Reviews For Shattered
Reviewer: FlicketyG
Date: 01/22/10 8:07
Chapter: Shattered

This is so good!! ok, this shall be a normal review now, not the painfully gushy and crazy stuff I usually spout!
This is the first Dark/ angsty fic that I have read (I usually stick to the romance or generals) and I have to say that I love it, it gives you a really interesting and different perspective of Tom, a side that you don't usually see which I really liked. I also like how you portrayed his father, it was kind of how I had imagined it which is always nice!
There we go! I can be normal-ish!!!
yay!!
xxx

Author's Response: Very normal, I'm impressed. Yeah, it's not usually my category either but it's Tom so, ya know... :D

Reviewer: dominiqueweasley
Date: 01/13/10 21:15
Chapter: Shattered

Well, we all know you are brilliant at writing Tom Riddle...
I loved this insight into young Voldemort's mind at one of his darkest moments... thanks for the interesting read!

Author's Response: You're welcome, thanks for reading and reviewing :D

Reviewer: Saif
Date: 12/11/09 9:58
Chapter: Shattered

Can't believe I missed this one as well!
You're right, this was a prequel to MTT, I kept thinking of how he was going to meet Keedie in his next year at Hogwarts.

I loved the dialogue, so Tom Riddlesque!

Author's Response: I really enjoyed writing this, actually. :D

Reviewer: Essence of Potter
Date: 12/03/09 16:34
Chapter: Shattered

Ooooh! Very good! You write Tom so well. The emotionless thing he is..was? (Ok I know he's a fictional character!) Anyway, I liked how you protrayed (if that's how you spell it) his father, he was so like Tom, didn't care about anyone but himself. Litterly until his dying breath. Very well writen!
Oh and I love your name! Ellynia, so exotic!
Fionnuala X

Author's Response: Thanks, and I dunno why I find it easy writing Tom, but I'm glad you think it's good :)

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Date: 12/03/09 14:21
Chapter: Shattered

Ah, I love how you portray Tom Riddle in this light. The way you show his inner doubts about himself and his distaste for all things emotional is quite telling of a character that committed the ultimate acts of evil. The last line was so poignant to that effect.

In terms of grammar, etc (since this is a homework assignment):

"rawing out strength and praying on weakness" It should be 'preying'

"gifted with magical gifts beyond contemplation" You may want to change one of the uses of 'gift'.

I loved your intermittent use of second person. It made it seem, at least to me, that Tom was talking about himself, but he refused to openly contemplate love in a manner so personal as the first person. I don't know if you were going for that, but I got a little of that from it.

All in all, excellence abounds and it's definitely on par with your regular work, and I loved reading more about the ever-fascinating Tom Riddle.

~Jess

PS-I loved the latent reference to Keeds, btw. :D

Author's Response: Can't have Tom without Keeds ;-)

Reviewer: RGSH
Date: 12/03/09 13:36
Chapter: Shattered

Another Tom story! I can't believe I'm saying this but I love Tom. It's really awful how you write cus the reader feels bad for Tom even though hes murdering people lol. I actualy really love how human you make him its so realistic.

Author's Response: I love Tom too. Thanks for R&R ing :D

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