i love your story! it feels very real and i wish you would have made it longer but you are right when you say that it would be to drawn out. anyway good job! btw Ron's eyes are blue
You should have added something about Draco Malfoy attacking Hermione and Hannah somewhere before or after this chapter, otherwise the story was great!
My reaction to the ending: "Argh! Everyone spit on Ron! SPIT i tell you!
sick. thats just sick. >=(
*put up a warning*
Author's Response: What exactly is sick?
I loved this story. It was full of everything a short romance should be full of. I'm a romance nerd. And the otter key ring...nice touch.
My reply would definately have been "wait until he finds out what you said about his daughter"
yOU CAN REALLY GET ACROSS EMOTION. I WANT TO KILL MIRANDA. SHE'S JUST SO...PERKY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
OH NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
RON GOT A GIRLFRIEND!!!!!!!! OH NO!!!
It had taken Hermione a while to fall asleep after that night in the kitchen, not to mention many non-sexual thoughts, such as sour milk, Harry, dentist drills and fried toast.
Okay, sour milk, dentist drills and fried toast I can understand, but Harry as a non-sexual thought...kinda creepy, seeing as Daniel makes him look very dashing. 10/10
Author's Response: Daniel Radcliffe is only Harry in the movies. And either way, Hermione and he are platonic friends.
"Harry's a good listener, too," Ginny said offhandedly, investigating a purple jumper she had just found at the bottom of the wardrobe. "Though sometimes I think he's just staring at my boobs rather than actually listening." She grinned and turned to Hermione. "The other day, I didn't put a bra on and went on about absolute rubbish to see what he would do. He just nodded and 'agreed with me'
That was funny! I can see that happening, and boy is it vivid! haha 10/10
That...that...*gestulates wildly* WITCH!!! I H8 her!! 10/10
i luv this story. congratulations on getting featured!! its a great idea, and i love how you tied victor in. five stars. out of five...
I love this story, it's so good. I must have read it five times since I first saw it. I'm really glad you re-wrote it, it's an amazing story.
I really loved this story!
I was so sad when they broke up and very very angry when he didnt come home alone!!
cant wait to read your next work =)
wow this story is wonderful.
well thought and well written throughout.
i hope you keep up the excellant work.
s,Pokorski