Reviews For Returning
Reviewer: Midnight Storm
Date: 03/12/11 2:49
Chapter: Returning

Hello again, Lise :)

I really liked this one. Admittedly, I went through about a quarter of the fic thinking it was Harry's second person, not Hermione's (fail by me).

It was a lovely, flowing piece with good description (something I myself seem unable to pull off). Everybody seems to have a different interpretation of how Hermione returned to her parents, and I like this one.

My only issue is that Hermione Apparates from London to Aus. I'm pretty sure that Voldemort says/thinks that some distances are too far to Apparate, and Australia is quite far from England.

I hope to read more from you soon!
x Annie x

Author's Response: The difficulty to decipher who the character is is a mistake on my part. I'm glad that you liked it though! Also, this fic was written some time ago, so I didn't really realise the technicalities back then. Thanks for the review! ~ Lise x :)

Reviewer: IckleRonnieX
Date: 01/24/10 12:14
Chapter: Returning

I promised a review. And here it is.

Annalise... I didn't like this, you know? I LOVED IT. You are such a talented writer, seriously. The wording you used in this one-shot was beautiful it made me want to cry and I am not even joking. I also love the line "It is all beautiful to you, everything". It is such a pretty line and, like Julia said, it added a rhythm to the fic. Amazing.

Like I told you before (or I think I did), I was a little confused at first of what and who this was about, but I slowly began to understand when you mentioned the heat and the atmosphere but it finally hit me like a ton of bricks that it was about Hermione and that she was in Australia because of the kangaroos >.<

I still can't get over it. The words you chose are gorgeous. Wow. Wow. Wow.

I absolutely adored this, Annalise :) Now, I shall get going. I love you and I loved this. :D

Ronnie Xxx

Author's Response: Thank you to no end, Ronnie, seriously. Your review made me smile from ear to ear! I am incredibly happy you loved it so much! And thanks a milllion for the amazing review!!!! *tacklesquishes* ~ Annalise x :)

Reviewer: Sapphire at Dawn
Date: 01/21/10 5:21
Chapter: Returning

Wow, Annalise! This was amazing, I really loved it. I loved the tense it was in, it really added to the mood and I liked that you left it up to the reader to figure out who it was. I thought it was about Harry at first, because of the whole 'saviour of the world' thing, but I began to guess when Eucalyptus trees were mentioned ;)

I think it also might say something about how Hermione has grown, or the state that she was in that she didn't worry that the memory charm wasn't as strong as she thought it was.

The emotion was beautiful and I love the line 'It's all beautiful to you, everything.'

Wonderful!

Sarah x

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it Sarah :) And, originally, I had always decided upon it being about Hermione, but I wanted it to be very abstract so that the reader could decided on their own along the way, so I am pleased you thought it added to the story :) I really love writing about Australia, and really emphasizing the outback and heat and kangaroos, when I've only seen kangaroos a few times. The east coast is the most populated in Australia, and the outback has very sparce towns, but writing about the outback is incredibly fun. :P Thanks for the review! ~ Annalise x :)

Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 01/17/10 19:01
Chapter: Returning

You can sing, banner, AND write? HOW IS THAT FAIR? *grumbles*

This fic was truly and utterly AMAZING. Earns a spot on my fave list, it does.

I liked how you wrote stuff so directly, so clearly, yet it was still mysterious, as at fist one didn't know who you were talking about (well, I didn't). I love the rhythm of the story, and I love this line It takes the sting away. *sighs*

Greatly done! And congrats on getting it up XD. I can't wait to read more of your fics! Huggles,
Andi

Author's Response: Thank you, Andi!!!!! Really, you made me smile a lot! *coughidon'tthinkanyoneknowswhoitisatthestartcough* :) *huggles* ~ Annalise x :)

Reviewer: ron lover
Date: 01/17/10 11:46
Chapter: Returning

ANNALISE.

This was *so* good! I love the tense in this story. It fit so well. The title is also very good.

I like the way you describe where she is. The detail is good. I chuckled a bit with the kangaroos. :D

I'm sorry about the crappyness of this review. Like really sorry. I'll make up for it with your next story. *hinthint* : )

*hugs*

Author's Response: Thank you so much Alyssa! I'm so glad you liked it! I decided to make it very Australian :D Cause it is really funny writing about it with the kangaroos. :) *hugs* ~ Annalise x :)

Reviewer: the opaleye
Date: 01/17/10 0:32
Chapter: Returning

Annalise! Annalise! Annalise!

This is beautiful! You have really blown me away. It took me a while to get what it was about ( I guess I'm a little slow today!) but I absolutely loved it. You used the second person perspective really well. I love second person fics and you pulled it off brilliantly. The flow of the fic was lovely as well. For a first time fic this is truly impressive.

I especially loved the repetition of this line:

It is all beautiful to you, everything.

It created a sort of rhythm throughout the fic which I loved.

I cannot wait to see what else you come up with, now. You show lots of promise! Congratulations for finally getting this published on the archives. Your persistence has paid off!

*hugs*

Julia XD

Author's Response: Julia! Julia! Julia! Thank you so so so so so much!!!! I am so glad you liked it :D You don't know how much your praise means to me so, thank you. :) *hugs* ~ Annalise x :)

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