Reviewer: AshleyBaby22
Date: 06/18/10 20:38
Chapter: Chapter 1

you should make this into a story. i like the whole lilly-sirius bff thing.

Author's Response: Well i guess i have you to thank, I always thought of this as a one shot but... after reading your comment i started trying to write a second chapter. So who knows? I'm glad you liked the Lily-Sirius relationship, it is definitely one of my favourite parts too, it was also rather fun to write.

Reviewer: Rikku
Date: 01/14/10 14:59
Chapter: Chapter 1

I liked the story very much :) it's really long since I've written reviews, mainly because I normally don't have very much to say except good job :-D
But, I wanted to let you know my favorite part and something I perhaps would've liked to know more about, so here they are:
my absolute favorite part is Lily acting uncomfortable around James. It's much more realistic than when they just have it all figured out and no problems talking to each other and so forth. Good job on that!
I would've liked to know more about Sirius though. It feels as if there wasn't closure about that part of the story because we're not told about what he does further on, like being presented with a problem but not the solution.

All in all though, I really liked this story, great job and keep up the good writing!

Author's Response: I see what you mean with Sirius, what i was aiming to do was to show a more thoughtful Sirius. I probably should have done it in a different way or like you suggested fixed the problem. Thank you for pointing this out, it is something I will not do in the future. And I'm glad that you liked the rest of the story :D Lauren

Reviewer: XxCourtneyxCeexX
Date: 12/29/09 15:12
Chapter: Chapter 1

lol ok??
That was good, a bit odd at the same time but still very good!
I'm amazed you managed to fit all of that into 1 chapter, as when i clicked on the story and seen it was only 1 chapter long and completed i was quite shocked to be honest!
Anyway well done!! Very good =D

Author's Response: Admittedly i am a little odd. =) Yeah it had to be a one-shot as it was for my final. Although, i am not very good at writing chaptered fics so it was probably best this way. Lauren =)

Reviewer: _violetroses
Date: 12/25/09 16:25
Chapter: Chapter 1

the ending was great! you had them act both like normal teenagers....i've had friends who've acted that way around the people they liked. keep it up! :)

Author's Response: Thank you :) I'm glad you liked it.

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