Good chapeter! Come back and write more and when you do, contact me so that I'll know!
I like this and you may need to write more chapters! Only two? How disappointing! You must write more! This is very good!
It is very interesting and suspencful so far. Well done. Hopefully you continue to write, without taking too long to put up another chapter. I am anticipating your future progress with this story.
Author's Response: I hope this was fast enough for you! I try to write and upload as often as possible, but with school and friends and everything, it's a bit tough. I'm glad you enjoyed this, and I hope you also enjoy Chapter 2, which should be up soon. I've uploaded it already, it just needs to be validated. Again, I'm glad you enjoyed this, and thanks for reviewing!
Aww! I love this story! Poor Draco Please Post More Soon!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm so happy you enjoy it! Chapter 2 should be up soon and I hope you enjoy that too!!
So this is a really good start. I quite enjoy joy it. It is really new and refreshing. I think that you are off to a great start on this story.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you enjoy it! Beginnings are always a bit tough for me to write, so I'm so happy that you think I've done a good job with this one! Hope you enjoy Chapter 2!
So this is annoying, I spent 10 minutes on a lovely long review, when it then proceeded to delete itself spontaneously. Oh well, here I go:
I thought this was a good start to your story. I’m very happy that you chose to start it half-way through the year and not on their first day as Head Girl and Boy, as thus you have established a pattern of normalcy and introduced conflict! I thought the narrative style was unusual, being completely in present tense, but you pulled it off by your strong characterisation of Hermione. Her “voice” felt effortless and had a subtle yet distinct Hermioneish feel, which made reading it a pleasure. I guess Draco’s change in attitude will be explained later on, which adds some plot and mystery. I loved your take on Zabini, as he is always portrayed as a horrible git who tries influences Draco for the worst. I think that it would have worked better, though, if you had made a reference to Crabbe and Goyle, maybe mentioning that she barely ever saw Malfoy with them anymore, and that instead he seemed to have grown closer to Zabini (just a thought) However, though I can appreciate the relationship between him, and Draco, I have a hard time picturing him being very “nice and rather funny” with Hermione. Maybe less rude and occasionally pleasant. :-P
Oh, and I thought is was hilarious when she referred to Draco as “the blond!!”
I’ll keep my eye on this story
Author's Response: Wow! I love reviews like these! Constructive criticism is always helpful, and I thank you for telling me your opinion! I'm so happy that you think I did a good job at sounding like Hermione! I have just added Chapter 2, though it has to be validated. Hope you enjoy that one too!