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Name: ginnyrulz13 (Signed) · Date: 04/09/08 22:31 · For: September Nineteenth
nevermind, miranda cant marry krum, she can have someone else , i suppose... haha and yay(!!) that miranda is finally out of the picture!

Name: Ron x Hermione (Signed) · Date: 04/09/08 20:12 · For: Catching Up
"Typical? Having your baby is typical?" Hermione asked, folding her arms across her chest. Ron had said some stupid things in his life, but this took the biscuit. Best part of the entire chapter! Rather than Ginny's, here we see Hermione's fieriness and stubbornness.

Another part of him felt sad; he had missed out on important stages of his daughter's life - her birth, first steps and first word.

"I'm sorry you had to do this alone," Ron said, feeling guilty.
Aw, Ron--- I love his characterization. The ups and downs in his and Hermione's relationship when he comes home is brilliant. It describes their feelings right as they're having the talk that Hermione so dreaded, ups and downs.

He took the stairs two at a time, leaving Hermione with the feeling that this could have gone better. Poor Hermione. Ron does always know how to ruin things, even if it isn't under the best of circumstances.

Harry turned to his old friend. "She's beautiful," he told Hermione, "just so …" he searched for a word to describe how amazing the baby was, but couldn't find one. Oh, I do believe that Harry is my favorite character in your story, despite how hard they are to choose between. This really, truly is great. I love how accepting of Ron and Hermione's you've made Harry. He didn't even question anything, like Ron did, only complimented on Hannah. Good work.

"Why do you care so much anyway, Hermione?" Ginny asked suspiciously. She turned to Hannah and pried Harry's glasses from her, and helped him put them back on. "I thought you were over Ron." I find this quite . . . unbelievable, I think? It just doesn't seem to me like anyone would speak this aloud. Obviously Hermione still has feelings for Ron, whether she loves him or not, because she has a child with him, and that half of Ron lives in Hannah, whom she loves. Also, to care about him enough to not inform him of a child, which would send him straight home, also tells how much she cares for him as well. It just seems oddly structured.

Better, we think. He's Hannah's Godfather, and he loves. I think you forgot a word here.

She did make a move to hug him but, at the last minute, lost her nerve and, instead, grabbed his hand for a firm shake. Ha ha, I do love the awkwardness of their past relationship.

Nice work, another great chapter.

~Lindsey :)

Name: ginnyrulz13 (Signed) · Date: 04/09/08 19:21 · For: The B.A.T
hey! miranda and krum would make such a cute couple!! then hermione can have ron. lovely plan if i do say so myself, lol

Name: ginnyrulz13 (Signed) · Date: 04/09/08 9:25 · For: St Mungo's
aw! thats so sweet! i hope ron finds out that miranda's lying soon.

Name: ginnyrulz13 (Signed) · Date: 04/09/08 9:15 · For: Hexed
hannah! i know she's not dead, but i hope she's ok!!

Name: ginnyrulz13 (Signed) · Date: 04/09/08 9:06 · For: Past and Present
good for hermione! how dare miranda talk about hannah like that?! evil women...

Name: ginnyrulz13 (Signed) · Date: 04/09/08 8:44 · For: Swing Low
aw! ron makes the perfect dad! why cant he see what a piece of work miranda is?!

Name: ginnyrulz13 (Signed) · Date: 04/08/08 21:25 · For: The Talk
ugh, that miranda is a piece of work. poor hermione!

Name: ginnyrulz13 (Signed) · Date: 04/08/08 17:09 · For: Catching Up
i thought ron's eyes were blue.

Name: ginnyrulz13 (Signed) · Date: 04/08/08 17:03 · For: Hello Daddy
aw! hannah's so cute! but i wonder how ron will take it?

Name: ginnyrulz13 (Signed) · Date: 04/08/08 16:57 · For: As the Months Pass
oh, dear! man, why did ron have to break it off with hermione? although, long-distance relationships never work.

Name: ginnyrulz13 (Signed) · Date: 04/08/08 16:44 · For: The Party
uhoh.. see! this is what can happen when you have sex before marriage! so, please wait!

Name: Potter lover for life (Signed) · Date: 04/05/08 23:52 · For: The Party
Oh My God
I loved your story. At first I hated it because Ron and Hermione were not together anymore and that Miranda girl was such a bitch. But I love the ending. Write another story but this time about Ginny and Harry.

Name: mia2223 (Signed) · Date: 03/29/08 6:30 · For: The B.A.T

Name: hola 07734 (Signed) · Date: 03/25/08 19:14 · For: Hello Daddy
Excellent! You understood the feelings of the characters very well!

Name: GrapeFace (Signed) · Date: 03/20/08 17:37 · For: Epilogue
Great story!!! 7 thumbs up.

Name: GrapeFace (Signed) · Date: 03/20/08 16:40 · For: The B.A.T
I like this chapter. This entire story is great. One of my friends started reading it but didn't get a chance to finish it so she made me raed it to her on the phone.

Name: Sagen (Signed) · Date: 03/14/08 13:57 · For: As the Months Pass
Oh my gosh! I have to say this is one of my most favourite stories every. It's just so sweet. I absolutly love it. Your a great writer.

Name: Ron x Hermione (Signed) · Date: 03/13/08 17:59 · For: Hello Daddy
Great chapter!

"I know I am," Harry said taking a seat next to Hermione quickly, mouthing 'sorry'. Poor Hermione! It's nice to see, though, that Harry hasn't gone off the deep end, gone crazy, or gotten killed, but that he is still a good, dear friend to Hermione.

He had told Miranda all about her. In fact, it had been her who had made him realise long-distance relationships never worked, she had even helped him write the final letter to Hermione, the love of his life or so he thought. Oh, what an absolute ho! How dare Miranda come into Ron's life and allow him to realize that. It might have been coming anyhow, but Miranda is obviously going to be a witch, and not just one with a wand.

"You you had a baby."

"Moooooooooo!" Hannah squealed, giggling loudly as she pulled at Buttercups ears.
Ha, I love how Hannah breaks this tension! That was hilarious!

"I'm looking at him," Hermione said, staring Ron in the eye, trying not to blink. Oh, gosh, this story just keeps getting better and better--- I can understand why so many people have favorited it. How awful, for the two of them to be put into this situation! Ron had better ditch Miranda or some catfights might go on.

I could just feel Hermione's anguish all throughout this chapter. I would have turned and ran, not stayed and stared at Ron in the face. Looking forward, again, to the next chapter! Great, fantastic work.

~Lindsey :)

Name: Ron x Hermione (Signed) · Date: 03/13/08 17:46 · For: As the Months Pass
It was more passionate, there were more tears, desperation and love between the two Gryffindors that any logical thought had escaped them. I really agree with this. No thought would have been put into thinking about those things, it all would have just been for false worry. What all teenagers think. But I do sympathize with Hermione, great, because she didn't know that this would happen. In this sentence, though, I have a slight nitpick. I think that you meant to add another little something to the end of this sentence, it just kind of runs on and ends without warning. Like, instead of ending it with just It was more passionate, there were more tears, desperation and love between the two Gryffindors so great that any logical thought at that moment had escaped them. It makes it more understandable.

There was so much she wanted to know, and not enough books to help her. Love this. It just adds to the fact, again, that you've decorated Hermione's character so well.

I can't tell him. I just can't. I won't. You've named all of the key points in why Hermione should and should not tell him, explaining very nicely to the reader why she could tell Ron about the baby. Nice work.

You're thousands of miles away from me and relationships are hard enough without that much space between the two people. I think we should take a break from each other for a while, or at least until I return to England. While long distance relationships are sure to never work, this is quite devastating, I know, to Hermione. Maybe she had already known that this was going to happen, but not thought on it too much, only thinking of their last night together. And look at where that had gotten her. Poor thing.

who had thin dark red hair and big blue eyes that strongly suspected would darken to brown over time. There should be a 'we're in between 'that' and 'strongly'.

At the beginning of August, Molly received a letter from Ron, which informed her that he and Harry would be returning home in a few weeks. When she told Hermione the news, Hermione spent those weeks writing and re-writing a speech containing everything she needed to tell Ron, including how she would tell him and a list of questions she figured Ron would ask. What a struggle that would be, to not write to your baby's father, your former lover, your best friend for so long, especially if she knew where he was, what he was doing, and most especially if it's been a year that has gone by since the child has been born! It's a good thing Hermione is so strong. Many couldn't do it, and I'm surprised that Mrs. Weasley contributed to her decision in not telling Ron-- I know that she loves Hermione dearly, but Ron is her son. Wouldn't she want to tell him?

Hermione reached down and lifted Hannah out of her crib and kissing her cheek. In this sentence you either need to omit the 'and' and place a comma before 'kissing' or replace 'kissing' with 'kissed'. Tiny little nitpick I saw.

"I'd like to introduce to you Miranda," Ron said. "She's my girlfriend." Didn't see that one coming! Wow, how awful it would be for Hermione to have to tell her now! I feel just horrid for her. Nice cliff-hanger by the way. If the story wasn't already updated I might have gone crazy.

~Lindsey :)

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