An amazing, moving story, Alyssa! Repeat that in your mind a few hundred times, then you'll know how great it was. Personally, I was expecting a sequel. I wonder how it turned out with that little girl. The quote, "they take it for advantage" (something like that, right?) really stucked with me. The concluded sentence, that's what I call it.
"The spark in his eyes were gone."
Ah, I just love that part, too, especially when the girl finds out that the spark came back because of a GIRL. Even I'm getting mad. Wizards just don't understand what kind of great blessing has come in their way! And they all take it for granted. There's really nothing else to say except that this fic you've written is brilliant, don't ever doubt that you're a good writer, and there's nothing to critcise about this fic! It's absolutely amazing. End of.
Author's Response: I thought I responded to this already! This thing about the girl made me mad too! They really don't understand. At all. We Muggles would make better wizards. Thank you so much for the compliments. =)
Absolutely love this.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
that was really good and really sad. i really liked the style that you wrote this with, i think it went nicely with the story. good job! =)
Author's Response: Thank you, and I'm glad that you like the style. That is the only way I know how to write a story without getting tenses wrong. Thank you so much for readiing and reviewing.