How many times can I read this and still glow over how well it was written????? :) Yes, this is, like, my hundredth review for this story, but it is my favorite, and I just can't stop thinking of how well you captured the emotions! This Fiction made Merope my favorite character! :) Great job!
Oh my gosh oh my gosh oh my gosh!!!!!! I'm crying, actually crying! Natalie, why did you have to make me cry?
This was beautiful, and it is wrenching at my heart and now I feel cold and light headed and a little miserable, yet happy... How can you have done this to me?
Okay, an automatic favorite, because it's about my favorite characters. I loved, loved, loved how you said that Merope hated the color green, because it's so funny how she viewed it. When I think of green, I think of new life, lushness, but she just saw hatred, darkness, and misery. Instead, she loved yellow, and I love some of your subtle inputs of that color, like when she felt a thousand flowers bursting in her, or when she was glowing... I appreciated that she love the rain, because I do too, but also because he found comfort in it, and peace.
The best line was when she giggled about herself already being dead, and my heart broke into infinitesimal pieces. It's so true! When people leave you, a part of you dies. It's so sad that Merope was so naive, and also that she ruined her life by being so ignorant of what was happening.
I appreciated, too, that she just couldn't stay at the inn because of the name Tom.
Another heart-wrenching moment? The fact that she believed in the fates! That theme throughout really drew it all together, and gave some insight into the character of Merope, who seemed to think that what had happened was directed more by some other force. It was also sad that she felt like her life was finally great when the fates had turned away from her! That was a wonderful unexpected turn.
But what really pulled me was when she was with her baby. No mother should have to tell their child that their sorry... I also found it pleasantly funny that both Tom and Merope had hoped that their child would be famous and celebrated. I know you did that on purpose, because of course, Tom did become famous, rather infamous, but he was also intelligent and handsome.
It's nice to know that Merope was finally at peace, and I hope there is no green where she is, because then her afterlife would be hell!
Again, a beautifully tragic story, and I'm finally calming down- well, my heart is still wildly pounding, but my tears have slowed down, so...
I have a request, Natalie. Would you consider writing about Cecelia's reaction to this entire affair? You know, Tom's Muggle companion. I feel pretty confident that you would do such a story justice.
What a wonderful Story! I'm sure it will haunt my dreams, and my later life when I have my own relationships and children...
Wow, that's probably my longest review ever! Keep up the great work, and please consider writing the Cecilia story!!!!!!!
Nagini Riddle :) :) :)
So lets' see, I nominated this for 2 QSQ's last year, and yet didn;t leave a review. I have to be the dumbest dumb dumbo in the world. This will be barely coherent (it's been a long afternoon), but I do think this was an incredibly well written story. Merope is such a tragic character. Badly treated by everyone, and yet she wants so much to be loved for who she is. *sob*. Her prayer at the end is just really sad and horribly prophetic, but not in the way she wanted. *sigh* ~Carole~ (14)
Author's Response: It's been a long afternoon? Really? Really? Hehehe. This is one of my favourite stories written by me, if I may say so lol. I didn't think I'd finish it off in time but I did (although I'm still a bit annoyed we never got our finals points <.<) Merope's story is so sad, though. :'( Thanks for the reviewwwww! And the noms, as well. <333
Awh :( Very sad, but of course, it was going to be. I gives a very different light on the story, which is exactly what I was looking for. I liked it!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! :) I do feel sad for Merope as the men in her life treated her like s***. ~Natalie
Why does this only have four reviews??? Like pretty much everything of yours I've read so far, Natalie, this is amazing. I think you did a great job of Merope's characterisation, but I really loved where you went with Tom. The way he was sometimes cruel and very arrogant and how we got to see that it's not only his looks which his son inherited from him.
I loved the idea of Merope hating green and the way that carried throughout the story. I also though the way you fragmented it was great, and in each fragment we saw a gradual change.
One last thing - I loved how you connected her with Tom the barman - especially as in the books, Tom (junior) dislikes the fact that he has such a common name... it was just a really great way of tying everything in together.
Author's Response: First thing, thank you for catching that error in my other fic A Tale of Six Perspectives. Forgot to mention it in my response. >.> The response from readers was so abysmal (as in zero) for a long time that I was worried. Where did I go wrong? Was it that horrendous? With time, I came to accept it as just one of those things that happen in the world of fanfiction. Lol. For some reason, this fic was easier to write, and I finished it off in one night. Maybe, my brain is hardwired into writing depressing stories. Writing Tom Sr was an interesting as well as ugly experience. His personality was clearer to me than a lot of HP characters who had more appearances in the books. Same for Merope, though I felt only pity for her. Their story is strangely alluring to me. The lies, deception and heartbreak just make it a great thing to deal with as a writer. As for 'Tom', I always wondered how Riddle felt about sharing a name with the barman at Leaky Cauldron. :D So, it was fun working that into the story. Thank you for yet another fabulous review, Katrina!
That was soo good!! I've always looked for a good fanfic about what actually happened with Merope and I think you've done a fabulous job of it. I really like the whole theme of green, it's one colour that I love and hate. Finally, I really like how you've ended it, it's so ironic about how famous, illustrious and celebrated Tom ended up being - only amongst the Death Eaters of course.
Author's Response: Oh, I wouldn't say Voldemort was a Death Eater. That was the name given to his band of followers. ;) But - yeah - the irony was what I wanted to capture. I do feel bad for Merope, but she's so interesting, isn't she? Her story is one of the many in HP which intrigue me. I hope I did it justice. You hate green? Aww! I love it. :D Thanks for reading and reviewing! It always brightens my day to know people enjoy my writing. ~Natalie
i love your story i was just how i think it would have happen ten stars!!!
Author's Response: TEN STARS?! THANKS! :D Yes, well, I have to thank ol' Dumbly, too, for his credible hypotheses. ;)
This story is just amazing! I have never even thought of reading a story about her, and I'm glad that I read it. This one shot is wonderfully made. It tells her life so well. It was very believable.
I actually read this three times in a row because I like it so much. The way he acts before he has the potion is probably my favorite. He acted how I imagined him to. He was also amazing when he was on the potion. I think that you showed what the potion did very well. And then her actions and why she gave him the potions are great. It is all just so believable. It was like I was reading her life story and why she did those things.
The way you sepperated the sections was great too. It showed how her life was changing with events that were nesscessary to the story without adding uneeded stuff. You also didn't force anything.
The way he left her was also amazing. It seemed like it would actually happen like that. And also her burning the books. That added so much to the story without seeming like you tried so hard to make it work.
I can't tell you my favorite part because I love all of it. I really do. The characterization was great. We don't know that much about Tom but he fit what we do know about him. Merope (in my opinioni) is tricky to write properly, but you write her so well.
I know that when I need a good story to read I'll come back to this one (or other ones that you write). I just love it! I'm so excited to see what you write next. : D
Author's Response: Alyssa!
You, my friend, are truly one of the most encouraging people I've ever known. I don't even know how to begin to thank you. :)
I am so glad that you liked it that much. I'd given up on writing anything for WTM one shot because I was completely taken up by RL, and the one idea which I had for the task wasn't working out at all. But then, one day before the last date, or was it two days? Anyway, I had this sudden stroke of inspiration and I just started writing. And it could have been total c***, because I just wrote it like that, without any planning, but it seems to have turned out fine. Whew!
Tom was easier to write, because I'd always pictured him as a Muggle version of his son. Perhaps not as sadistic, but the cruelty had to be inherited partly from him. (As you know, the Guant men weren't exactly the kindest folks around.) It was Merope I had trouble with. She was - a combination of strength and weakness, of hope and despair, and I'd no idea when one would come. All I knew was, it would come out terrible if I wrote her in a prosaic manner - because her story is not prosaic at all. There's romance, there' s passion, there's deception, and betrayal, and loss - as such, I had to adopt a bit of a poetic feel for her story.
YOU READ IT THREE TIMES? wow! I don't know if there can be a bigger compliment than that. And, about what I write next, hee hee, just wait! ;) Thanks so much for the review.
Ah so devastating. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks! :D