, a family member. (And the daughter of the man who gave him the useful advice? If so, extra cool irony, my friend.)

May the birthday shenanigans continue!

Author's Response:

Holy crap, this fic is old. It got audio-ficced a while back, which reminded me that it even existed. Julia had nominated it ages ago.

Yes, it's Scorpius, and the wife is Rose, and the uncle is certainly George. I hadn't intended to be irony so much as an 'anonymous' letter that Scorpius knew would reach a limited audience (his family and in-laws) and maybe let them know that he was all right, even if those around him didn't go about it quite the right way.

Anyway, this response is about as good as it will get, as I've nearly forgotten what this fic is about, lol. I'm glad you liked it, and that it is still something of quality despite being one of my very first one-shots that took about four tries to get validated. >.< ~Jess

Reviewer: SimpleMinds
Date: 04/04/11 10:37
Chapter: Chapter 1

Think this is just lovely and elliptical. And i am of course intensely curious about who the wife and the Uncle are! I think, for some reason the Uncle sounded very Harry-ish, in his anti-Malfoyism, but that wouldn't work as well as if it were a Weasley (i think i'd immediately think Ron or George). Certainly got me thinking anyway.

The letter form did seem to capture the poignancy of loss very very well though, Although i think perhaps strangely, i think the saddest bit was when 'he' mentioned the 'War fought before i was born'. Caught me 'right there' twofold really, there's the fact that time has really, really moved on and the wizarding world we know has grown past us, without us(!) but also it reminds me of our muggle wars, and that soon we'll have no living reminders of our past.

B'yeah, it's some achievement to bring those ideas to mind so, well done.

Author's Response:

Wow, I'm glad you liked this story so much! What I wanted was for Scorpius's loss to be conveyed, but I also wanted it to be a commentary about how, while conflicts of the past are dead and gone, it still followed his father his whole life. It was his hope that, in writing anonymously, Draco could be remembered in death by people who had no idea who he was, rather than go unhonoured as he had been in life. It's human nature to not feel as bad about someone's death because we know and don't like them, yet we find it in ourselves to stop in our tracks when a celebrity dies.

And as for the wife, I left it intentionally vague, since everyone tends to ship him with a Weasley/Potter, so without a specific one mentioned, it can be whichever you want. However, that being said, I really meant it to be Rose. :)

Thanks for the review, and if you got this far with my ramble, good for you. 

~Jess

Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione
Date: 03/20/11 3:27
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hi Jess,

So I've been gradually making my way through your author page, and eventually I came across this. I think this was really beautiful and had such a great message. There are so many beautiful lines in this, for example regret is much like a potent spice; a little bit keeps us honest, but too much makes everything taste bitter - that's just so perfectly written and so true. This line - I’d like to say that grief will always be a constant companion of mine, but unlike its first vestiges in my life, I no longer allow it to hold dominion over me, to dictate how I live my life. really summed this fic up so well and so beautifully.

I liked the anonymity of the author - even though I could tell that it was Scorpius writing it, somehow not naming him made it a universal story, something for everyone to identify with. The cantankerous uncle sounded a little like Ron, so I'm not quite sure who Scorpius' wife is then - perhaps Lily or Dominique? Anyway, it's not particularly importnat I don't think, for the reason I've just stated.

So, a beautifully written fic with great characterisation and an interesting and important message. Good job :).

~Katrina

Author's Response:

I've been of two minds about this story. The challenge for which it was written really didn't call for this type of letter/narrative, so this was my... third(?) go round with it. Originally, there was far more story and less of the 'article', which gave far more background into the story, but it was after this (finally validated) version that I gave up and settled on this. I like the message that I tried to instill in it, and you're correct in assuming that the anonymity was meant to make this a universal concept rather than a single-character story. Scorpius just seemed like a prime candidate to lose his father early, since Draco wasn't exactly in the business of making friends for himself.

I'm happy that you like this story and what it was meant to convey. Again, I love your reviews and look forward to your next visit. :D

~Jess

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 01/27/10 18:26
Chapter: Chapter 1

That was very good! I like how the author remained anonymous, it was fun to read the clues about who it might be. I think I know, although I'm not sure who his wife and her uncle are. :) The first person voice was a good choice, as it was very personal and moving. The only thing I might suggest is a concluding paragraph at the end by the reporter wrapping it up. Good luck in this challenge as well! ~Gina :)

Author's Response:

Thank you for the review, GIna, and I'm glad to see you lurking in my work. Ra-Ra-Ravenclaw! :D

I'll definitely have to consider changing the end to include a last paragraph, but I'd have to do it soon, considering it was nominated for an audiofic.

Well, I'm glad you liked it, and I shall see you around Mugglenet in various places. Cheers!

Jess

Reviewer: the opaleye
Date: 01/21/10 4:09
Chapter: Chapter 1

I can't believe this has no reviews, Jess. It was sincere. It was poignant. It was beautifully written. You have caught the emotion of a grieving child without any melodrama but with a quiet sadness which I truly appreciate.

I love how you kept the author anonymous yet clearly insinuated who he was and the identity of the other characters. The entire piece flows well and I don't feel as if you have wasted words at all. Every sentence has relevance and meaning and nothing seems to take away from the point you are trying to put across.

All in all I'm very impressed. The emotional undertones through the piece are so powerful yet subtle. I'm in awe. Fantastic work.

Julia XD

Author's Response:

**blush**

The only one of my Winter Snows things that has gotten reviews is my Lockhart piece, which makes me happy, because it was my favorite. This one, though, was the most giant pain in the ass, because it got sent back TWICE from the mods, saying it didn't follow the prompt. But I stuck to my guns, because I knew that it would lose most of its emotive power if I removed the anonymity. Carole really helped me by suggesting that I put in the reason that Draco was killed. I really didn't see it as important, but apparently, when something like that is left in the dark, I guess it's maddening, lol.

Thank you so much for the glowing review. I got one earlier that brought me from a cranky freaking mood and it made my day. You, on the other hand, have made my night, which is doubly important, because I'm about to start writing now, lol. Luv ya, Jules!

~Jess

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